A Plea For Honesty
Truth is the answer55 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Jay,
I agree. Though I often get in trouble for my honesty, I always try to treat people as I'd like to be treated. Coddling and fluff won't help me improve. When people speak the truth - in love - I am adult enough to accept it and thank them. (Most of the time, I think!)
Notes:
1.) I appreciate the way you always manage to stick in those poetic devices that move your pieces to another level - such as:
The search for truth, a treasured trait,
is sometimes very hard to find.
When found the treasures that await,
--> just in your opening lines, I see - alliteration, assonance, consonance, nice unpredictable rhymes
2.) And good things may be awaiting you.
--> I stumbled over this line. I think it has one too many syllables.
Thanks so much!
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Jay,
I agree. Though I often get in trouble for my honesty, I always try to treat people as I'd like to be treated. Coddling and fluff won't help me improve. When people speak the truth - in love - I am adult enough to accept it and thank them. (Most of the time, I think!)
Notes:
1.) I appreciate the way you always manage to stick in those poetic devices that move your pieces to another level - such as:
The search for truth, a treasured trait,
is sometimes very hard to find.
When found the treasures that await,
--> just in your opening lines, I see - alliteration, assonance, consonance, nice unpredictable rhymes
2.) And good things may be awaiting you.
--> I stumbled over this line. I think it has one too many syllables.
Thanks so much!
Comment Written 14-Jan-2021
Comment from oliver818
This poem is full of good advice, I enjoyed reading it. It flows well too and has a nice rhythm to it. Thanks for sharing this and have a really great day
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This poem is full of good advice, I enjoyed reading it. It flows well too and has a nice rhythm to it. Thanks for sharing this and have a really great day
Comment Written 14-Jan-2021
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Jaybird1,
Marvelous piece of poetry having lucid as well as PERFECTLY matching the theme phraseology, enchanting flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting its theme.
3rd stanza and the last two lines are particularly noteworthy.
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Hello Jaybird1,
Marvelous piece of poetry having lucid as well as PERFECTLY matching the theme phraseology, enchanting flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting its theme.
3rd stanza and the last two lines are particularly noteworthy.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2021
Comment from Wendy G
This is a very relevant plea for honesty, and people may be better to say that they don't know where the truth lies, and look for it expressed in the consistent righteous and respectful actions of others. Actions not words, will show where the heart is.
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This is a very relevant plea for honesty, and people may be better to say that they don't know where the truth lies, and look for it expressed in the consistent righteous and respectful actions of others. Actions not words, will show where the heart is.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2021
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I believe in the truth. I hate lies...
Your poem is right: "Just tell it straight and tell it true,
you will feel better at the end. The truth provides the needed glue, to bind you with a longtime friend."
Friendship is definitely built on trust. Lies destroy it.
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I believe in the truth. I hate lies...
Your poem is right: "Just tell it straight and tell it true,
you will feel better at the end. The truth provides the needed glue, to bind you with a longtime friend."
Friendship is definitely built on trust. Lies destroy it.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
Comment from MissMerri
I am in complete agreement with the theme of this piece, Jay. You expressed it so well in this creative poem. I see nothing I'd want to change, unless it would be to leave off the "And" in the final line. I don't think you need it at all and the meter is better without it, but then, your poems always have great meter, as well as excellent rhymes, so I leave the choice to you. MM
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I am in complete agreement with the theme of this piece, Jay. You expressed it so well in this creative poem. I see nothing I'd want to change, unless it would be to leave off the "And" in the final line. I don't think you need it at all and the meter is better without it, but then, your poems always have great meter, as well as excellent rhymes, so I leave the choice to you. MM
Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
I totally agree! The best friends are the ones who know the real you, and how can they know the real you unless you are honest with them. I know how much I appreciate it when my friends tell me what they REALLY think and they REALLY feel.
Thank you for sharing!
Susan
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I totally agree! The best friends are the ones who know the real you, and how can they know the real you unless you are honest with them. I know how much I appreciate it when my friends tell me what they REALLY think and they REALLY feel.
Thank you for sharing!
Susan
Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
Comment from patcelaw
There are so many in this world who will lie to your face when to be honest would be so much easier. There is saying when you liem it takes another to cover for the first one.
Patricia
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There are so many in this world who will lie to your face when to be honest would be so much easier. There is saying when you liem it takes another to cover for the first one.
Patricia
Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
Comment from nancyjam
Your poem carries an important message - one, I'm afraid is often
forgotten today.
Excellent Sonnet form with strong meter and rhyme.
The end couplet sums it up nicely.
Thanks for sharing.
Nancy
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Your poem carries an important message - one, I'm afraid is often
forgotten today.
Excellent Sonnet form with strong meter and rhyme.
The end couplet sums it up nicely.
Thanks for sharing.
Nancy
Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
Comment from dragonpoet
This sonnet is so true. Telling the truth is easier of all concerned. No guild or hurt on either side. Also, often lies have more different and bad effects than you planned one.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
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This sonnet is so true. Telling the truth is easier of all concerned. No guild or hurt on either side. Also, often lies have more different and bad effects than you planned one.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
