The Girl That Once Was Me
Looking back to childhood31 total reviews
Comment from David Newkirk
Really well done. My ear for meter is imperfect, but I think you were in good iambic for most or all of it.. The sentiment is lovely and the character comes through. No suggestions - I can see why this won the contest. Well done!
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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Really well done. My ear for meter is imperfect, but I think you were in good iambic for most or all of it.. The sentiment is lovely and the character comes through. No suggestions - I can see why this won the contest. Well done!
Comment Written 14-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much David, I appreciate the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from nancyjam
Easy to see why this won the contest. It is so true. We sometimes wish
we were young again and look back on certain moments fondly.
Lovely rhyming and strong meter make this a pleasure to read.
Congratulations!
Nancy
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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Easy to see why this won the contest. It is so true. We sometimes wish
we were young again and look back on certain moments fondly.
Lovely rhyming and strong meter make this a pleasure to read.
Congratulations!
Nancy
Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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Thank you Nancy. I really appreciate the review and lovely comments. I'm really honored by the six stars.
Beth
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are engaging, interesting and creative. I enjoyed the read of this poem. These words made me ponder on my own childhood.
The poem flows and connects well. I especially liked the last stanza as
it ended on a positive note. Great Poem!
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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The author's words are engaging, interesting and creative. I enjoyed the read of this poem. These words made me ponder on my own childhood.
The poem flows and connects well. I especially liked the last stanza as
it ended on a positive note. Great Poem!
Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I'm glad you liked it. Beth
Comment from Susan Larson
What beautiful memories you have of your childhood and how beautifully you describe them. It sounds like you were an only child, but you did very well to entertain yourself with your imagination. No surprise that you won the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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What beautiful memories you have of your childhood and how beautifully you describe them. It sounds like you were an only child, but you did very well to entertain yourself with your imagination. No surprise that you won the contest.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thank you Susan, I was an only child. I appreciate you comments and the review.
Beth
Comment from kmoss
Congrats on winning the contest with this gem about being a child! It's important to keep some of that joy with you throughout your life. Thanks for sharing. Good picture also!
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Congrats on winning the contest with this gem about being a child! It's important to keep some of that joy with you throughout your life. Thanks for sharing. Good picture also!
Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thank you for reviewing this and for your congratulations. It is always fun to win.
Beth
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Beth. Congratulations on you win in this contest I enjoyed your memories and although lonely at times you made the best of your childhood and was loved anyway. A really nice poem Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Hi Beth. Congratulations on you win in this contest I enjoyed your memories and although lonely at times you made the best of your childhood and was loved anyway. A really nice poem Cheers Christine
Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thank you Christine, I appreciate the review and the lovely comments and congratulations. I'm glad you like it.
Beth
Comment from Sumpta
I enjoyed this poem about childhood, which is totally different from adulthood. The memories, innocence, love and peace of mind that comes with childhood is just so wonderful.
May God bless our children.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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I enjoyed this poem about childhood, which is totally different from adulthood. The memories, innocence, love and peace of mind that comes with childhood is just so wonderful.
May God bless our children.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from equestrik
I really love this presentation. The oicture is a wonderful example of a child just being a child. My early years were much the same as I was raised on a farm.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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I really love this presentation. The oicture is a wonderful example of a child just being a child. My early years were much the same as I was raised on a farm.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the review and comments. I was a country kid and an only child.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This poem is excellent in all respects--skillfully-composed in ballad stanza, vividly descriptive of a good childhood, with just a tinge of sadness over loneliness, but remembering great use of imagination--nostalgia at its best.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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This poem is excellent in all respects--skillfully-composed in ballad stanza, vividly descriptive of a good childhood, with just a tinge of sadness over loneliness, but remembering great use of imagination--nostalgia at its best.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and comments. I'm so glad you like it.
Smiles.
Comment from Patricia Cammish
This is a beautiful, gentle and sensitive poem with excellent metre and rhyme.
Your illustration is totally apt.
Are you, like me, an only child?
There is a difference and it lasts.
Your poem is very well constructed with a lovely conclusion.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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This is a beautiful, gentle and sensitive poem with excellent metre and rhyme.
Your illustration is totally apt.
Are you, like me, an only child?
There is a difference and it lasts.
Your poem is very well constructed with a lovely conclusion.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for the lovely review and comment. Yes, I am an only child. I didn't even have any close neighbors who had children so I had to make up on my own games. I really appreciate the six stars.
