Heart Crafted Poems -2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Hugs and Kisses"Musings of an old man -2021
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Comment from Sumpta
It is really needed and helps to calm our nerves at during some stressed up moments. A warm hug does a lot for a broken heart.
All the best in this contest and always.
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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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It is really needed and helps to calm our nerves at during some stressed up moments. A warm hug does a lot for a broken heart.
All the best in this contest and always.
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thank you Sumpta, I appreciate it
Comment from Mia Twysted
This new era we are in keeps us futher apart. We are lacking that human interaction that many of us grew up with. This piece says to me that we need to find a way back to being a little bit more connected.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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This new era we are in keeps us futher apart. We are lacking that human interaction that many of us grew up with. This piece says to me that we need to find a way back to being a little bit more connected.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thanks Mia
Comment from equestrik
This is a very relevant poem for the times! I like your overall presentation and your words ring true to how so many of us are feeling about the lack of human touch right now. Best to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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This is a very relevant poem for the times! I like your overall presentation and your words ring true to how so many of us are feeling about the lack of human touch right now. Best to you in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thanks much!
Comment from rjuselius
This is a brilliant entry for this particular contest dear jlr! I love the soft sentiment and commentary. Surely this will do very well.
Thank you for sharing a laughter!
Good luck!
Blessings and a larger than life hug!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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This is a brilliant entry for this particular contest dear jlr! I love the soft sentiment and commentary. Surely this will do very well.
Thank you for sharing a laughter!
Good luck!
Blessings and a larger than life hug!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Rebekka, you are so kind! Super virtual hugs!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a strong poem with an interesting coherent storyline. It has a competent varied rhyming scheme. The only technical weakness is
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that follow each other.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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This is a strong poem with an interesting coherent storyline. It has a competent varied rhyming scheme. The only technical weakness is
withheld
withholding
that follow each other.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thanks much Katherine
Comment from Bill Schott
This four-line poem, Hugs and Kisses, has the proper formatting and reminds the readers of th3 closeness we have forfeited in order to fight the virus.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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This four-line poem, Hugs and Kisses, has the proper formatting and reminds the readers of th3 closeness we have forfeited in order to fight the virus.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Bill,Thank you!
Comment from Wendy G
The need for physical touch is so very important, enriching all our relationships and making life pleasurable and good. But ... now we must show our care by not hugging .... just in case. Cruel irony. Well written!
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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The need for physical touch is so very important, enriching all our relationships and making life pleasurable and good. But ... now we must show our care by not hugging .... just in case. Cruel irony. Well written!
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Wendy, thank you.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi JLR,
This is a good entry for the 4-line rhyming contest. Good Luck in the voting booths!
The thing I've missed the most during this pandemic is playing guitar in the worship team at church. It's been 10 months now since the last Sunday I was with with this group. We always practiced every Wednesday as well. No let up. The virus is still surging. Hospitals overwhelmed.
But what about those seniors who are stuck in a room in some nursing home? They wear a mask all day, and no visitors. I can, at least, get in my car and drive to the grocery store, breakfast occasionally with my wife at a safe restaurant, or take a walk or hike in the woods.
Good rhymes for the poem... "withheld/ rebelled/ impelled", and the near rhyme of "shelved". Also one inner rhyme included, "welled".
I sense the frustration and sadness in your poem. Most people need that human touch. We are social species after all.
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Hi JLR,
This is a good entry for the 4-line rhyming contest. Good Luck in the voting booths!
The thing I've missed the most during this pandemic is playing guitar in the worship team at church. It's been 10 months now since the last Sunday I was with with this group. We always practiced every Wednesday as well. No let up. The virus is still surging. Hospitals overwhelmed.
But what about those seniors who are stuck in a room in some nursing home? They wear a mask all day, and no visitors. I can, at least, get in my car and drive to the grocery store, breakfast occasionally with my wife at a safe restaurant, or take a walk or hike in the woods.
Good rhymes for the poem... "withheld/ rebelled/ impelled", and the near rhyme of "shelved". Also one inner rhyme included, "welled".
I sense the frustration and sadness in your poem. Most people need that human touch. We are social species after all.
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Kimbob, Right in lock-step with you on the total shut down and the way it has curtailed so much, I was a very active hospice volunteer now on the shelf.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Human needs missing
Hugs and Kisses
by JLR
Hello, Jim,
Great entry for the
4 line rhyming poem writing prompt contest.
I love your poem. It touched my heart. I know what you mean. Well chosen words. Excellent mood expression.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Human needs missing
Hugs and Kisses
by JLR
Hello, Jim,
Great entry for the
4 line rhyming poem writing prompt contest.
I love your poem. It touched my heart. I know what you mean. Well chosen words. Excellent mood expression.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Smiling back, Gypsy Blue Rose, Thank you! I am humbled by your six-star validation.
Comment from patcelaw
This rhyming poem carries with it a profound thought about how in this time so many are missing the human touch that makes for us a healthy life. I feel terrible for those aged people who live alone and do not have the touches each day that are needed.
Patricia
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
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This rhyming poem carries with it a profound thought about how in this time so many are missing the human touch that makes for us a healthy life. I feel terrible for those aged people who live alone and do not have the touches each day that are needed.
Patricia
Comment Written 11-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
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Patricia, thank you for your review and comments.
