MacMack the Miracle Boy
This is my story for teens with a low reading level.2 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
Very good! This story is well-written, and the language is not too hard. One wants to keep on reading to see if there is anything this baby can't do. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Very good! This story is well-written, and the language is not too hard. One wants to keep on reading to see if there is anything this baby can't do. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Hi, Wendy Gordon! Thank you for the kind comments and the best wishes. Thank you for taking the time to read my story. I appreciate it a lot.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I like your story. It has a lot of potential. Your title should be MacMack the Miracle Boy. Turn him into a super hero. In your first paragraph, the part about him being found in the ER should be a separate paragraph. I'm not sure you should do the part about the planet alignment. You don't have a lot of words to use in a teen story, but I think they would like your story. His incredible abilities are entertaining, although the teens might think about his height when delivering mail. Maybe he's a high jumper. I think you have a real chance of selling this book if you cut words and check the reading level is about 3rd grade.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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I like your story. It has a lot of potential. Your title should be MacMack the Miracle Boy. Turn him into a super hero. In your first paragraph, the part about him being found in the ER should be a separate paragraph. I'm not sure you should do the part about the planet alignment. You don't have a lot of words to use in a teen story, but I think they would like your story. His incredible abilities are entertaining, although the teens might think about his height when delivering mail. Maybe he's a high jumper. I think you have a real chance of selling this book if you cut words and check the reading level is about 3rd grade.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Hi, Carol Hillebrenner! Thank you for your kind comments and feedback. I did check the reading level on the website given in the contest rules, and the story was a grade 3 reading level. I will fix the error in the title and the first paragraph. Thank you for taking the time to read my story and giving me feedback. I appreciate it a lot.
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It's a good story, Don't give up for any reason.
