Comment from Raul1

Excellent

This story meets the requirements for the contest. It has a very good chance of winning the contest. Excellent work! I like how you structured this poem. Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2021

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Thank you so much for your encouraging review :)Have a blessed week end:)

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Dear Mystery Writer,

Wow. That guy must be some kind of good-looker or great-talker to have gotten her to ignore all those crazy, horrible signs. Yuck. She's lucky he didn't cheat on her, too!

Thanks and good luck!

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021

Thank you so much for your encouraging review :)Have a blessed week end:)

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written heartfelt story about making the wrong choice and have to deal with the consequences for as long as we live. When the advertisement is too good to be true it normally is.

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2021

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Comment from Eddy Fidelis

Excellent

Creativity at its peak! I like the way you present your story, intentionally captivating.

And so with all the danger signs, you thought you will be a miracle. "I travelled to the end of the world" is such a beautiful way of summarising or describing your predicament. Wish you the best in the poll.

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2021

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Comment from equestrik

Excellent

This is a good write for the contest with a good picture to accompany it. So many times a person just can't see the signs in front of them. Best of luck to you in the contest.

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2021

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Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

You have written a really good dramatic story with a moral, lesson and great descriptions of the characters flaws and how it all boiled down to the effects on the second marriage. Very believable!!

Melissa

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2021

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Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Wow. Such a hard experience. Hindsight gave you perfect vision of all the warning signs that should have told the narrator not to sacrifice those nine years. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2021

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Comment from Veronica Grace

Excellent

A quick and clear read according to the rules. Isn't that the way it goes, when you try to help someone. Seems it always leaves you wondering why you stuck your neck out. If I were that wise old person, I would say, "She who sticks her neck out, loses her head". Just saying. Nothing to change or correct.

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2021

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Comment from LisaMay

Excellent

You're not being punished for love, you're being punished for being blind. But then, love is blind, so yes, i made a mistake, you are indeed being punished for love and it certainly isn't fair.
You have a 'rescue mentality' and thought you could help, but that background and his limited abilities has made your partner unworthy of your love.
Your unfortunate story is humorous in its details, sad at heart, and wise in its conclusion.
I hope the wolf in sheep's clothing does not savage you through the divorce.

Fith sign: Sith sign:
(These should be Fifth and Sixth)

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2021

Comment from RetroStarfish

Good

This is a clever take on the contest prompt. There are some fun elements. I like the comparison of Jackpot to Jackass. However, on the whole, the story could be better-written.
For example- its repetitive to refer to "nine years" in both the second and third sentences.
First sign - this paragraph was good up until "If the dad was guying something..." It makes no sense. Do you mean to say if he gave his wife money to buy things he'd want the change back?
Second sign - whose kids? Did your ex-husband eat his meals in his room? or was it his kids living with him?
Third and sixth signs are trivial complaints that actually weaken your argument rather than make it stronger.
You've missed a 5th sign completely.
Despite all of the above, the concept for this story is great.

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 Comment Written 07-Jan-2021