Winter Time Begins
Winter talks about itself15 total reviews
Comment from Michele Harber
That's quite the top hat your snowman is wearing. You did a great job of putting the snowman together with words that not just created the snowman shape but painted a picture of winter and all the fun of playing in the snow. I like that you touch on different senses, i.e., touch ("cold air biting at cheek"), sight ("shimmer in the moon's pale light") and sound ("squeals of delight"). Your choice of verbs, in particular ("bluster," "whip," "shimmer," "glower"), really works well in making the poem so vivid. Very nice job, Rox.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
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That's quite the top hat your snowman is wearing. You did a great job of putting the snowman together with words that not just created the snowman shape but painted a picture of winter and all the fun of playing in the snow. I like that you touch on different senses, i.e., touch ("cold air biting at cheek"), sight ("shimmer in the moon's pale light") and sound ("squeals of delight"). Your choice of verbs, in particular ("bluster," "whip," "shimmer," "glower"), really works well in making the poem so vivid. Very nice job, Rox.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
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Thanks so much. It was really fun to write. Getting he shape isn't easy always, but I enjoy it.
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I've never tried one of the shaped ones. You apparently have way more patience than I do.
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I used to make them all the time, but haven't as much lately. They take a lot of time.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
You use literary techniques well. Your use of personification will draw the reader in. You pose an amusing juxtaposition. You appeal nicely to the senses. The shape of your poem is clever. Pattern poetry is not easy. I've orchestrated few. Your ending is delightful.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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You use literary techniques well. Your use of personification will draw the reader in. You pose an amusing juxtaposition. You appeal nicely to the senses. The shape of your poem is clever. Pattern poetry is not easy. I've orchestrated few. Your ending is delightful.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much. That was fun, but of course took forever to get the snowman right, esp when I found and error and had to fix it and them the shape would be out of wack. But I enjoyed it.
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You obviously have more patience & courage than I. I did mine on a typewriter. I you know about typing on non-erasable paper etc you will understand.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written snowman formed poem about the picture this challenge. Every time we see snow it brings the child deep inside us and we get as excited as we did when we were children.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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A very well-written snowman formed poem about the picture this challenge. Every time we see snow it brings the child deep inside us and we get as excited as we did when we were children.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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Thank you Sandra. Really don't know much about doing any of that. Didn't have snow in Calif or Florida. =]
Comment from patcelaw
With winter upon us, we find children at play in the snow. Sledding, snowball fights and making snow angels. I used to love winter, but at my age now, I rather like living in s warmer climate.
Patricia
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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With winter upon us, we find children at play in the snow. Sledding, snowball fights and making snow angels. I used to love winter, but at my age now, I rather like living in s warmer climate.
Patricia
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much Pat. I don't want to live in snow either. We had flurries when I was at my niece's in GA for Christmas. That was good enough. =]
Comment from royowen
You do these shaped poems so skilfully and well dear Rox, you have a penchant for it, this is another classic in the fine art of sculpting and shaping writing, so well done Rox, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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You do these shaped poems so skilfully and well dear Rox, you have a penchant for it, this is another classic in the fine art of sculpting and shaping writing, so well done Rox, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much Sir. =]
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Well done
Comment from Ulla
Ye, indeed Roxanna, winter time it indeed is a period I will admit I'm not too keen on. I'm counting the days when spring raises her balmy face. Where I live that normally happens early March.
I loved your free verse poem for the club entry.It has great imagery.
Just on thing: Winter talks about it's self. Should be: Winter talks about its self. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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Ye, indeed Roxanna, winter time it indeed is a period I will admit I'm not too keen on. I'm counting the days when spring raises her balmy face. Where I live that normally happens early March.
I loved your free verse poem for the club entry.It has great imagery.
Just on thing: Winter talks about it's self. Should be: Winter talks about its self. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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I'm not keen on snow at all. Maybe just for a day. That would be enough. When I was a kid is snowed in my tiny desert hometown. That was a thrill, but I wouldn't want it all winter. I fixed my boo boo. =] Thanks so much dear.
Comment from w.j.debi
You've done an excellent job of combining shape and the personification of Winter's story. I can almost hear Winter laughing, especially at the sun and the parents. He's having fun.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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You've done an excellent job of combining shape and the personification of Winter's story. I can almost hear Winter laughing, especially at the sun and the parents. He's having fun.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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It was fun to write. Thanks so much.
Comment from Mistydawn
What a great poem. You took me back to when I was young all the excitement of seeing the first snow. Gobbling down a quick breakfast to appease my mom so I could go play. Making your poem in the shape of a snowman must have been hard to do. Thank you for sharing such a lovely poem.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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What a great poem. You took me back to when I was young all the excitement of seeing the first snow. Gobbling down a quick breakfast to appease my mom so I could go play. Making your poem in the shape of a snowman must have been hard to do. Thank you for sharing such a lovely poem.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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It snowed in my tiny desert hometown when I was a kid. That was extremely rare and a thrill. Thanks so much dear.
Comment from robyn corum
Rox,
OOOooooOooooo... girl. You know that's not fair. Concrete poems are my weakness. --wink-- Now, you'll have me trying to cook up a new one. This was just FUN! In so many ways and for so many reasons! Here are a few:
For personification of the Sun and Old Man Winter.
--> the sun will awaken feeling angry and glower (cool!)
--> my cold air biting at cheek, [-maybe add an 's' to 'cheek'?]
--> back out into my wintry arms they will go.
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Delightful alliteration in:
--> I BLuster and BLow,
--> only the Fun, of a snowball Fight
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Notable consonance and assonance in:
--> I blOw a cOld wind
--> and shImmer In the moon's pale lIight. They fall, sIlently
--> will Awaken feelinG AnGry and Glower
--> that I mAde wIth flAke and wInd.
--> Now WInter's tIme can begIn. The wonder of It fIlls many
--> Maybe hot souP and a cuP of cocoa
--> On a snOw cOvered branch a white Owl calls
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And dramatic use of repetition in:
--> time for me to whip up some snow / Now Winter's time can begin / It's my time / Time for Winter to begin.
And add the shape-factor on top and you've got a winner! Thanks so much!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Rox,
OOOooooOooooo... girl. You know that's not fair. Concrete poems are my weakness. --wink-- Now, you'll have me trying to cook up a new one. This was just FUN! In so many ways and for so many reasons! Here are a few:
For personification of the Sun and Old Man Winter.
--> the sun will awaken feeling angry and glower (cool!)
--> my cold air biting at cheek, [-maybe add an 's' to 'cheek'?]
--> back out into my wintry arms they will go.
*
Delightful alliteration in:
--> I BLuster and BLow,
--> only the Fun, of a snowball Fight
*
Notable consonance and assonance in:
--> I blOw a cOld wind
--> and shImmer In the moon's pale lIight. They fall, sIlently
--> will Awaken feelinG AnGry and Glower
--> that I mAde wIth flAke and wInd.
--> Now WInter's tIme can begIn. The wonder of It fIlls many
--> Maybe hot souP and a cuP of cocoa
--> On a snOw cOvered branch a white Owl calls
*
And dramatic use of repetition in:
--> time for me to whip up some snow / Now Winter's time can begin / It's my time / Time for Winter to begin.
And add the shape-factor on top and you've got a winner! Thanks so much!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Thank you dear. Honored by the praise. This was a fun one. Now lets see yours. =]
Comment from Sharon Feldt
Love the fact that you wrote your poem in the shape of a snowman! the personification you gave to the elements of sun, snow, wind and the snowman--all speak to your great imagination and gift with bringing things to life. Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Love the fact that you wrote your poem in the shape of a snowman! the personification you gave to the elements of sun, snow, wind and the snowman--all speak to your great imagination and gift with bringing things to life. Well done.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much. =]
