For The First Time
4/7/5/7/8 Contemporary English Tanka16 total reviews
Comment from Mark Schardine
flushing doubts out of my mind
for a sec, then he looked away
Admittingly, sec is a slang word to help the syllable count, but in this instance, it expresses very well that brief moment when recently gained hope seemed to disappear.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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flushing doubts out of my mind
for a sec, then he looked away
Admittingly, sec is a slang word to help the syllable count, but in this instance, it expresses very well that brief moment when recently gained hope seemed to disappear.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much, Mark. :)
Gypsy
Comment from patcelaw
It is a wonderful thing to see love in the eyes of our mates. I had a marriage of almost 37 years before my husband died and I can still remember the look of love I saw in his eyes.
Patricia
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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It is a wonderful thing to see love in the eyes of our mates. I had a marriage of almost 37 years before my husband died and I can still remember the look of love I saw in his eyes.
Patricia
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
Comment from Sugarray77
I enjoyed reading this contemporary verse with its nod to the Japanese form. Excellent job of execution and theme, Gypsy. I enjoyed reading this unique offering.
Melissa
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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I enjoyed reading this contemporary verse with its nod to the Japanese form. Excellent job of execution and theme, Gypsy. I enjoyed reading this unique offering.
Melissa
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy--and I've gotten that look many, many times--or maybe it was being sickened? I'm always mixing those two looks up, yeah, now that I think about it, it was sickened!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Another fine poem, Gypsy--and I've gotten that look many, many times--or maybe it was being sickened? I'm always mixing those two looks up, yeah, now that I think about it, it was sickened!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Teri7
Gypsy, This is a very nice and very interesting poem you have penned using a new form to me. You used great descriptive words and lovely imagery from the art work. Thank you for sharing this and the syllable count. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Gypsy, This is a very nice and very interesting poem you have penned using a new form to me. You used great descriptive words and lovely imagery from the art work. Thank you for sharing this and the syllable count. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Edward Escobar
I am so deeply touched by this spirit touching Tanka poem. In such few words it strikes me like old romance and a summer love. That is what I was feeling from having read your poem. And I think, wow.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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I am so deeply touched by this spirit touching Tanka poem. In such few words it strikes me like old romance and a summer love. That is what I was feeling from having read your poem. And I think, wow.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from royowen
I think when I had a crush when young, I knew that hope, and then the disappointment, beautifully written Tanka Gypsy, as usual a wonderful post, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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I think when I had a crush when young, I knew that hope, and then the disappointment, beautifully written Tanka Gypsy, as usual a wonderful post, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
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Comment from Poetic Friend
Wow, this is such a stunning piece of work I love the unique/creative lines in this poem, particularly the second and third lines. Those lines have much metaphorical movements.
Also, I love your presentation.
Your work never disappoints.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Wow, this is such a stunning piece of work I love the unique/creative lines in this poem, particularly the second and third lines. Those lines have much metaphorical movements.
Also, I love your presentation.
Your work never disappoints.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from kmoss
This poem is beautiful. It makes me think of intense eye contact when making love, for that split second of being united as one. I like all of your poems, but this one may be my favorite so far!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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This poem is beautiful. It makes me think of intense eye contact when making love, for that split second of being united as one. I like all of your poems, but this one may be my favorite so far!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much, Kym. I appreciate your review and kind words. Thank you very much for the six stars!
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Brilliant closer--re dashed hopes at "love" at first sight--I wrote a wry flash on this theme--nice to hear from a kindred cynic--even if it's only a fictional narrator.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Brilliant closer--re dashed hopes at "love" at first sight--I wrote a wry flash on this theme--nice to hear from a kindred cynic--even if it's only a fictional narrator.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Elizabeth. I appreciate you.
Gypsy hugs
