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10 total reviews
Comment from Goodadvicechan
A good story line... trapped by forest fire. The story flows well and easy to follow. The author did a good job to share Tommy's background, the culture from which he came from.
It is enjoyable reading. Good work.
Happy and Healthy New Year.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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A good story line... trapped by forest fire. The story flows well and easy to follow. The author did a good job to share Tommy's background, the culture from which he came from.
It is enjoyable reading. Good work.
Happy and Healthy New Year.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your supportive review. I'm glad it flows smoothly and that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Eddy Fidelis
The story is engaging from the start to the end. From the food, to the fire incidence with the accompanying lecture and to Tommy's life story, you carefully sauce the story for maximum entertainment. Tommy's response to Liz's question on having Helicopter with an airplane in restraining the fire got me laughing. "There's usually someone who picks up buckets of water to dump on small fire"
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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The story is engaging from the start to the end. From the food, to the fire incidence with the accompanying lecture and to Tommy's life story, you carefully sauce the story for maximum entertainment. Tommy's response to Liz's question on having Helicopter with an airplane in restraining the fire got me laughing. "There's usually someone who picks up buckets of water to dump on small fire"
Comment Written 31-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad you enjoyed it and appreciated the spirit of it.
Comment from kmoss
I enjoyed this part of the story. I will look for the others soon. I've always wanted to visit Montana, so I will have to do so through your characters until I can travel again. This sentence needs some work: That's a lot profit loss.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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I enjoyed this part of the story. I will look for the others soon. I've always wanted to visit Montana, so I will have to do so through your characters until I can travel again. This sentence needs some work: That's a lot profit loss.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your supportive review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Do you think when you travel to Montana, you'll peek into any caves? lol
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Definitely! Lol
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lol
Comment from Mistydawn
They will be so full that they won't be able to move, lol. Tommy has a remarkable story, a true survivor coming from a horrid life too success. He should be proud about what all he's accomplished. You've made him a strong, believable character in a short amount of time. I do hope the girls get their questions answered.
Your chapter is well-written, very interesting believable. You made me hungry with your great descriptions.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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They will be so full that they won't be able to move, lol. Tommy has a remarkable story, a true survivor coming from a horrid life too success. He should be proud about what all he's accomplished. You've made him a strong, believable character in a short amount of time. I do hope the girls get their questions answered.
Your chapter is well-written, very interesting believable. You made me hungry with your great descriptions.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your loyal review. Thank you for the reinforcement on my character development. It is important to quickly make our characters believable, isn't it. I'm glad I was able to do that. As I'm winding down here, it's getting harder, as you know.
Comment from AJ McCall
Allllll that food sounds more delicious than the buttered garlic bread I'm eating! lol. Tommy's story reminds me of a documentary I saw on Youtube about American Indians (the True Americans. I'm proud to say that I have some from my father's side.) who were stolen and shipped away to become like Angolsaxons by having their own style, tradition, and even hairstyles cut from them. It's awful hearing about it but it's the truth. And the truth needs to be heard. Your stories are highlighting real issues which is why I enjoy reading it very much! I can't wait to read the next chapter to see if they can get some of their secret question answered and start driving!
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Allllll that food sounds more delicious than the buttered garlic bread I'm eating! lol. Tommy's story reminds me of a documentary I saw on Youtube about American Indians (the True Americans. I'm proud to say that I have some from my father's side.) who were stolen and shipped away to become like Angolsaxons by having their own style, tradition, and even hairstyles cut from them. It's awful hearing about it but it's the truth. And the truth needs to be heard. Your stories are highlighting real issues which is why I enjoy reading it very much! I can't wait to read the next chapter to see if they can get some of their secret question answered and start driving!
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your loyal review. I too have possibly Cree or Blackfoot. No one knows. My grandfather's grandmother was Native in Canada. I rmember seeing a video years ago about the Catholic boarding school. It was very disturbing. And just recently, some terrible stories have continued to roll out out our state's single Orphanage, Catholic of course. This make more real what the Naive children endured. As I'm winding down here on this story, it's getting harder as you know.
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Man, that's awful! But you're welcome for the comments!
Comment from GE Parson
I was intrigued with the dialog between the characters. The spacing between each conversation made it easy to read. I also was impressed with the pictorial words used, made it better to understand the scene.
I once dated an Indian gal from Montana. I do no know from what
Nation she was from, but she was
always hot-to-trot.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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I was intrigued with the dialog between the characters. The spacing between each conversation made it easy to read. I also was impressed with the pictorial words used, made it better to understand the scene.
I once dated an Indian gal from Montana. I do no know from what
Nation she was from, but she was
always hot-to-trot.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your loyal review. It's always good to know how the images are coming off. That is a funny story about your Indian girl friend.
Comment from aryr
Another great ongoing chapter Liz. Tommy was certainly hospitable, providing the girls with edible food, oh I loved the picture. He answered questions and explained the current as well as the past situations of his life. Their were other questions the girls wanted to ask but wisely waited until a more appropriate time. Very well done. Happy New Years to you and yours, hopefully 2021 will be better. Blessings.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Another great ongoing chapter Liz. Tommy was certainly hospitable, providing the girls with edible food, oh I loved the picture. He answered questions and explained the current as well as the past situations of his life. Their were other questions the girls wanted to ask but wisely waited until a more appropriate time. Very well done. Happy New Years to you and yours, hopefully 2021 will be better. Blessings.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your loyal review. Thank you for the reinforcement on my character development. It is important to quickly make our characters believable, isn't it. I'm glad I was able to do that. As I'm winding down here, it's getting harder, as you know.
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You are so welcome Liz, I agree that it seems tougher as one winds down but that's where the inspiration kicks in. (smileO
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Thank you
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a wonderful story that's plot is pushed forward with this post. I enjoy following the girls in each of their new situations. Tommy's background is very interesting as well.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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This is a wonderful story that's plot is pushed forward with this post. I enjoy following the girls in each of their new situations. Tommy's background is very interesting as well.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your loyal review. Thank you for the reinforcement on my character development. It is important to quickly make our characters believable, isn't it. I'm glad I was able to do that. As I'm winding down here, it's getting harder, as you know.
Comment from country ranch writer
Waiting for another dementia I will be following you as you go along with your, story. Darn it you made me so hungry that I am going to have to forage for some delicious food.well done.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Waiting for another dementia I will be following you as you go along with your, story. Darn it you made me so hungry that I am going to have to forage for some delicious food.well done.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your amusing review. I'm glad it had the effect I was hoping. When I read my Native American stories by the Gears, I think, 'I think I'd like to try acorn bread and pemmican.' lol 'It sounds so delicious.'
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Sorry for spelling mistakes in my review
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I dident notiss
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Smiles
Comment from lyenochka
I'm so glad that they have food! Now you made me feel hungry. Whenever there is a journey story, it's always a good idea to have some food - the reader can enjoy with the characters. I really like the Tommy character and how you give us insight into the Native American experience on a personal level.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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I'm so glad that they have food! Now you made me feel hungry. Whenever there is a journey story, it's always a good idea to have some food - the reader can enjoy with the characters. I really like the Tommy character and how you give us insight into the Native American experience on a personal level.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your amusing review. I'm glad it had the effect I was hoping. When I read my Native American stories by the Gears, I think, 'I think I'd like to try acorn bread and pemmican.' lol 'It sounds so delicious.'
