The Toilet
prisoners see this quite differently43 total reviews
Comment from Tonia Michelle
This poem seems pretty deep. No pun intended. I can see how it could take on many meanings, depending on one's interpretation. I take it that some off the most beautiful things in life are birthed by that which is dirty and beneath most of us. But we have to take both to have both; to have the beauty and the meaning and purpose. You truly have a way with words.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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This poem seems pretty deep. No pun intended. I can see how it could take on many meanings, depending on one's interpretation. I take it that some off the most beautiful things in life are birthed by that which is dirty and beneath most of us. But we have to take both to have both; to have the beauty and the meaning and purpose. You truly have a way with words.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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I think your interpretation is perfect. Even a bit beyond what I initially intended. But, it is absolutely correct. Thank you. Doug
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Thank you. I enjoyed it.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is poignant and an excellent commentary on the way in which we view 'toilet water' versus how it is seen by others, who by necessity, see it quite differently. I need to point out one SPAG that I noticed in verse six, line two, first word. I think what you intended to say was "too" instead of "to." Please correct me if I am wrong. The picture is perfect for this marvelous piece. Well done.
Jesse
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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This is poignant and an excellent commentary on the way in which we view 'toilet water' versus how it is seen by others, who by necessity, see it quite differently. I need to point out one SPAG that I noticed in verse six, line two, first word. I think what you intended to say was "too" instead of "to." Please correct me if I am wrong. The picture is perfect for this marvelous piece. Well done.
Jesse
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Absolutely correct. Thank you, my friend.
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You're welcome. Glad I could help.
I wish you great success with this poem.
Jesse
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Interesting point of view that quite puts a spin on what we know about this world: "A necessity
that
you and I
would crawl
to drink from.
The well
of humanity." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Interesting point of view that quite puts a spin on what we know about this world: "A necessity
that
you and I
would crawl
to drink from.
The well
of humanity." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you. I appreciate it. Doug
