Humanity pit hole
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Comment from Mia Twysted
It is sad that there are so many people in the world that are made to suffer. We all struggle in our own way. That is what I take away from this piece.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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It is sad that there are so many people in the world that are made to suffer. We all struggle in our own way. That is what I take away from this piece.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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Yes you are correct
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Well spot on in regards to competition rules and word count.
Whilst I agree with the sentiment of no one being better than another, I don't think we all exist on the same level and humanity would be much better off if we did exist on the same playing field.
All the best
GMG
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Hi there,
Well spot on in regards to competition rules and word count.
Whilst I agree with the sentiment of no one being better than another, I don't think we all exist on the same level and humanity would be much better off if we did exist on the same playing field.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 02-Jan-2021
Comment from lyenochka
During the past year, we have seen such extremes of human behavior - from violence and hatred to people giving and forgiving. Your 25 words show us the one where people lack humanity. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2021
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During the past year, we have seen such extremes of human behavior - from violence and hatred to people giving and forgiving. Your 25 words show us the one where people lack humanity. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 31-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for your beautiful review and Happy New Year.
Comment from RetroStarfish
What a dark view of humanity - but well expressed in under 25 words. The presentation complements the story well, as does the title. I think in the last sentence there should either be a comma after the word humanity, or the it's should be is: Humanity is gone.
Nicely done, though.
Good luck in the contest.
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What a dark view of humanity - but well expressed in under 25 words. The presentation complements the story well, as does the title. I think in the last sentence there should either be a comma after the word humanity, or the it's should be is: Humanity is gone.
Nicely done, though.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2020
Comment from equestrik
This is such a tragedy as you write of in the notes. We forget the tragic lives a great any humans are forced to live by their poverty and lack. This is a sobering and thought provoking write.
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This is such a tragedy as you write of in the notes. We forget the tragic lives a great any humans are forced to live by their poverty and lack. This is a sobering and thought provoking write.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2020
Comment from Susan X Smith
You hit on one of my pet peeves - people who condescend. I have to remind myself - it's not how they feel about me, it's how they feel about themselves that causes them to treat others like that. Thanks for sharing.
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You hit on one of my pet peeves - people who condescend. I have to remind myself - it's not how they feel about me, it's how they feel about themselves that causes them to treat others like that. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2020
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The present crisis has been a leveller in society as we are all faced with the same problems and no amount of money can spare us, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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The present crisis has been a leveller in society as we are all faced with the same problems and no amount of money can spare us, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much Ms. Dolly for reviewing this harsh story.
Comment from AlfredScott
That was refreshingly negative. Dragged me right down and made me angry. But do we really pass through the same shit? Hardly. How come some people can ignore the excrement? Must be a good poem, it gave me pause.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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That was refreshingly negative. Dragged me right down and made me angry. But do we really pass through the same shit? Hardly. How come some people can ignore the excrement? Must be a good poem, it gave me pause.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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I wrote this having in mind the trash camps in Africa, where people are searching every day for something to sell. They live in that hole and it's no hope of escaping that world. I am so sorry if I have offended you with the entry.
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The trash camps of Africa, I can see everyone's in the same shit.
Comment from Sherry Asbury2
Yes, some of the language is not what I appreciate - but the poem certainly is!! We have allowed ourselves to descend into the class system, which I loath. Some may have money, while I have none...but my thinking and actions are the same playing level. I wish you good luck in this contest!! Very well presented.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Yes, some of the language is not what I appreciate - but the poem certainly is!! We have allowed ourselves to descend into the class system, which I loath. Some may have money, while I have none...but my thinking and actions are the same playing level. I wish you good luck in this contest!! Very well presented.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you
