Celebritiphobia
Fear of celebrities.34 total reviews
Comment from DonandVicki
I have never heard of a phobia of celebrities? But I am not all that enamored by them either. I like the style of your poem and It was well crafted. Don
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2020
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I have never heard of a phobia of celebrities? But I am not all that enamored by them either. I like the style of your poem and It was well crafted. Don
Comment Written 24-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Leigh Lawhon
nice poem. However, the way the lines are broken is jarring. For instance thee first stanza might be:
My fear of phobia is celebrities,
which gives me chills,
I don't know why I have it,
but I do.
I also think that the first line "My fear of phobia is celebrities" is a little too on the nose. I'd rather you show it rather than tell it.
The second to last line is a little confusing, "Better to meet neither." So far as I've seen, you only mention one phobia, celebrities so I'm not sure what the other would be.
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reply by the author on 24-Dec-2020
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nice poem. However, the way the lines are broken is jarring. For instance thee first stanza might be:
My fear of phobia is celebrities,
which gives me chills,
I don't know why I have it,
but I do.
I also think that the first line "My fear of phobia is celebrities" is a little too on the nose. I'd rather you show it rather than tell it.
The second to last line is a little confusing, "Better to meet neither." So far as I've seen, you only mention one phobia, celebrities so I'm not sure what the other would be.
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Comment Written 24-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2020
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Thank you! I have fixed the mistake. you can check it again.
Comment from Lucy de Welles
All elements here. Great photo and hot choice of orange.
Interesting phobia. Never heard of this one. What about celebrities is fear-provoking? It seems that they are the ones who are always ducking away from the crowds, using back doorways, riding in cars with tinted windows. Is this true? Or did you make it up?
Anyway, solid contest entry here. Good luck!
Lucy
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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All elements here. Great photo and hot choice of orange.
Interesting phobia. Never heard of this one. What about celebrities is fear-provoking? It seems that they are the ones who are always ducking away from the crowds, using back doorways, riding in cars with tinted windows. Is this true? Or did you make it up?
Anyway, solid contest entry here. Good luck!
Lucy
Comment Written 21-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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Thank you! I hope that I win.
Comment from Waterfowl
Famous people have a lot of influence among society. And with this 'cancel culture' today, your social life could be destroyed within hours. Though that is likely to only happen with the nasty celebrities, especially those who start drama for fun.
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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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Famous people have a lot of influence among society. And with this 'cancel culture' today, your social life could be destroyed within hours. Though that is likely to only happen with the nasty celebrities, especially those who start drama for fun.
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Comment Written 21-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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Thank you!
