Lamentations of a Lost Laddy
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Second Chance"My Autobiography
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
I like this thought: "I think that you can see why I called this role reversal, because sometimes we are the teacher, and sometimes we are the taught." This is so true. I have experience this throughout my life. This invites the reader to learn from your lessons that they can grow from your example.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2020
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I like this thought: "I think that you can see why I called this role reversal, because sometimes we are the teacher, and sometimes we are the taught." This is so true. I have experience this throughout my life. This invites the reader to learn from your lessons that they can grow from your example.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2020
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I love you I love your viewpoint and I love how you point out the parts that you think are clever. As a matter of fact as I was writing this, my mind automatically put the teacher in the top, instead of the teacher and the student. I like it because it's alliterative.
always a pleasure to receive your insightful reviews, I can't wait till next month comes to where I can nominate you.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
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That's sweet of you.
Comment from Janetsue
I have been away from FanStory for a while an I am trying to catch up on some reviewing. I am glad I read your posting because it shows how much you are trying to do things right, and that you are also working hard on your writing. Writing is a wonderful thing to help us get things straight in our minds about who we are and it helps us to see the potential we have to accomplish the good things that we want. Thank you for sharing your story with us, my friend. Honest writing is always something to be very much appreciated.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2020
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I have been away from FanStory for a while an I am trying to catch up on some reviewing. I am glad I read your posting because it shows how much you are trying to do things right, and that you are also working hard on your writing. Writing is a wonderful thing to help us get things straight in our minds about who we are and it helps us to see the potential we have to accomplish the good things that we want. Thank you for sharing your story with us, my friend. Honest writing is always something to be very much appreciated.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2020
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As you are reviewing and enjoying my honest writing, I am honestly enjoying your reviewing!
thank you, I really appreciate that you're catching up on your correspondence, and I really appreciate your friendship and support your on vanstory in this brave New world.
Blessing,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
Comment from lyenochka
Hi Darren,
This isn't your best writing and it seems to have some cut and paste issues. I hope you re-write it or even add a poem about it.
As always, I appreciate you sharing so honestly from your life.
Blessings to you this Christmas - may you always feel the Lord's closeness to you!
Typos:
I'm Darren and I wad born on April 20th (was)
life having a million interest (interests)
weather it's in your pants or in the bathroom. (whether)
Suggest to re-write this paragraph:
"Rosa told me that if I kept it missing appointments that I would do right)!
, he bought my first book off me, (it was a God thing. I had copies of my book and I was proud and I was riding by there on my bike and the first person I saw outside was Dr. G)
and I was on adderall by like told them my relapsed and he took it away. Very professional."
This part was written twice:
"As I was leaving from the last time that I ever saw Doctor A, I said,
"but Doc., I've got a problem".
He didn't hesitate.
He looked at me in a penetrating, loving way which makes you think sometimes that someone is looking into your soul, took a professional stance and put his hands behind his back, and said
"that's a tough one. "
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2020
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Hi Darren,
This isn't your best writing and it seems to have some cut and paste issues. I hope you re-write it or even add a poem about it.
As always, I appreciate you sharing so honestly from your life.
Blessings to you this Christmas - may you always feel the Lord's closeness to you!
Typos:
I'm Darren and I wad born on April 20th (was)
life having a million interest (interests)
weather it's in your pants or in the bathroom. (whether)
Suggest to re-write this paragraph:
"Rosa told me that if I kept it missing appointments that I would do right)!
, he bought my first book off me, (it was a God thing. I had copies of my book and I was proud and I was riding by there on my bike and the first person I saw outside was Dr. G)
and I was on adderall by like told them my relapsed and he took it away. Very professional."
This part was written twice:
"As I was leaving from the last time that I ever saw Doctor A, I said,
"but Doc., I've got a problem".
He didn't hesitate.
He looked at me in a penetrating, loving way which makes you think sometimes that someone is looking into your soul, took a professional stance and put his hands behind his back, and said
"that's a tough one. "
Comment Written 20-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2020
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I really appreciate you reviews and I appreciate the time you take your point out the errors and and you are wonderful suggestions. I'm very happy and very appreciated to have you as a reviewer here, as you have provided the most consistent most ever catching and most helpful reviews out of any other reviewer here. But this I'm deeply appreciative, and I believe that the style in writing this letter in itself the fortune illustrate some of the problems I'm having with overall communication. As this is like the 5th edit now! I will certainly touch it up as per your advice and if you just need to add the poem is really an excellent suggestion I will do that
Blessings for a Happy New year I know that you have a special place in my heart.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
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Blessings to you, Darren!
Have a joyful Christmas!
Comment from Eddy Fidelis
Indeed, life has so much to offer to those who can exercise patience, who are positive, who are consistent in their pursuit despite seeming setbacks.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2020
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Indeed, life has so much to offer to those who can exercise patience, who are positive, who are consistent in their pursuit despite seeming setbacks.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2020
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Although you have given me two stars, this is one of the best reviewswhich I have received because it helps me improve. I appreciate this, and I hope you appreciate the fact that this is a good at illustration of some of the problems I'm having, is my life is a bit disorganized now I knows I'm running about it the writing is a reflection in itself of the problems which are buffeting my life. I really appreciate Rubio, and I really appreciate your suggestions.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
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Sorry Badger, didn't notice that. Thanks for drawing my attention to it. Is corrected now.
I really enjoyed your writing. Looking forward to read from you again. Merry Christmas 🌹
