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Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "That's What It Was"With their call stalled, Liz & Linda begin walking
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Comment from Mabaker12
Hi Liz, guess who's back, finally. This was the first piece of Liz and Linda's adventure I have read, and so easy and enjoyable it is. Like all your work a stickler for detail shines through. Well done, Mabaker.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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Hi Liz, guess who's back, finally. This was the first piece of Liz and Linda's adventure I have read, and so easy and enjoyable it is. Like all your work a stickler for detail shines through. Well done, Mabaker.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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Whaaat...yay. What a sweet surprise...a Christmas gift You can read the earlier chapters from my portfolio. Now review necessary. Just enjoy.
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I'm off to have a look. Love U. Anne
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It is so glad to have you back
Comment from AJ McCall
Oooh, That's what it was, LOL. The chapter title is perfect I have to say. Also, I'm so glad they found another person. But they were walking in a firestorm. I've never heard of that. But it's very interesting. I'm trying my best to keep up with all your posts. I hate when I can't review posts on the same day their posted. But I enjoyed this chapter very much. You have a very unique way of describing things and writing the dialogue. But I can't to find out what 'samples' they're getting.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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Oooh, That's what it was, LOL. The chapter title is perfect I have to say. Also, I'm so glad they found another person. But they were walking in a firestorm. I've never heard of that. But it's very interesting. I'm trying my best to keep up with all your posts. I hate when I can't review posts on the same day their posted. But I enjoyed this chapter very much. You have a very unique way of describing things and writing the dialogue. But I can't to find out what 'samples' they're getting.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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AJ...Thank you for your enthusiastic and loyal following. here is a definition of a firestorm:
"A firestorm is a conflagration which attains such intensity that it creates and sustains its own wind system. It is most commonly a natural phenomenon, created during some of the largest bushfires and wildfires."
You know, you do not need to review every chapter. A lot of people go to the portfolio and just read the chapters. I like to see how the numbers climb on the # of views.
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Oh, okay. You're welcome! And thank you for the definition. Very helpful. :)
Have a lovely Sunday!
Comment from GE Parson
Very interesting, but a little confusing story. I had a hard time keeping up with where the girls were. Anyway it was a intriguing
mystery story.
Your friend, Jerry
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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Very interesting, but a little confusing story. I had a hard time keeping up with where the girls were. Anyway it was a intriguing
mystery story.
Your friend, Jerry
Comment Written 17-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your review. I'm glad this intrigued you. The problem was the girls didn't know either. I don't know if you've been following the lights with them? There a summary of realization so the reader finds out along with the ladies.
Comment from greyson ernst
this is really good cloes art is the best so the picture is perfect i love it and as always keep writing and stay safe have a happy holiday
sincerely Greyson Ernst
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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this is really good cloes art is the best so the picture is perfect i love it and as always keep writing and stay safe have a happy holiday
sincerely Greyson Ernst
Comment Written 17-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I can't believe what's like nowadays for two girls hitch hiking, especially in Montana. It's wide open and sparsely occupied and the speed limit is 80. I just visited my sister-in-law there this last summer.
Suggestion: The first part might be a little too long.
Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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I can't believe what's like nowadays for two girls hitch hiking, especially in Montana. It's wide open and sparsely occupied and the speed limit is 80. I just visited my sister-in-law there this last summer.
Suggestion: The first part might be a little too long.
Well done.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your involved review. Our friend Em talks a lot about the area. I'm glad you got to see it.
Comment from Mistydawn
Things seem to be getting better for them for a change. The poor gals deserve the break. I'm sure they will be happy with almost anything. Your chapter is well-written interesting. I look forward to reading more.
PS. Tonight is the big finale. I can't wait.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Things seem to be getting better for them for a change. The poor gals deserve the break. I'm sure they will be happy with almost anything. Your chapter is well-written interesting. I look forward to reading more.
PS. Tonight is the big finale. I can't wait.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your loyal review. I taped it...I'm dating myself with that terminology. I must say I DVR'd it...lol...did you ever tape on a blank VHS tape? lol
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Lol, all of the time. I still have a VCR and a drawer of tapes. I remember how much I hated renting a tape and finding it needs to be rewound.
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Be kind...Rewind...I still have more. I thought I'd tossed them all but the other day I saw 2 rows left. I have no need for a VCR so will donate it. I also have a DVD player that's going as soon as Covid is in our past.
We used to have a place that rented for one dollar...then the roof fell in during the winter. We'd go by it in the spring saying, "Our movies are in there...bwaaa
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Liz and Linda walking by the fire or through the fire, their adventure of self discovery goes on. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapters.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Liz and Linda walking by the fire or through the fire, their adventure of self discovery goes on. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapters.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your loyal review. I'm glad you see metaphors here...great.
Comment from aryr
Wow, another amazing continuation chapter Liz. It finally cleared a lot of things up, the girls swamp crawl, the wet cave, the fog. Tommy was obviously able to answer some questions as well as getting some answers. This was very well done and most enjoyable. I am so glad I am following this. I eagerly await the next chapter.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Wow, another amazing continuation chapter Liz. It finally cleared a lot of things up, the girls swamp crawl, the wet cave, the fog. Tommy was obviously able to answer some questions as well as getting some answers. This was very well done and most enjoyable. I am so glad I am following this. I eagerly await the next chapter.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. I am glad you are following this too. You bring joy to my day. I hope you are well.
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You are so welcome Liz, following this is a pleasure indeed. Season Greetings and Blessings.
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You also...I hope you are well.
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I am fine, I hope you are as well.
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I am great. I have lovely neighbors who take good care of me. One says it brightens her day to be able to shop for me. so I email my little list to her. I have plenty of food. I got in the habit of making little one portions from large batches of food. So I am all set. It's just my staples of bananas & oranges & an occasional incidental. I also order goodies from Amazon.
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That is great Liz, you sound so organized.
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I laugh because my organization these days amount to me keeping track on my calendar, of when I call my 15+ friends or they call me. I joke about how that is my only organization. I know there are more. We need that to survive.
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So true Liz so true but you are safe and well cared for and that's what counts.
Comment from lyenochka
How nice that they finally get food! How nice Tommy to invite them into his car and now he'll share his restaurant food.
I was a little lost in the description and couldn't quite figure out what they saw. But I really liked "The necklace of yellow lights are the cars."
I noticed you had a lot of short sentences which were subject-verb. This is good if you want to make a key focus and build suspense. But it seemed overdone in parts.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2020
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How nice that they finally get food! How nice Tommy to invite them into his car and now he'll share his restaurant food.
I was a little lost in the description and couldn't quite figure out what they saw. But I really liked "The necklace of yellow lights are the cars."
I noticed you had a lot of short sentences which were subject-verb. This is good if you want to make a key focus and build suspense. But it seemed overdone in parts.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your constructive review. They were seeing a forest/field fire. I'll check your thoughts out.
Comment from Lucy de Welles
Interesting, well written chapter. Haven't read any chapters before this one. Hooked me and held my interest straight thru, even though I have no idea what's going on. It's fun to start reading in the middle of a book :). Author is obviously a seasoned writer. The idea flow and scene construction and word usage is logical, straightforward, and flowing. My response was: "Wow! Cool!"
Excellent grammar and punctuation. Except maybe: ...(the) frozen fog, Emily told us about."
This is a good story for sitting in front of the fireplace with hot cider on a snowy night!
Well done!
Lucy
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2020
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Interesting, well written chapter. Haven't read any chapters before this one. Hooked me and held my interest straight thru, even though I have no idea what's going on. It's fun to start reading in the middle of a book :). Author is obviously a seasoned writer. The idea flow and scene construction and word usage is logical, straightforward, and flowing. My response was: "Wow! Cool!"
Excellent grammar and punctuation. Except maybe: ...(the) frozen fog, Emily told us about."
This is a good story for sitting in front of the fireplace with hot cider on a snowy night!
Well done!
Lucy
Comment Written 14-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your involved review. This is many adventures. The best is the first 13 chapters, where Liz & Linda rescue 10 Native American teens from a house, part of a trafficking operation. You are welcome to read any previous chapters. No review is necessary. Just enjoy. There is suspense in most every chapter.
