Zee Zee's Fakakta Day.
Zee runs into a situation in Nordstroms6 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Hysterical! I enjoyed the second romp through as much as the first! irreverent and comical...a touch of sardonic irony and lots of slam dunk action! Elizabeth Emerald recommended you and I'm thrilled she did! I'm goin to "fan" you so I am notified when you post...you leave me hungry for more!--Karenina
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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Hysterical! I enjoyed the second romp through as much as the first! irreverent and comical...a touch of sardonic irony and lots of slam dunk action! Elizabeth Emerald recommended you and I'm thrilled she did! I'm goin to "fan" you so I am notified when you post...you leave me hungry for more!--Karenina
Comment Written 29-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Vanessa Newman
Now I know that I love you back! This line: "he fired off two rounds above her twenty-thousand-dollar facelift," is priceless among others. I can so visualize this: "Under normal circumstances, I avoid meddling in other people's affairs but staring down the business end of a gun barrel while two dimwits work out their marital crap surpasses normal. I hoisted myself up as gingerly as one can in a skin-tight skirt and three-inch sling-backs and draped my mink around our captor." I enjoyed all the Yiddish. Made me laugh out loud! Monday, nor any other, is a good day to see a Jewish man without pants. It make me circumspect, I mean circumcise ... you get it.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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Now I know that I love you back! This line: "he fired off two rounds above her twenty-thousand-dollar facelift," is priceless among others. I can so visualize this: "Under normal circumstances, I avoid meddling in other people's affairs but staring down the business end of a gun barrel while two dimwits work out their marital crap surpasses normal. I hoisted myself up as gingerly as one can in a skin-tight skirt and three-inch sling-backs and draped my mink around our captor." I enjoyed all the Yiddish. Made me laugh out loud! Monday, nor any other, is a good day to see a Jewish man without pants. It make me circumspect, I mean circumcise ... you get it.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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Hey, thanks for the kind review. I had a bit of fun with this one. I'm not Jewish. Zee Zee is a character I created 12 years ago. She and I cohabitate in my brain. My real name is Linda. I'm old. 73. I'm married. I live in a 55+ retirement community in Florida. Formerly from Chicago. I love the city. I miss my city. I'm really rather white-bread normal. Never been arrested or served time. I think that is so important to mention in the beginning. LOL...Hey, thanks again. Zee
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Thanks for the background. You are not old in spirit, it seems. My grandmother lived in Florida. Zee Zee is a fun character and I bet she is a hoot to have inside your head.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Nordstums=>Nordstrom
in flagrant delicti=>in flagrante delicto
Hilarious! Wickedly witty--thanks for the Yiddish humor--brings back memories of grandma. Sugg: glossary in note. (Who is Q?)
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2020
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Nordstums=>Nordstrom
in flagrant delicti=>in flagrante delicto
Hilarious! Wickedly witty--thanks for the Yiddish humor--brings back memories of grandma. Sugg: glossary in note. (Who is Q?)
Comment Written 11-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2020
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Thanks for the edit. Q is Zee?s bodyguard / chief / chauffeur. There is a history about Q. One I?m writing. Oddly enough, when I decided to ?go back in time? with Zee?s past...my writing took a turn toward the dark side of town. I think writing the ?Dr. Rosenthal? series probably influenced my writing her past. The series is in my portfolio....as I recall. Zee has been seeing the same psychiatrist for years. Their relationship is .... problematic. Lol. Thanks for reading and all the help.
Comment from RetroStarfish
This is an hilarious story - laugh out loud in places with some killer lines:
" I felt sorry for him standing there with his .357 Magnum in one hand and trying to hide his derringer-sized dinky with the other." Or: "... he fired off two rounds above her twenty-thousand-dollar facelift."
On the other hand, there are some lines that don't work: " I was not the object of his angst." Surely holding hostages at gunpoint in a department store is more than angst. Or "It did nothing for my image as a local celebrity." How does being held hostage impact the protagonist's image as a local celebrity - You're either a celebrity or you're not. Perhaps because the character is a celebrity the situation was all that more embarrassing - or perhaps you're trying to say that it hurt her reputation for being cool under pressure.
The story also reads like this is a recurring character, but there's no recognition that some readers have no idea who Zee Zee or Q are. Perhaps a little line in the notes section "the latest in the adventures of..."
These sound like little picky things, but they drew my attention as a reader away from what was otherwise a funny story.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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This is an hilarious story - laugh out loud in places with some killer lines:
" I felt sorry for him standing there with his .357 Magnum in one hand and trying to hide his derringer-sized dinky with the other." Or: "... he fired off two rounds above her twenty-thousand-dollar facelift."
On the other hand, there are some lines that don't work: " I was not the object of his angst." Surely holding hostages at gunpoint in a department store is more than angst. Or "It did nothing for my image as a local celebrity." How does being held hostage impact the protagonist's image as a local celebrity - You're either a celebrity or you're not. Perhaps because the character is a celebrity the situation was all that more embarrassing - or perhaps you're trying to say that it hurt her reputation for being cool under pressure.
The story also reads like this is a recurring character, but there's no recognition that some readers have no idea who Zee Zee or Q are. Perhaps a little line in the notes section "the latest in the adventures of..."
These sound like little picky things, but they drew my attention as a reader away from what was otherwise a funny story.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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Yes, Zee and Q are reoccurring characters. I forget that I?m not really a famous writer. (That?s a joke.) thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from robyn corum
ZZ,
I have got to tell you, this is one of the strangest stories I have ever read. And evermore so because, in this day and age, I wouldn't be a BIT surprised if you'd got the idea from a newspaper headline. What a world!
Notes, if I may:
1.) Stop, or I'll shoot!" (h)e said.
2.) particular predicament (emphas[i]s on the dick part.)
3.) It might be good to offer some translations in your author notes?
Thanks!
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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ZZ,
I have got to tell you, this is one of the strangest stories I have ever read. And evermore so because, in this day and age, I wouldn't be a BIT surprised if you'd got the idea from a newspaper headline. What a world!
Notes, if I may:
1.) Stop, or I'll shoot!" (h)e said.
2.) particular predicament (emphas[i]s on the dick part.)
3.) It might be good to offer some translations in your author notes?
Thanks!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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Thanks for the review and suggestions.
Comment from Ulla
Hahahaha, Zee Zee, this is priceless. I absolutely had a good laugh out this short and outrageous story, and all told in the name of the Hanukkah. I was there all the way. The imagery is great and triggered my imagination. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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Hahahaha, Zee Zee, this is priceless. I absolutely had a good laugh out this short and outrageous story, and all told in the name of the Hanukkah. I was there all the way. The imagery is great and triggered my imagination. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 11-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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Just a bit of fun. Thanks for reading. Hope all is well in your world. Happy Holidays to you.
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Happy holidays to you as well. Keep your stories coming and you will make my day. :)))
