Renga Two
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Safe Haven"multi-author book number two
6 total reviews
Comment from Mark Schardine
immigrants seeking
safe haven among strangers --
greener on that side
You give a glimpse into the despair that can motivate immigrants. They hope to find a new home, but cannot imagine how they will succeed.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2020
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immigrants seeking
safe haven among strangers --
greener on that side
You give a glimpse into the despair that can motivate immigrants. They hope to find a new home, but cannot imagine how they will succeed.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2020
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Thank you very much, Mark.
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Comment from Ulla
Hi Marival,I liked your 5-7-5 for the renga. Yes, it happens all the time, the refugitives landing on our coasts. Many lose their lives in the process. Great but a sad continuation. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2020
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Hi Marival,I liked your 5-7-5 for the renga. Yes, it happens all the time, the refugitives landing on our coasts. Many lose their lives in the process. Great but a sad continuation. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 10-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2020
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Thank you very much, Ulla, I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my work.
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gypsy
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a very nice chapter for your book. I like the way you have used the colour green to follow on from the red, and kept the water theme. I also find it interesting that we are moving towards lager bodies of water now as the chapters go on.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2020
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This is a very nice chapter for your book. I like the way you have used the colour green to follow on from the red, and kept the water theme. I also find it interesting that we are moving towards lager bodies of water now as the chapters go on.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2020
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Thank you very much, Katherine. I'm glad you like it :)
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Gypsy
Comment from Mark D. R.
Yes Gypsy, the other side always looks better. However, the opposite can also be true. The grass on the other side of the street looks so green, but when I get close, it is the same green crabgrass (-; Tragic the immigrant stories about these boat people.
You selected a good image to express your verse.
Mark
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2020
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Yes Gypsy, the other side always looks better. However, the opposite can also be true. The grass on the other side of the street looks so green, but when I get close, it is the same green crabgrass (-; Tragic the immigrant stories about these boat people.
You selected a good image to express your verse.
Mark
Comment Written 09-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2020
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Thank you, Mark. I hope you are having a wonderful week. :)
Hugs, Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
Great assessment about the dilemma of the refugees and immigrants in your brief poem. So much is lost while leaving their home culture but they are willing to risk everything because they hope for better for their kids in the new country.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2020
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Great assessment about the dilemma of the refugees and immigrants in your brief poem. So much is lost while leaving their home culture but they are willing to risk everything because they hope for better for their kids in the new country.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2020
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Thank you, Helen. I hope you are having a wonderful week. :)
Hugs, Gypsy
Comment from DonandVicki
A struggle for freedom, I live in San Diego and we have a lot of immigrants coming from Mexico and further south. Those of us that were born free are truly blessed.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2020
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A struggle for freedom, I live in San Diego and we have a lot of immigrants coming from Mexico and further south. Those of us that were born free are truly blessed.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2020
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Thank you very much, my friend. I came to the USA at 16 years old. My aunt brought me on a visa and eventually I got my citizenship. I'm proud to be an American and free. Spain, where I grew up, had a dictatorship with fascist president Francisco Franco. It was not as bad as siria or guatemala, etc.. but it was bad.
Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Hugs,
Gypsy
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God bless you Gypsy.
