Ophelia
A Fusion Sonnet for the Potlach Club50 total reviews
Comment from zanya
Complex yes this Format of the Fusion Sonnet but the theme is a wonderful blend of Shakespearian tragedy interlaced with modern norms and the status of women - such effective use of language
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Complex yes this Format of the Fusion Sonnet but the theme is a wonderful blend of Shakespearian tragedy interlaced with modern norms and the status of women - such effective use of language
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Very kind of you to award six stars to my Fusion Sonnet, Zanya. I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and I appreciate your kind comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I am not fond of this form, but I enjoyed this sonnet Tony. I especially enjoyed the sentiment and the message it conveyed and the clever rhyming. A joy to read, love Dolly x
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I am not fond of this form, but I enjoyed this sonnet Tony. I especially enjoyed the sentiment and the message it conveyed and the clever rhyming. A joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Thanks for dropping by to review this one. I'm not a great fan of this form either but thought I'd give it a go for Potlach. I appreciate your kind words. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from estory
This is a complicated format, but I like what you did with it, I like the musical effects of the tolling rhymes, the stately measure of the meter, and you had a great melancholy voice for it. I loved your use of alliteration and the dramatic breaks in the rhythm. I thought the last stanza was really strong. estory
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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This is a complicated format, but I like what you did with it, I like the musical effects of the tolling rhymes, the stately measure of the meter, and you had a great melancholy voice for it. I loved your use of alliteration and the dramatic breaks in the rhythm. I thought the last stanza was really strong. estory
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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Thanks very much for your enthusiastic review, story, and for the sixth star. This poem didn't come easily. It can be difficult to get any kind of poetic voice rising up through the complex mesh of rules in a form of this kind. They so often come across just as a cerebral exercise.
Comment from LisaMay
'A small wind blows, and ripples spread' their impact across the centuries, whether they be in poetic form or women's rights. Your skilful writing is an excellent vehicle for the social comment indicated in the last several lines. Prior to that, in the 4-line free verse section, we get a potted outline of what led to Ophelia's death. I like how you have modified 'These undulations splinter life. A head...' to 'these undulations splinter life ahead.'
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2020
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'A small wind blows, and ripples spread' their impact across the centuries, whether they be in poetic form or women's rights. Your skilful writing is an excellent vehicle for the social comment indicated in the last several lines. Prior to that, in the 4-line free verse section, we get a potted outline of what led to Ophelia's death. I like how you have modified 'These undulations splinter life. A head...' to 'these undulations splinter life ahead.'
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2020
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Thanks so much for your supportive comments, LisaMay. Always appreciated. Stay safe. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I sense a little bit your activist side that fights for women rights:"of troth, with women no longer bonded to obey.
Love and honour, yes - providing it's two-way.
Together take the ups and downs of fate but, without equality,
these undulations splinter life ahead." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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I sense a little bit your activist side that fights for women rights:"of troth, with women no longer bonded to obey.
Love and honour, yes - providing it's two-way.
Together take the ups and downs of fate but, without equality,
these undulations splinter life ahead." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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Thanks, Iza. I appreciate your review and kind comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from damommy
I see you went with another form of the fusion sonnet. It reads beautifully. You always write such elegant poetry, and this is no exception. I wish I had a six left. I try to hoard them, unsuccessfully. 8-)
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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I see you went with another form of the fusion sonnet. It reads beautifully. You always write such elegant poetry, and this is no exception. I wish I had a six left. I try to hoard them, unsuccessfully. 8-)
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Thanks, Yvonne. I appreciate your comments about this poem. I don't think a great deal of the Fusion Sonnet form, but it was good exercise for the grey cells trying to make something of it. All the best, Tony.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Excellent poem written in a very Complex style. I like your idea of presenting a scene from hamlet in a new poetic form. Excellent choice of words in this unique writing. Bill
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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Excellent poem written in a very Complex style. I like your idea of presenting a scene from hamlet in a new poetic form. Excellent choice of words in this unique writing. Bill
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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Thanks, Bill, for your review and kind comments. Thank you, too, for the sixth star. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Tony, I understand your poem 50 times better than the Bard himself ( Here I refer to the direct transcription from Hamlet included in your author's notes )
I wish I had six stars to award you for this Sonnet, for the first time in my life, I understand WHY she did it.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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Dear Tony, I understand your poem 50 times better than the Bard himself ( Here I refer to the direct transcription from Hamlet included in your author's notes )
I wish I had six stars to award you for this Sonnet, for the first time in my life, I understand WHY she did it.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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Thanks, Suzanna, for your review and kind comments. I appreciate the virtual sixth star. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written fusion sonnet about the life and end fate of the character Ophelia and you make this complicated format so easy, I did not have time to study it yet, I hope to be able to write mine on Monday.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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A very well-written fusion sonnet about the life and end fate of the character Ophelia and you make this complicated format so easy, I did not have time to study it yet, I hope to be able to write mine on Monday.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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Thanks, Sandra I appreciate your review and kind comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from rjuselius
Indeed, I totally agree with you. Equality is the foremost important social commentary in the world. In my honest opinion I think equality makes the world a better place to live.
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings and a larger than life hug!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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Indeed, I totally agree with you. Equality is the foremost important social commentary in the world. In my honest opinion I think equality makes the world a better place to live.
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings and a larger than life hug!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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Thanks, Rebekka. I appreciate your review, kind comments, and larger than life hug. Best wishes, Tony
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My pleasure entirely dear Tony <3
