Comment from Patricia Cammish

Good

This is a poignant evocation of emotions felt after a rift in a relationship.
Your illustration is very effective
In my opinion I think it would to have break , put a full stop and start again on a new line after 'to you'. This would give a caesura in your narrative and give the reader or speaker time to reflect before you move on.
Excellent subject

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020

Thank you for your review.

Comment from Susan X Smith

Excellent

This is a sad, sad story within a poem about unrequited love. It is a good entry for the Nonet contest, fulfilling the requirements. The picture is a fitting complement.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020

Thank you so much your review means a great deal.

Comment from RodG

Excellent

Am imagining the Speaker in your Nonet is young like the figure in the accompanying picture. She tells us her heart is broken and she can't believe he can be laughing with his friends. You evoke our sympathy for her and wrath for him.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020

Thank you for your encouraging review.

Comment from Sheila Golding

Excellent

Oh what a sad poem, it is so difficult when this happens, very difficult to come to terms with life after love. Good luck with this piece, have as good a Christmas as possible ð???

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020

Thank you for your review.