Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Your words are very visual, and your image is perfect, Melissa. I enjoyed reading your tanka. Great job with the tanka style. Your words read smoothly with great imagery.
Respectfully, Jan

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 Comment Written 29-Nov-2020

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020

Hello Jan. Thanks so much for your wonderful comments.

Melissa

Comment from Mark D. R.

Excellent

Melissa,

One can just hear those drip-drip sounds echoing in those deep ice caverns. Nice imagery expressed throughout your Tanka verse. Your selected artwork complements your words perfectly.

teasing or teases? - same syllable count, but not in sync with 'bouncing' word choice on the last line

Thanks for a cold contrast to my 'warm' 49 degree sunny day (-; It dipped to below freezing at night.

Mark


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 Comment Written 29-Nov-2020

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020

Thanks Mark!! I used your suggestion. I think it improved it. :)

MElissa