Tanka (all whispers echo)
a Tanka22 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
This is a beautiful, very lyrical poem. It makes us want to whisper, to be still, to let this atmosphere of beauty be absorbed. It is very well written, and accompanied by a magnificent photo.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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This is a beautiful, very lyrical poem. It makes us want to whisper, to be still, to let this atmosphere of beauty be absorbed. It is very well written, and accompanied by a magnificent photo.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Hi Wendy... thanks so very much for the lovely words.
Melissa
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a beautiful poem and amazing photo, which reminded me of Iceland. I like the following two lines:
teases the icicles with
bouncing reverberations
These two lines are very visual.
Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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What a beautiful poem and amazing photo, which reminded me of Iceland. I like the following two lines:
teases the icicles with
bouncing reverberations
These two lines are very visual.
Well done.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Hi Lisa... Thanks so much, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from poetwatch
That's a chilly looking cave with that ice hanging everywhere, Melissa. :) I must say (Not too loud) that I would only whisper in that cave. With winter getting dressed in white it looks like most everyone is in for a doozy. Very good Tanka. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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That's a chilly looking cave with that ice hanging everywhere, Melissa. :) I must say (Not too loud) that I would only whisper in that cave. With winter getting dressed in white it looks like most everyone is in for a doozy. Very good Tanka. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Hi Jose.... thank you for your wonderful comments... I would just love to sit and whisper in that cave. Haha! :)
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
This is lovely, with great appeal to senses of sight and sound. The echoing and reverberations give the cave an eerie, supernatural feeling. The cave is ethereal. Ingenious imagery of the sound teasing the icicles. Beautiful presentation for this Tanka. judi
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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This is lovely, with great appeal to senses of sight and sound. The echoing and reverberations give the cave an eerie, supernatural feeling. The cave is ethereal. Ingenious imagery of the sound teasing the icicles. Beautiful presentation for this Tanka. judi
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Hi Judi. I am so glad you like this Tanka... I have not written one in a while and thought it would be fun. :). Thanks!!!
Melissa
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You're welcome. I like the Tanka form. judi
Comment from Sally Law
Icy good Tanka, dear Melissa. I like the lower case lettering and format. Everything gives it a cool feel. Marvelous offering!!
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs...
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Icy good Tanka, dear Melissa. I like the lower case lettering and format. Everything gives it a cool feel. Marvelous offering!!
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs...
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Hi Sally. I am so glad you liked this Tanka... I have not written one in a while and thought it would be fun :). Thanks so much.
Melissa
Comment from Mistydawn
You painted such a vivid picture with your words that I felt like I was there with you, seeing it hearing it for myself. I imagine it would be a fascinating experience walking through the ice laden cave. Your artwork is gorgeous, so mystical, enchanting.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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You painted such a vivid picture with your words that I felt like I was there with you, seeing it hearing it for myself. I imagine it would be a fascinating experience walking through the ice laden cave. Your artwork is gorgeous, so mystical, enchanting.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Hi Misty. I am so glad you enjoyed this Tanka... had not written one in a while. It would be fun to sit in that ice cave and whisper... :)
Melissa
Comment from Colin John
Hi Melissa, you have pulled it off again with the photo and the poem, got a chill just reading it and looking into this cave.Many thanks for sharing, kind regards Colin, xx
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Hi Melissa, you have pulled it off again with the photo and the poem, got a chill just reading it and looking into this cave.Many thanks for sharing, kind regards Colin, xx
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Hi Colin. Thanks so much, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a really lovely and skillfully-composed piece. Descriptions are vivid and appealing. You have brought the scene to life through excellent use of personification. GREAT artwork
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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This is a really lovely and skillfully-composed piece. Descriptions are vivid and appealing. You have brought the scene to life through excellent use of personification. GREAT artwork
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Thank you Janice.... I nearly had forgotten how to write a Tanka.. LOL. :). Have a lovely day!!
Melissa
Comment from Pantygynt
This could well be your best tanka yet. That upper poem (kami-no-ku) echoes Basho's famous frog haiku -
'The old pond
A frog leaps in
Sound of the water' -
with its third line concentrating on the sound. In addition that third line forms a splendid opening to the lower poem (shimo-no-ku). I wish you had been able to enter this into a tanka contest. I would vote it a winner.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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This could well be your best tanka yet. That upper poem (kami-no-ku) echoes Basho's famous frog haiku -
'The old pond
A frog leaps in
Sound of the water' -
with its third line concentrating on the sound. In addition that third line forms a splendid opening to the lower poem (shimo-no-ku). I wish you had been able to enter this into a tanka contest. I would vote it a winner.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Hello Jim... thank you so much... since you are a master at Tanka, I especially value this review. I am still unsure of myself in crafting verses /tankas with fewer syllables. That is my next goal.. after sonnets :). Thanks again!
Melissa
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Tanka about the echoing whispers through the ethereal cave when the icicles teases with bouncing reverberations through the tunnels of the cave.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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A very well-written Tanka about the echoing whispers through the ethereal cave when the icicles teases with bouncing reverberations through the tunnels of the cave.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Thanks so very much, Sandra!!
Melissa
