Renga Two
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Last Supper on the Titanic"multi-author book number two
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Last Supper on the Titannic
by Mark D. R.
Hello, Mark,
Good addition to our renga book. You have moved it along a new pathway... Great job. Is still linked to the previous one by supper and meal.
Hugs,
Gypsy
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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Last Supper on the Titannic
by Mark D. R.
Hello, Mark,
Good addition to our renga book. You have moved it along a new pathway... Great job. Is still linked to the previous one by supper and meal.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment Written 29-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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Thanks Gypsy.
Pleased you liked my addition to your renga collaboration.
Mark
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Mark,
I just watched a commentary on the Titanic. There were so many issues that terrible night. There were warnings sent from nearby ships about "bergy bits", growlers, and actual icebergs. They were ignored. In fact, the radio operators told them to "Shut up! Shut up! Shut up!"
There were tales of bravery and cowardice. The band played "Nearer My God To Thee" as the ship was going down. Most men knew their lives were over. They would soon die in the freezing ocean waves. But White Star's chairman, Bruce Ismay, managed to get into a lifeboat.
One lifeboat only had 29 people in it, when it could have handled 65! One of the ship's legacies was that she had 18 lifeboats that, in total, could only accommodate 1,178 people. However, there were approximately 2,208 on board. Most lifeboats did not return for survivors in fear of being swamped by those still struggling in the water, even though they were only half full.
First class passengers had priority. The very first child placed in a lifeboat was the 4th lowered off the side of the ship.
So many issues! It was a sad night.
I noticed your title is spelled with 2 N's... "Last Supper on the Titannic". That being said, I liked your title. Christ knew it would be His last supper. But these first class passengers had no idea.
We never know when our last meal might be. Only those in prison, on Death's Row, know when their last meal is going to be. First class passengers were dressed in their very best as the ship speeded towards that iceberg... near full speed, in the dark, depending on two lookouts who spotted the iceberg dead ahead. But there wasn't enough time to turn the ship at that speed. It was more important to reach the United States in record time, and attract perspective future and repeat customers.
Great topic for your contemporary Haiku poem. It's one of the most chilling stories ever recorded. Reading your poem, I can imagine the well-to-do passengers strolling to their tables that would be soon underwater!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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Hi Mark,
I just watched a commentary on the Titanic. There were so many issues that terrible night. There were warnings sent from nearby ships about "bergy bits", growlers, and actual icebergs. They were ignored. In fact, the radio operators told them to "Shut up! Shut up! Shut up!"
There were tales of bravery and cowardice. The band played "Nearer My God To Thee" as the ship was going down. Most men knew their lives were over. They would soon die in the freezing ocean waves. But White Star's chairman, Bruce Ismay, managed to get into a lifeboat.
One lifeboat only had 29 people in it, when it could have handled 65! One of the ship's legacies was that she had 18 lifeboats that, in total, could only accommodate 1,178 people. However, there were approximately 2,208 on board. Most lifeboats did not return for survivors in fear of being swamped by those still struggling in the water, even though they were only half full.
First class passengers had priority. The very first child placed in a lifeboat was the 4th lowered off the side of the ship.
So many issues! It was a sad night.
I noticed your title is spelled with 2 N's... "Last Supper on the Titannic". That being said, I liked your title. Christ knew it would be His last supper. But these first class passengers had no idea.
We never know when our last meal might be. Only those in prison, on Death's Row, know when their last meal is going to be. First class passengers were dressed in their very best as the ship speeded towards that iceberg... near full speed, in the dark, depending on two lookouts who spotted the iceberg dead ahead. But there wasn't enough time to turn the ship at that speed. It was more important to reach the United States in record time, and attract perspective future and repeat customers.
Great topic for your contemporary Haiku poem. It's one of the most chilling stories ever recorded. Reading your poem, I can imagine the well-to-do passengers strolling to their tables that would be soon underwater!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 29-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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Kimbob,
I corrected my title to Titanic and edited my first line to rod myself of that dreaded 'the.'
You may want to Google the General Slocum disaster on the East River of NYC on June 15,1904. The number of fatalities was less than the Titanic but the percentage of passengers killed was much higher. No ice berg, but the boat caught fire! Life preservers had defects (and had not been properly inspected) and those who is ed them likely drowned from the deteriorated contents of the same.
Mark
Comment from Mrs. KT
Oh Mark!
Sobering impression, indeed!
Visually and emotionally keen.
If I may, would suggest eliminating "the" in the first line. That way you can go "full throttle" with
evening bell clangs ...
Just a thought. Hoping I have helped.
Take Care!
dine
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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Oh Mark!
Sobering impression, indeed!
Visually and emotionally keen.
If I may, would suggest eliminating "the" in the first line. That way you can go "full throttle" with
evening bell clangs ...
Just a thought. Hoping I have helped.
Take Care!
dine
Comment Written 29-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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thanks Diane aka Dine!
Yes, I edited out that dreaded 'the.' I often forget that rules for writing books and letters do not necessarily follow poetry. Just as with da Vinci's Last Supper, there were tragic consequences for some of the Titanic diners.
As always, I appreciate your reviews and for keeping me honest.
Mark
Comment from RodG
A great photo chosen selected. A year ago I saw the marvelous permanent Titanic exhibit at the Luxor Hotel in Vegas and saw a facsimile of the first class deck. In your poem we almost hear that bell clang and allow our imaginations to drift back to that fateful night. Rod
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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A great photo chosen selected. A year ago I saw the marvelous permanent Titanic exhibit at the Luxor Hotel in Vegas and saw a facsimile of the first class deck. In your poem we almost hear that bell clang and allow our imaginations to drift back to that fateful night. Rod
Comment Written 29-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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Rod,
That exhibit must have been fantastic. There are so many stories about the passengers on that fateful ship, including the Unsinkable Molly Brown.
Check out the General Slocum excursion boat disaster on the East River on a sunny June 15, 1904 day. More people died from the fire and drowning than any other NYC catastrophe before the towers fell on 9-11. The percentage of deaths from this catastrophe greatly exceeded the Titannic?s death toll rate.
Mark
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Thanks for the tip, Mark.
That exhibit in Vegas was worth the trip.
Rod
