I Hate Being Old
For those who are feeling their age.23 total reviews
Comment from Lobber
Hello my friend,
I'm 73 and have lived your painful life ten-fold -- you have my sincere sympathy. My saviours? I started to write as part of my pain management. The others now include 30 mg of time-release morphine with (three per day, only if needed) of 10 mg of morphine for quick relief. Finally, I take 2-5 ml of Cannabidiol (CBD) oil. Pain relief CAN BE just around the corner. You must read my short romp: )Can You Watch My Cane?( https://www.fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?id=1003734
- Lobber
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
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Hello my friend,
I'm 73 and have lived your painful life ten-fold -- you have my sincere sympathy. My saviours? I started to write as part of my pain management. The others now include 30 mg of time-release morphine with (three per day, only if needed) of 10 mg of morphine for quick relief. Finally, I take 2-5 ml of Cannabidiol (CBD) oil. Pain relief CAN BE just around the corner. You must read my short romp: )Can You Watch My Cane?( https://www.fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?id=1003734
- Lobber
Comment Written 01-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
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Hi, Lobber, I am distressed knowing you spend so much time in pain. Many thanks for sharing my poem and for all those bright stars. I will read your story. Rod
Comment from Julie Sandy
Great poem on the theme of betrayal, definitely a different perspective of betrayal our own bodies betraying us. Not just when we are old.
If only we could all feel great always :-)
Thanks for sharing, good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
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Great poem on the theme of betrayal, definitely a different perspective of betrayal our own bodies betraying us. Not just when we are old.
If only we could all feel great always :-)
Thanks for sharing, good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
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You are right. One does not have to be old to feel his body betrayed him. Several reviewers pointed this out. I do appreciate your sharing my poem and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from sammielwf
Rod
Within the lines of I Hate Being Old you have captured the age old complaint....time goes by way too fast..and my body was not built for speed!
I enjoyed the humor and the reality of your Betrayal poem.
You crafted the storyline very well.
Sammielwf
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
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Rod
Within the lines of I Hate Being Old you have captured the age old complaint....time goes by way too fast..and my body was not built for speed!
I enjoyed the humor and the reality of your Betrayal poem.
You crafted the storyline very well.
Sammielwf
Comment Written 01-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
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I am so pleased you saw the humor as well as the reality of my poem. Many thanks for sharing and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Bill Schott
This quatern of betrayal, I Hate Being Old, covers all the likely areas where the body starts giving out and living is replaced by existing.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
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This quatern of betrayal, I Hate Being Old, covers all the likely areas where the body starts giving out and living is replaced by existing.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
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Thank you, Bill, for sharing my poem. I do hope you don't share the complaints of my narrator. Rod
Comment from l.raven
I do admit there are those days I feel the same way...
I try to remember that this is only a stop off to
where I will spend eternal life...pain free...
I love your poem...very well written...picture speaks
for itself...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
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I do admit there are those days I feel the same way...
I try to remember that this is only a stop off to
where I will spend eternal life...pain free...
I love your poem...very well written...picture speaks
for itself...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
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Thank you, Linda, for sharing my poem and your kind praise. Rod
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your so welcome Rod...love xxoo
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is quite a humorous poem. The lucky ones get to grow old and struggle with, or laugh at the changes. The explanation under your poem states that this is a Quatern, a poem with four quatrains where one line is repeated in every stanza. I didn't see the pattern, but I did recognize the rhyming and humor.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
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This is quite a humorous poem. The lucky ones get to grow old and struggle with, or laugh at the changes. The explanation under your poem states that this is a Quatern, a poem with four quatrains where one line is repeated in every stanza. I didn't see the pattern, but I did recognize the rhyming and humor.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
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Hi, Lorraine. I am delighted you enjoyed the humor of my poem. The usual pattern of a Quatern is for the repeating line to be #1 in stanza 1, #2 in stanza 2, #3 in stanza 3, and #4 in stanza 4. I think if reread the poem, you'll see that's what I've done.
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Hi RodG, How did I ever miss the repeating line? "My body aches. I feel betrayed." I must have been reading too fast and merely identifying with the humor and betrayal which I must admit I experience. Please accept my apology.
Lorraine
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I am just pleased you enjoyed my poem. Rod
Comment from artisart4u
Yes, when we are old we feel betrayed, left behind and etc..
But the real thing is we have to accept what we are, old, and deal with it- get the cane, walker or whatever it takes for us to be able to move without being helped by someone. It can be scary at times, disappointing and you want to give up. It is time to think of all the good you have done when you were able to function.
You did a good job in writing your poem and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
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Yes, when we are old we feel betrayed, left behind and etc..
But the real thing is we have to accept what we are, old, and deal with it- get the cane, walker or whatever it takes for us to be able to move without being helped by someone. It can be scary at times, disappointing and you want to give up. It is time to think of all the good you have done when you were able to function.
You did a good job in writing your poem and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
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What you say is so true. One learns to live with the pain and move on. I truly appreciate your kind praise and all those stars. Thank you. Rod
Comment from LisaMay
The way your repeat line moves down through the stanzas is a great way to reinforce the theme and end on a strong line. These 'constant breakdowns' are surely a betrayal of our desire to live pain-free and mobile. One line in your poem ("These knees announced they're finished too.") is in a different size to the others - you probably amended it at a later time but to me it looks slightly odd:
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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The way your repeat line moves down through the stanzas is a great way to reinforce the theme and end on a strong line. These 'constant breakdowns' are surely a betrayal of our desire to live pain-free and mobile. One line in your poem ("These knees announced they're finished too.") is in a different size to the others - you probably amended it at a later time but to me it looks slightly odd:
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Hi Lisa. Thank you very much for sharing my Betrayal poem. Your comments are much appreciated. That line IS a different size because FanStory's posting system put the last word on a separate line if I made it the same size as the others.
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It sure is a bit annoying how the on-screen look can vary for people. I recently did a circular shape-poem but it doesn't look like a circle when viewed on some devices.
Maybe you should make ALL the lines to that smaller size?
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You are probably right. Thanks for the advice.
Comment from Jerome Goldberg
Great poem - I can relate to everything except the wanting to say good by. As long as you can write poems like this, a few aches and pains are a small price to pay - hang in there - Jerry
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Great poem - I can relate to everything except the wanting to say good by. As long as you can write poems like this, a few aches and pains are a small price to pay - hang in there - Jerry
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much, Jerry, for your kind response to my poem. I do hang in there. Fortunately I am in less pain when I sit and write poetry on my computer.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Quatern poem about the body's betrayal when we are getting older. We suddenly have pains in places we never know existed before.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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A very well-written Quatern poem about the body's betrayal when we are getting older. We suddenly have pains in places we never know existed before.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Yes, getting old is no fun. Thank you very much, Sandra, for sharing my poem and your kind praise.
