Lamentations of a Lost Laddy
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7 total reviews
Comment from mermaids
I love reading memoirs and your vacuum cleaner and cat tale held my interest. I am a vacuum fanatic and admire your ability to repair them. Excellent writing that flows smoothly and creates clear scenes. I am looking forward to the next chapter. Loved the line Luci in the Skies.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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I love reading memoirs and your vacuum cleaner and cat tale held my interest. I am a vacuum fanatic and admire your ability to repair them. Excellent writing that flows smoothly and creates clear scenes. I am looking forward to the next chapter. Loved the line Luci in the Skies.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Are mermaids, can't tell you how much I appreciate you continue to support here. it is doubly appreciated because I have very little to offer at this point in time ever do you have validated me, in return I give acknowledgement where it is due
Warmly,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
Comment from irishauthorme
If you believe in God, then you must also believe there is a Grand Plan for each of us, notwithstanding our free will, which allows us to make choices that affect the direction of our lives and our futures, good or bad. Those faint feelings, that little inclination toward someone or something are too often ignored in the momentary impulses we all suffer from. If the Greatest Gift is Love, then helping someone with no thought of return is certainly the second. There are few who give, many who only take, and in between there are those of us who hesitate, caught in the middle of
"Is that the right path, the right thing, the right person?"
Mathew 8:26 And He saith unto them; "Why are ye fearful, o ye of little faith?" Then He arose, and rebuked the winds and the sea, and there was a great calm.
A Great Calm. Faith.
irish
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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If you believe in God, then you must also believe there is a Grand Plan for each of us, notwithstanding our free will, which allows us to make choices that affect the direction of our lives and our futures, good or bad. Those faint feelings, that little inclination toward someone or something are too often ignored in the momentary impulses we all suffer from. If the Greatest Gift is Love, then helping someone with no thought of return is certainly the second. There are few who give, many who only take, and in between there are those of us who hesitate, caught in the middle of
"Is that the right path, the right thing, the right person?"
Mathew 8:26 And He saith unto them; "Why are ye fearful, o ye of little faith?" Then He arose, and rebuked the winds and the sea, and there was a great calm.
A Great Calm. Faith.
irish
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Interesting. I just saw a poster that said,
" If you are a giver set boundaries, as the takers have none"
Comment from Taurus the Elder
Very good. I don't usually review storeys, but here goes. Your words paint a picture of a small suburban community we all would love to live in. Where people care for each other and put true meaning into the word neighbor. Adding the beagle was a nice touch. Great job, keep writing.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Very good. I don't usually review storeys, but here goes. Your words paint a picture of a small suburban community we all would love to live in. Where people care for each other and put true meaning into the word neighbor. Adding the beagle was a nice touch. Great job, keep writing.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review, I appreciate you going out of your way to review a story. This isn't so much of a story as it is an entry in my biography. I would like to encourage you to go into this biography there's a chapter called Darren called my personal testimony and there's a chapter called Angel Faith holy Spirit come would you might also find an entertaining. Thanks again so much for your wonderful of you, and your support here. I am sincerely appreciative.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
Comment from Liz O'Neill
When you talk about the appliance grave yard, it reminds me of a notorious fellow. I'm not sure if he repaired appliances or just trashed his own, but we always knew when we were hitting his property. It began with an old top-loader washing machine. A few 1000 feet farther, there was a stove, then a dryer. On and on with apliance samples til you got to his driveway. Then it changed to other things needing to be repaired, snowmobiles, lawnmowers etc. This has great meaning.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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When you talk about the appliance grave yard, it reminds me of a notorious fellow. I'm not sure if he repaired appliances or just trashed his own, but we always knew when we were hitting his property. It began with an old top-loader washing machine. A few 1000 feet farther, there was a stove, then a dryer. On and on with apliance samples til you got to his driveway. Then it changed to other things needing to be repaired, snowmobiles, lawnmowers etc. This has great meaning.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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thanks Liz I love you reviews because you can relate to everything that I wrote and have a great stories about it. Appreciate your comments, God bless and happy holidays. Stay safe!
Darren
Comment from lyenochka
Good for you, Darren! So great that you could use your God-given talent to repair that discarded Hoover and make it useful and then also repair the other vacuum cleaner for your friend. Praise God!!
To me, this who was no meer coincidence, (remove "who" and change "meer" to "mere")
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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Good for you, Darren! So great that you could use your God-given talent to repair that discarded Hoover and make it useful and then also repair the other vacuum cleaner for your friend. Praise God!!
To me, this who was no meer coincidence, (remove "who" and change "meer" to "mere")
Comment Written 28-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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Thanks so much Helen I have performed in edit.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
darrenlgandy@yahoo.com
Comment from lancellot
This will need some editing. I suggest focusing on whether you want this past or present tense and stay with one. There are other things too. I listed some to give you an idea of what to look for.
notes
If you go down my street Los Robles and you take a left on {high} Street
- should be: High Street. Proper name.
Sometimes {there's} clothes there, food, and quite often {there's} vacuum cleaners.
Should be: There are; plural
{my roommate} Perry and I collect these to get the belts off of them and to repair them so as a result we have some vacuum cleaners in the [backyard, {space} along} with a number of other appliances.
-should be: My roommate, Perry
One day I was riding my bike home from the market and I saw {a} vacuum cleaner on the sidewalk in front of the house next to the Baptist Church which is across from where I live on Los Robles boulevard.
- add missing word.
It {is} a Hoover vacuum cleaner with a HEPA filter which is designed for households with pets.
- was. This tale is past tense.
So[,] I took it apart and cleaned it and it {turns} out it was clogged solid.
-turned. Past tense
{so using} a hanger to remove
= So, using
There is a gentleman who {lived} there named Mark who is a paraplegic.
- lives.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2020
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This will need some editing. I suggest focusing on whether you want this past or present tense and stay with one. There are other things too. I listed some to give you an idea of what to look for.
notes
If you go down my street Los Robles and you take a left on {high} Street
- should be: High Street. Proper name.
Sometimes {there's} clothes there, food, and quite often {there's} vacuum cleaners.
Should be: There are; plural
{my roommate} Perry and I collect these to get the belts off of them and to repair them so as a result we have some vacuum cleaners in the [backyard, {space} along} with a number of other appliances.
-should be: My roommate, Perry
One day I was riding my bike home from the market and I saw {a} vacuum cleaner on the sidewalk in front of the house next to the Baptist Church which is across from where I live on Los Robles boulevard.
- add missing word.
It {is} a Hoover vacuum cleaner with a HEPA filter which is designed for households with pets.
- was. This tale is past tense.
So[,] I took it apart and cleaned it and it {turns} out it was clogged solid.
-turned. Past tense
{so using} a hanger to remove
= So, using
There is a gentleman who {lived} there named Mark who is a paraplegic.
- lives.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2020
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Great review, thanks for your help I really appreciate it. The only part is that Mark no longer lives in that house he lives in another address but thank you so much for the help it's really appreciated.
Comment from GE Parson
No doubt it, your finding that vacuum and had the insight to pick it up, take it home and had the ability to clean it up was a [as my friend says] a God thing. Then coming into contact with the lady whose vacuum had the same problem that earned you $10.00
was definitely of the leading of the
Lord.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2020
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No doubt it, your finding that vacuum and had the insight to pick it up, take it home and had the ability to clean it up was a [as my friend says] a God thing. Then coming into contact with the lady whose vacuum had the same problem that earned you $10.00
was definitely of the leading of the
Lord.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2020
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Thank you for your Acknowledgement and testimony, a pleasure to fellowship with you here.
And it's always a pleasure to meet a new author.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
