The Vixen
Know your friends.2 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
What a stunner--double cross! Brisk, suspenseful--fine work!
there comes a wrap [RAP] on the other side.
"Help," she screams out--(?) why scream for help when she hasn't yet turned to seen Crystal pointing the gun.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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What a stunner--double cross! Brisk, suspenseful--fine work!
there comes a wrap [RAP] on the other side.
"Help," she screams out--(?) why scream for help when she hasn't yet turned to seen Crystal pointing the gun.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Thanks for pointing out my error on (wr)ap. Actually the point of her screaming was so that she would appear innocent in Austin's death. Did appreciate the review.
Comment from roof35
You have told a complete assassination story in the within the five hundred words. Nicely done. I Think you may have left out a word and may want to fix it: "Those from rush onto the scene."
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2020
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You have told a complete assassination story in the within the five hundred words. Nicely done. I Think you may have left out a word and may want to fix it: "Those from rush onto the scene."
Comment Written 26-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2020
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Thank you. I probably did when I edited it down. Went a bit over the word count first time. Thank you for catching my error. Appreciate the comments and rating.
