A Slight Underestimation
A modified Pantygynt poem30 total reviews
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Woman, I had to give this modified piece a solid six. Perfectly done in form, rhyme and meter and a real joy to read. I loved it. Very much fun to read
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
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Woman, I had to give this modified piece a solid six. Perfectly done in form, rhyme and meter and a real joy to read. I loved it. Very much fun to read
Comment Written 24-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
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Thank you, Barb! I really appreciate this. I'm so happy you like my bit of silliness. I couldn't resist it when I saw that picture.
Comment from royowen
I like the mixed meter, it finds a great medium, in the two separate meters, the regular ballad style, and the tetrametric stanza hat gives it metric freedom, to design it similarly to a song with chorus, well done Yvonne, cleverly written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
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I like the mixed meter, it finds a great medium, in the two separate meters, the regular ballad style, and the tetrametric stanza hat gives it metric freedom, to design it similarly to a song with chorus, well done Yvonne, cleverly written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much. I'm so glad you think so.
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Well done
Comment from judiverse
'this is fun. The rhyme is delightful. A failure in oversight can be anyone's undoing. Nice turn on the expression "The early bird catches the worm." I wonder if the fisherman will survive to tell his fish tale. Very enjoyable. judi
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
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'this is fun. The rhyme is delightful. A failure in oversight can be anyone's undoing. Nice turn on the expression "The early bird catches the worm." I wonder if the fisherman will survive to tell his fish tale. Very enjoyable. judi
Comment Written 24-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
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I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for a great review.
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from Wendy G
What a lovely and humorous little piece! I enjoyed this poem, and the rhythm and rhyme are just right for this style. I also liked the accompanying sketch. Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
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What a lovely and humorous little piece! I enjoyed this poem, and the rhythm and rhyme are just right for this style. I also liked the accompanying sketch. Well done.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
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Thank you. I'm so glad you liked it.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This skillfully-written, vividly creative poem sends a powerful message about the pitfalls that over-confidence in one's self and underestimating the rival can engender!
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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This skillfully-written, vividly creative poem sends a powerful message about the pitfalls that over-confidence in one's self and underestimating the rival can engender!
Comment Written 24-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Thanks. He should have looked things over a bit. hahaha
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like this poem. It is vividly written and you can see what is happening.
Life is tough. Don't understand everything otherwise the chance of success is dim. Sometimes things may not look like what they appear to be. Similarly what you hear may not be true.
Be a little more analytical because you jump to any conclusion.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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I like this poem. It is vividly written and you can see what is happening.
Life is tough. Don't understand everything otherwise the chance of success is dim. Sometimes things may not look like what they appear to be. Similarly what you hear may not be true.
Be a little more analytical because you jump to any conclusion.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Quite so. I think he's learned his lesson.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a clever entertaining write and you made me smile, it flows smoothly and the rhymes are well chosen and it is a fun story, much enjoyed. I think you mean (slight) in your notes, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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This is a clever entertaining write and you made me smile, it flows smoothly and the rhymes are well chosen and it is a fun story, much enjoyed. I think you mean (slight) in your notes, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Ooops again. Thanks. I look at it. Glad I made you smile.
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
Yours is a very cute and funny poem, which I thoroughly enjoyed.
The artwork is also enjoyable.
The rhyme sequencing worked well and the typeface is a good fun choice.
Well done.
This isn't a true story, is it? :)
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Yours is a very cute and funny poem, which I thoroughly enjoyed.
The artwork is also enjoyable.
The rhyme sequencing worked well and the typeface is a good fun choice.
Well done.
This isn't a true story, is it? :)
Comment Written 24-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Not that I know of. hahaha. Thanks for reviewing.
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You are more than welcome.
Comment from robyn corum
Yvonne,
Aahhhh... worm-gathering from the perspective of a bird. I had never really thought about it, but I can imagine a poor, unsuspecting birdie could get himself into all kinds of messes - what if he picked out a small snake instead of a worm? What if that snake bit him?
Oh, my. So much to think about now! hahaha
A tiny suggestion (that you are welcome to ignore):
--> it's harder than I thought (t')would be.
Thanks a bunch!
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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Yvonne,
Aahhhh... worm-gathering from the perspective of a bird. I had never really thought about it, but I can imagine a poor, unsuspecting birdie could get himself into all kinds of messes - what if he picked out a small snake instead of a worm? What if that snake bit him?
Oh, my. So much to think about now! hahaha
A tiny suggestion (that you are welcome to ignore):
--> it's harder than I thought (t')would be.
Thanks a bunch!
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Comment Written 24-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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I started to use 'twould. I'll change it. Thanks, Robyn.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Charming bit of whimsy in graceful flow and fine rhyme! This is a treat to read--a welcome diversion from the political rants of late. So clever--should have been for contest.
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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Charming bit of whimsy in graceful flow and fine rhyme! This is a treat to read--a welcome diversion from the political rants of late. So clever--should have been for contest.
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Comment Written 24-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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I couldn't resist it when I saw the picture. Thanks, Elizabeth.
