Advice for the heart
5-7-5 poem19 total reviews
Comment from sammielwf
Lancellot,
Spoken as the true chivalrous name sake that you are.
The Advice for the Heart is a good write and I think will draw a few knowing smiles.
Let me offer a modern twist to this...
My mama used to say...
A guy will go as far as a girl will let him. You ( meaning me). No let them!
This from my Italian mama with a very family oriented view of the work.
I liked this little piece Sir Modern Day Lancellot.
Sammielwf
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Lancellot,
Spoken as the true chivalrous name sake that you are.
The Advice for the Heart is a good write and I think will draw a few knowing smiles.
Let me offer a modern twist to this...
My mama used to say...
A guy will go as far as a girl will let him. You ( meaning me). No let them!
This from my Italian mama with a very family oriented view of the work.
I liked this little piece Sir Modern Day Lancellot.
Sammielwf
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I believe if a guy truly respects a girl he will be patient. If he's just out for the thrill he won't and not worth wasting time on. LOL Thank you for sharing this well written contest entry and good luck.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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I believe if a guy truly respects a girl he will be patient. If he's just out for the thrill he won't and not worth wasting time on. LOL Thank you for sharing this well written contest entry and good luck.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
So true and the longer it takes the deeper the meaning of love and the stronger the connection. Some encounters are not meant to be and some are worth awaiting for, wise words, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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So true and the longer it takes the deeper the meaning of love and the stronger the connection. Some encounters are not meant to be and some are worth awaiting for, wise words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from ESOSTINE
Well written! Our love for one another tends to grow patiently with time as trust is built and confidence level grows. Thanks so much for sharing your insight.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Well written! Our love for one another tends to grow patiently with time as trust is built and confidence level grows. Thanks so much for sharing your insight.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Advice for the heart", is short, succinct, and very much to the point. Woven through each short line, are the golden threads of truth. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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"Advice for the heart", is short, succinct, and very much to the point. Woven through each short line, are the golden threads of truth. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much
You're very welcome.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I rate this poem as outstanding because of the triple line-end rhyme that you managed to introduce without destroying the story or making it sound contrived. Very cleverly done. Katherine
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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I rate this poem as outstanding because of the triple line-end rhyme that you managed to introduce without destroying the story or making it sound contrived. Very cleverly done. Katherine
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from Jay Squires
Well the two in the picture will have better luck taking it slow if the guy can keep his hands out from under the girl's blouse. LOL, this is a clever poem, Lance. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Well the two in the picture will have better luck taking it slow if the guy can keep his hands out from under the girl's blouse. LOL, this is a clever poem, Lance. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from tfawcus
Both the poem and the author comment strike true. The urgency of the male is innate but not particularly conducive to longer-term relationships. As you say, it takes a good girl to teach one this.
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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Both the poem and the author comment strike true. The urgency of the male is innate but not particularly conducive to longer-term relationships. As you say, it takes a good girl to teach one this.
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Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from Carlos' girl
yes dad... funny poem if you are indeed a man...why dont you address your poem to the dudes? tell THEM to take it slow? or is it all on the woman. funny
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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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yes dad... funny poem if you are indeed a man...why dont you address your poem to the dudes? tell THEM to take it slow? or is it all on the woman. funny
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Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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