To the Sea
Life in Uncertain times32 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Congrats on your prize for this contemplative and eloquent poem--powerful imagery--blend both smooth and rough/grit and faith will be enough. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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Congrats on your prize for this contemplative and eloquent poem--powerful imagery--blend both smooth and rough/grit and faith will be enough. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 07-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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Hello Liz... thanks so very much. I appreciate your encouraging words. :)
Melissa
Comment from tempeste
Ciao Sugarray!
Glad to see this beautiful poem made the poem of the month contest !
You used very descriptive words to give your poem life.
The first 2 verses speak of life's trials in a metaphoric way ..
And I love this phrase that follows :
Where was the smoothness of the clay;
the bright sunshine that blessed my way?
(My mamma sculptured and I love the texture of clay .. biggrin)
We are not alone ...God is with us , we just need to search for him in inside us:
Then, deep inside I felt His peace,
a gentle nudge, a calm release.
What a comforting certainty and great rhyme .. these two lines combine perfectly.
We are not alone in these troubled times and our ...
grit and faith will be enough to face what the world throws at us and we will succeed in reaching
the other side of the sea..
......bridge over troubled waters.... came to mind reading your closing verse.
Keep safe sugarray!
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
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Ciao Sugarray!
Glad to see this beautiful poem made the poem of the month contest !
You used very descriptive words to give your poem life.
The first 2 verses speak of life's trials in a metaphoric way ..
And I love this phrase that follows :
Where was the smoothness of the clay;
the bright sunshine that blessed my way?
(My mamma sculptured and I love the texture of clay .. biggrin)
We are not alone ...God is with us , we just need to search for him in inside us:
Then, deep inside I felt His peace,
a gentle nudge, a calm release.
What a comforting certainty and great rhyme .. these two lines combine perfectly.
We are not alone in these troubled times and our ...
grit and faith will be enough to face what the world throws at us and we will succeed in reaching
the other side of the sea..
......bridge over troubled waters.... came to mind reading your closing verse.
Keep safe sugarray!
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
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Thank you so very much, Franca, for your lovely words that have encouraged me in my writing!! How delighted I was to see that you felt the importance of the clay, grit, faith and the goal to reach the other side. Hugs, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from RGstar
Just looking through. I liked this. Fully deserves its place. Beautifully imagery,and a good rhythm throughout.
Wishing you the best of luck.
My best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Just looking through. I liked this. Fully deserves its place. Beautifully imagery,and a good rhythm throughout.
Wishing you the best of luck.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 03-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Thank you so very much RG for the lovely comments. :)
Melissa
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This is another sophisticated poem with a lot of internal reflection which I should learn. Yes. This is a difficult time and I'm also looking forward to reaching to the other side.
Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
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This is another sophisticated poem with a lot of internal reflection which I should learn. Yes. This is a difficult time and I'm also looking forward to reaching to the other side.
Well done.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
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Thanks so much, Lisa!! Have a lovely Thanksgiving!!
Melissa
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Happy Thanksgiving.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Amen to that. What is going on?! It is scary, but what a blessing to know that God is in control no matter what and we can leave it in His hands. He is the bridge over the stormy seas. Well done as always. Rox
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
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Amen to that. What is going on?! It is scary, but what a blessing to know that God is in control no matter what and we can leave it in His hands. He is the bridge over the stormy seas. Well done as always. Rox
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
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Hello Roxanna... thank you so much for the lovely review and comments!!
I hope you enjoy a wonderful Thanksgiving tomorrow!
Melissa
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Your metaphoric poem is so on the mark about the journey of life. We all have our ups and downs and have to hang in there. Inevitably, when we realize we have His support, it becomes easier.
The poem is lovely in its rhyming and the imagery is outstanding.
Ralf
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Your metaphoric poem is so on the mark about the journey of life. We all have our ups and downs and have to hang in there. Inevitably, when we realize we have His support, it becomes easier.
The poem is lovely in its rhyming and the imagery is outstanding.
Ralf
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Hello Raffaelina. Good morning. Thank you for your wonderful comments... I am delighted you liked it and got something from it! Hugs.
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
I certainly admire the rhythm in this. It's very smooth. Your concluding couplet has such truth and feeling in it. There's so much uncertainty in out lives now, we need to have something we can hold on to. In this case, the sea provides the answers. This is very thoughtful, and your word choices are just right to get across your feeling. judi
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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I certainly admire the rhythm in this. It's very smooth. Your concluding couplet has such truth and feeling in it. There's so much uncertainty in out lives now, we need to have something we can hold on to. In this case, the sea provides the answers. This is very thoughtful, and your word choices are just right to get across your feeling. judi
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Hello Judi. Thank you for your lovely review... I am so glad it resonated with you. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from juliaSjames
You use imagery to great effect in this poem, Melissa. Beautifully metered and rhymed, it gives encouragement to all of us who are going through tough times.
I have my personal challenges to face. But my heart goes out to so many others - like parents struggling to care for young children in this pandemic, in many cases without sufficient financial resources; and to places around our world where people already living on the edge are being pushed further into darkness and despair.
Your poem appears as a beacon of much needed hope and light.
Thank you for sharing.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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You use imagery to great effect in this poem, Melissa. Beautifully metered and rhymed, it gives encouragement to all of us who are going through tough times.
I have my personal challenges to face. But my heart goes out to so many others - like parents struggling to care for young children in this pandemic, in many cases without sufficient financial resources; and to places around our world where people already living on the edge are being pushed further into darkness and despair.
Your poem appears as a beacon of much needed hope and light.
Thank you for sharing.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Hello Julia. Thank you for your wonderful review.
You have really encouraged me!
Melissa
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You're welcome Melissa m
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good Morning, Melissa!
Well, I have no idea how I missed this exceptionally well-crafted offering last evening, but I'm glad I did as now I have six stars to affix on your presentation!
What a lovely, heartfelt, faith-redeeming offering.
Your words resonate on a number of levels with me, but your first stanza is my favorite:
I traveled paths of mystery
o'er glens and dales toward the sea.
Through darkened shadows of the wood,
I journeyed on as best I could.
I journey; I stumble, but I continue on ...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Good Morning, Melissa!
Well, I have no idea how I missed this exceptionally well-crafted offering last evening, but I'm glad I did as now I have six stars to affix on your presentation!
What a lovely, heartfelt, faith-redeeming offering.
Your words resonate on a number of levels with me, but your first stanza is my favorite:
I traveled paths of mystery
o'er glens and dales toward the sea.
Through darkened shadows of the wood,
I journeyed on as best I could.
I journey; I stumble, but I continue on ...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Hello Diane. Thank you so much. I appreciate your wonderful comments .. glad you enjoyed it. You have made my day!!!
Melissa
Comment from Colin John
Hi Melissa, don't we just all mostly, just love the sea and the feeling of freshness that it brings to us, a fine poem, and many thanks for sharing kind regards Colin xx
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Hi Melissa, don't we just all mostly, just love the sea and the feeling of freshness that it brings to us, a fine poem, and many thanks for sharing kind regards Colin xx
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Hello Colin... thank you so much for your lovely comments.
Melissa
