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Poem 5/7/518 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Mt. Everest certainly holds archives of many tales of the endeavor of the human spirit. This poem is a nice tribute to those who went to their death in their endeavors. Well thought out.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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Mt. Everest certainly holds archives of many tales of the endeavor of the human spirit. This poem is a nice tribute to those who went to their death in their endeavors. Well thought out.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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Thanks for reviewing and sharing zanya
Comment from sammielwf
Nicely done here mystery poet.
Your 5-7-5 gives the reader a chance to reflect a bit on what tales this magnificent mountain peak could be hiding.
The accompanying photograph that was provided for you lent believability to your entry. You used it well.
Good luck.
Sammielwf
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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Nicely done here mystery poet.
Your 5-7-5 gives the reader a chance to reflect a bit on what tales this magnificent mountain peak could be hiding.
The accompanying photograph that was provided for you lent believability to your entry. You used it well.
Good luck.
Sammielwf
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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Great review zanya
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
A very thought-provoking presentation. It sets the mind to wondering about so much experience hidden from the future inhabitants or hikers.
So much we will never know.
Ralf
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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A very thought-provoking presentation. It sets the mind to wondering about so much experience hidden from the future inhabitants or hikers.
So much we will never know.
Ralf
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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Thanks for reviewing and sharing zanya
Comment from roof35
This is certainly one interesting illustration you have chosen. Of course, it sets the stage for your words. You followed the rules and penned an excellent entry for the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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This is certainly one interesting illustration you have chosen. Of course, it sets the stage for your words. You followed the rules and penned an excellent entry for the contest.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Thanks for a great review zanya
Comment from Ann Market
This is a nice poem. I like the meaning behind it as well as the other "stories" it touches on in the second stanza.
Good luck to you in the contest!
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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This is a nice poem. I like the meaning behind it as well as the other "stories" it touches on in the second stanza.
Good luck to you in the contest!
Comment Written 20-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Thanks for reading and sharing zanya
Comment from Boogienights
This is so true, when you understand the many who have scaled the mountains and succeeded. It is the spirit of these people that inspire us. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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This is so true, when you understand the many who have scaled the mountains and succeeded. It is the spirit of these people that inspire us. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Thanks for reading and reviewing zanya
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about mountains that often hold evidence of humans reached the peaks in their quest to conquer whatever challenge is before them.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about mountains that often hold evidence of humans reached the peaks in their quest to conquer whatever challenge is before them.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Thanks for sharing zanya
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
I like the message of your poem. I like it when animls and other forms of nature are personified. Like "If these walls could talk."
Here the mountains are archivers. Mountains make very good archivers because they are so old.
Quite nice.
I have heard that the contest people tend to like bigger type than a lot of us
use in our entries, so I'd suggest you bump up the type size a little.
I don't love the use of the word "of" twice in the second sentence. I wonder if you could re-work that a bit?
Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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I like the message of your poem. I like it when animls and other forms of nature are personified. Like "If these walls could talk."
Here the mountains are archivers. Mountains make very good archivers because they are so old.
Quite nice.
I have heard that the contest people tend to like bigger type than a lot of us
use in our entries, so I'd suggest you bump up the type size a little.
I don't love the use of the word "of" twice in the second sentence. I wonder if you could re-work that a bit?
Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Thanks for a great & suggestions - much appreciated zanya
Comment from Janice Canerdy
The mountain has long been a symbol of that something we strive for.
Your word choices are uplifting and vivid, conveying a very positive message about persevering to achieve or goals.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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The mountain has long been a symbol of that something we strive for.
Your word choices are uplifting and vivid, conveying a very positive message about persevering to achieve or goals.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Great review zanya
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Startling and fresh imagery: peaks as archives--words thoughtfully chosen for maximum effect: staunch spirit--alliterative as well!
sugg: rework line two--replace "some" --it weakens the poem--also double of/of is awkward--e.g. stunning tales of staunch spirit
I see you changed it--not for the better--syllable count is now only 6--don't you need 7-- also THAT (weak filler) suggest again per above
stunning tales of staunch spirit--strong and triple alliteration.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Startling and fresh imagery: peaks as archives--words thoughtfully chosen for maximum effect: staunch spirit--alliterative as well!
sugg: rework line two--replace "some" --it weakens the poem--also double of/of is awkward--e.g. stunning tales of staunch spirit
I see you changed it--not for the better--syllable count is now only 6--don't you need 7-- also THAT (weak filler) suggest again per above
stunning tales of staunch spirit--strong and triple alliteration.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Great review +suggestions -thanks for taking time to read zanya
