Warning Shot
a 5-7-5 poetic form28 total reviews
Comment from juliaSjames
Good dramatic presentation of the start of an onslaught, Melissa. Fine word selection. I wouldn't have thought of using burgeoning in this context, but it's absolutely the perfect choice to show how quickly those snow bearing clouds roll in.
Good luck in the contest with this excellent entry..
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2020
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Good dramatic presentation of the start of an onslaught, Melissa. Fine word selection. I wouldn't have thought of using burgeoning in this context, but it's absolutely the perfect choice to show how quickly those snow bearing clouds roll in.
Good luck in the contest with this excellent entry..
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 19-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2020
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Thanks so much Julia. I appreciate your comments... I like the word burgeoning.. it just feels heavy to say it LOL :)
Melissa
Comment from Aussie
The beginning of the snow to come. Warning shot of things to come. Bringing with it the season of the joy of Christmas and lots of sidewalk sweeping!
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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The beginning of the snow to come. Warning shot of things to come. Bringing with it the season of the joy of Christmas and lots of sidewalk sweeping!
Comment Written 19-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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Hi Kace. Thanks so much!! Yep, the snowflake foretells mounds and mounds of snow.... I would love it!
Melissa
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Warning Shot", is short, succinct and very much to the point. With a minimum of words, this talented poet has told it as it is. Good luck with the contest! Please let me know how you get on?
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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"Warning Shot", is short, succinct and very much to the point. With a minimum of words, this talented poet has told it as it is. Good luck with the contest! Please let me know how you get on?
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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Hello Duchess. I really appreciate your words on this poem. Thank you for the encouragment and kind words. :)
Melissa
Hello Mellisa,
you're very welcome, and certainly deserved the encouragement and kind words.
God bless you, take care and stay safe!
the Duchess
Comment from Boogienights
Woderful, it gave me chills. Winter has already arrived here in Minnesota, sadly, with many a snowy day ahead. I like your entry very much, thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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Woderful, it gave me chills. Winter has already arrived here in Minnesota, sadly, with many a snowy day ahead. I like your entry very much, thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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I did not know you were in Minnesota. I guess you are getting snowflakes by now ~ bucket loads??? Here in central Virginia, the autumn air just got here. Thank you for your lovely review!!
Melissa
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
You taught me a new word... "salvo". So it's the first blast of winter you're referring, too. I like that... a lone rifle shot before all hell breaks loose.
Each line has a terrific word...
Line 1 ... "spit"
Line 2 ... "burgeoning"
Line 3 ... "salvo"
Nicely penned for the 5-7-5 poetry contest! Good Luck!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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Hi Melissa,
You taught me a new word... "salvo". So it's the first blast of winter you're referring, too. I like that... a lone rifle shot before all hell breaks loose.
Each line has a terrific word...
Line 1 ... "spit"
Line 2 ... "burgeoning"
Line 3 ... "salvo"
Nicely penned for the 5-7-5 poetry contest! Good Luck!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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Thanks Bob... I appreciate your humorous review... glad you learned a new word :). That first blast is just around the corner.
Melissa
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getting close, Melissa... where are you located? Do you get a lot of snow?
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Hi Bob... we live in central Virginia and get around two snows a year of about 3 inches... some years there is no snow. I know in Canada you must get your fair share. :)
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oh yeah!
Comment from Ann Market
You made excellent use of your title, and you found a wonderful picture to compliment your poem! This brought a smile to my face when I read your poetic interpretation of the first snowflake before a snowstorm!
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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You made excellent use of your title, and you found a wonderful picture to compliment your poem! This brought a smile to my face when I read your poetic interpretation of the first snowflake before a snowstorm!
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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Hi Ann. Thanks so much... I would love to see a snowflake... any snowflake... here in the South we do not get many. :). Glad you enjoyed it.
Melissa
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Melissa, this is a very well thought 5/7/5 with good use of grammar. Good use of alliteration with the letters S and B. Perfect picture. Good Luck in the contest - warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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Hello Melissa, this is a very well thought 5/7/5 with good use of grammar. Good use of alliteration with the letters S and B. Perfect picture. Good Luck in the contest - warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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Hello Dorothy. Thank you for your lovely comments ~ so glad you liked it. :)
Melissa
Comment from Pantygynt
And the first salvo seems to have found its mark. All of them hexagonal and no two the same. I feel that second property is asking a bit much when you think how many there must be. One 'ing' word is fine but never more than one per poem as a general rule of thumb.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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And the first salvo seems to have found its mark. All of them hexagonal and no two the same. I feel that second property is asking a bit much when you think how many there must be. One 'ing' word is fine but never more than one per poem as a general rule of thumb.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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Thanks Jim... I will remember the ing.. thing.. ;). Thanks bunches!
Melissa
Comment from royowen
A beautifully written 5/7/5 poetic entry in this contest, this is highly descriptive, and wonderfully expressive with an excellent image bearing work, a super Job. Well done, Melissa, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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A beautifully written 5/7/5 poetic entry in this contest, this is highly descriptive, and wonderfully expressive with an excellent image bearing work, a super Job. Well done, Melissa, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much Roy... so glad you liked it!!
Melissa
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Bless you
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, I quite enjoy your use of wit here, Melissa. And that is exactly what it's like. That first salvo, and in fact it is from nature that mankind learned about snowball fights.
Really good and I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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Ha, I quite enjoy your use of wit here, Melissa. And that is exactly what it's like. That first salvo, and in fact it is from nature that mankind learned about snowball fights.
Really good and I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much Gloria... so glad you liked it!! I know you experience quite a bit of snow and can relate :)
Melissa
