Bingo Vivian
Playing Bingo with Vivian18 total reviews
Comment from RetroStarfish
This is an excellent story. The dialogue is crisp and realistic. Vivian seems very real to me too. You have created a great character and you are ready to leap into fiction (not just dip your toe.)
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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This is an excellent story. The dialogue is crisp and realistic. Vivian seems very real to me too. You have created a great character and you are ready to leap into fiction (not just dip your toe.)
Comment Written 03-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your kind thoughts and your review.
It is appreciated
Regards
Mary
Comment from Susan X Smith
I enjoyed reading this short story. Vivian sounds like quite a character, and the picture reminds us of that. She really is a mess, but it appears she's still able to have fun.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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I enjoyed reading this short story. Vivian sounds like quite a character, and the picture reminds us of that. She really is a mess, but it appears she's still able to have fun.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Thank you for your kind thoughts and review.
Regards
Mary
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
My mum played bingo years ago, and would win small amounts. You have to be so quiet. I went once with her, and never again! I can understand Vivian being driven out of the hall, Lol, she would have been strung up if she'd stayed. Loved this one, it's a really funny story, Well done. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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My mum played bingo years ago, and would win small amounts. You have to be so quiet. I went once with her, and never again! I can understand Vivian being driven out of the hall, Lol, she would have been strung up if she'd stayed. Loved this one, it's a really funny story, Well done. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Thank you Sandra for your kind review and comments. It is appreciated.
Regards
Mary
Comment from damommy
And a very good dip into fiction it is. I could clearly see and hear Vivian. I think there's at least one in every crowd. Anyone who can put up with that behavior deserves a medal.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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And a very good dip into fiction it is. I could clearly see and hear Vivian. I think there's at least one in every crowd. Anyone who can put up with that behavior deserves a medal.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Thank you for your kind review. Vivian was a force of nature.
Thank you
Mary
Comment from humpwhistle
Good characters are the bedrock of any good short piece. Your Vivian fits the bill. I like that you include details of her town and surroundings to give the piece context. I do feel a little left out--not knowing anything about the person narrating this story.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Good characters are the bedrock of any good short piece. Your Vivian fits the bill. I like that you include details of her town and surroundings to give the piece context. I do feel a little left out--not knowing anything about the person narrating this story.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Thank you Lee for your kind review and comments. I see your point in the narrator.
Mary
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, Bingo Vivian, is one that smacks of truth all the way through. I have been to a couple BINGO tournaments and they are just like this. Hilarious character and story.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2020
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This story, Bingo Vivian, is one that smacks of truth all the way through. I have been to a couple BINGO tournaments and they are just like this. Hilarious character and story.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2020
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Thank you Bill for your review and comments.
Take care
Mary
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This Vivian is funny and obnoxious. She can't even play bingo. How hard is it? I guess she used to just get drunk. Now she has to play for real after her husband is gone.
Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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This Vivian is funny and obnoxious. She can't even play bingo. How hard is it? I guess she used to just get drunk. Now she has to play for real after her husband is gone.
Well done.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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Thank you Lisa for the review and kind comments.
Regards,
Mary
Comment from BethShelby
Well, it is hilarious and I think you ought to dip you toe into it more often. I guess I read the story when you introduced her because when I started reading this, i knew I'm met this lady before. Do some more Vivian stories.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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Well, it is hilarious and I think you ought to dip you toe into it more often. I guess I read the story when you introduced her because when I started reading this, i knew I'm met this lady before. Do some more Vivian stories.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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Thank you Beth for you kind comments and review. It is appreciated.
Mary
Comment from tfawcus
You've certainly introduced some colourful characters in this and in graphic terms, Vivian being not the least of them. I can just imagine the scene.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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You've certainly introduced some colourful characters in this and in graphic terms, Vivian being not the least of them. I can just imagine the scene.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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Thank you for your review and kind comments.
Take care
Mary
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
I read your previous piece and I like this even better. My best friend is named Vivian, and though she's not much like your Vivian, it still makes me smile.
You draw your character very well. Her words and actions run true to form. I could imagine myself sitting on an empty seat in the corner of the room, watching.
I like the detail used, describing so well what everyone wore.
I particularly like the last line which brings us back to the beginning about Vivian going with her husband, but with the twist that she was only drinking.
This is my favorite image: "
Vivian ...let out a loud laugh that hung across the room like a mushroom cloud.
Very nicely done, indeed.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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I read your previous piece and I like this even better. My best friend is named Vivian, and though she's not much like your Vivian, it still makes me smile.
You draw your character very well. Her words and actions run true to form. I could imagine myself sitting on an empty seat in the corner of the room, watching.
I like the detail used, describing so well what everyone wore.
I particularly like the last line which brings us back to the beginning about Vivian going with her husband, but with the twist that she was only drinking.
This is my favorite image: "
Vivian ...let out a loud laugh that hung across the room like a mushroom cloud.
Very nicely done, indeed.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Thank you for your kind review and your rating It is greatly appreciated.
Mary
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You're welcome. It is well-deserved.
