To Mend This Broken Land
A Shakespearean sonnet for these times ...54 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Powerful plea--Heartfelt theme apt for these turbulent times--bold imagery--fresh turns of phrase--graceful flow and rhyme (does firm/confirmed count as rhyme?)
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Powerful plea--Heartfelt theme apt for these turbulent times--bold imagery--fresh turns of phrase--graceful flow and rhyme (does firm/confirmed count as rhyme?)
Comment Written 24-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Thank you, Liz!
So pleased you enjoyed.
In my world "firm and confirmed" rhyme = poetic license :) :)
Happy Thanksgiving to you and yours!
diane
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
You are such a wonderful poet. This poem is very well written. I also hope that our country will be mended or healed; then we can reconcile and once again be happy, and have no fear of the virus.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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You are such a wonderful poet. This poem is very well written. I also hope that our country will be mended or healed; then we can reconcile and once again be happy, and have no fear of the virus.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Your wish is my wish as well, Rosemary!
I am honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review~
So pleased my words resonated with you!
Wishing you a healthy and beautiful Thanksgiving!
diane
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Mrs. KT
Your excellent Shakespearean sonnet for these times ...
To Mend This Broken Land has so many lines in your poem that Stands out are wonderful here is a line that drew my attention---To break the grip dark rancor holds so firm
Gert
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Hello Mrs. KT
Your excellent Shakespearean sonnet for these times ...
To Mend This Broken Land has so many lines in your poem that Stands out are wonderful here is a line that drew my attention---To break the grip dark rancor holds so firm
Gert
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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I am honored by your exceptional rating and complimentary review, Gert!
So very pleased my words resonated with you!
Thank you!
Wishing you and yours a beautiful Thanksgiving!
diane
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You are so welcome diane
Gert
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Beatifully said of the hope that this hated and unreasonable rancor will disappear and we will find peace and once again find respect for each other.
Good job.
Mary
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Beatifully said of the hope that this hated and unreasonable rancor will disappear and we will find peace and once again find respect for each other.
Good job.
Mary
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Hello Mary!
So pleased my words resonated with you!
Happy Thanksgiving!
diane
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Same to you Diane.
Regards
Mary
Comment from RGstar
I had thought about giving this a six ..on the cusp, because you transitioned through the sonnet very well. The first the introduction, the second a building out of that, then the turn (volta) which you actually did well with using 'IF' on the 12th line which should question or ask for thought, concerning the other two stanzas before it. It didn't have to ask a big question because it detracted well, with... 'if only.' The...you final couplet went hard in again and did a beautiful summing up.
I was a bit taken back...It may be my ignorance , but for once read a couple of reviews for this, just to see how some of our writers stand on peace...and I found 'Warrior King Pen' amongst the three I read, in which he said something about ''white robes'' will fix it. What is ''white robes?' Is this a special organization of priests or something because I saw that you praised his use of it...and I am afraid I only know one group of people with that reference...and that is the Klu Klux Clan...and I may be naive, but I know no other entity so described. If it is, I certainly do not lend my voice to such, as is the reason things were allowed to continue so long like they have. I never get involved , politically or racially in any discussion or post. I keep myself private from, and concentrate on healing, togetherness, and love, and that is my way through life. I chide no man for his views, a person is only victim or champion for what they know, and what they have been taught, either by other, or own. So, mixed feeling until I find out what 'White Robes' are.
Best wishes.
Diane.
RGstar
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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I had thought about giving this a six ..on the cusp, because you transitioned through the sonnet very well. The first the introduction, the second a building out of that, then the turn (volta) which you actually did well with using 'IF' on the 12th line which should question or ask for thought, concerning the other two stanzas before it. It didn't have to ask a big question because it detracted well, with... 'if only.' The...you final couplet went hard in again and did a beautiful summing up.
I was a bit taken back...It may be my ignorance , but for once read a couple of reviews for this, just to see how some of our writers stand on peace...and I found 'Warrior King Pen' amongst the three I read, in which he said something about ''white robes'' will fix it. What is ''white robes?' Is this a special organization of priests or something because I saw that you praised his use of it...and I am afraid I only know one group of people with that reference...and that is the Klu Klux Clan...and I may be naive, but I know no other entity so described. If it is, I certainly do not lend my voice to such, as is the reason things were allowed to continue so long like they have. I never get involved , politically or racially in any discussion or post. I keep myself private from, and concentrate on healing, togetherness, and love, and that is my way through life. I chide no man for his views, a person is only victim or champion for what they know, and what they have been taught, either by other, or own. So, mixed feeling until I find out what 'White Robes' are.
Best wishes.
Diane.
RGstar
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Hello RG,
Goodness!
In my mind, "white robes" meant/mean angels. I interpreted what "Warrior King Pen" meant was that perhaps we will never know the answers to the rancor of this life until life as we know it has ended: "white robes that will mend the bridge when its (it's) all said and done."
Never for a moment did I associate "white robes" with the KKK, Roy.
I am quite taken aback that you would even think for a moment that I would be a supporter of the KKK.
Perhaps you need to ask "Warrior King Pen" what he meant in his review. And I may be incredibly naive, but again, in no way did I think he was posturing a perspective that the KKK would solve the brokenness of America...
diane
I just now messaged WARRIOR KING PEN your concerns, asking him to elucidate if he has the inclination and/or time. I also shared with him my interpretation of "white robes" and requested that he comment. I'll relay his message should he reply.
The bottom line is that this sonnet is a call for peace - not for violence. I was inspired to write it because I truly wish I had the answers to the rancor and division in my country.
I am deeply saddened that you would think otherwise.
diane
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RG:
Here is Warrior King Pen's reply to my query and my response:
reply by WARRIOR KING PEN on 23-Nov-2020
You can take the white robes in so many ways. Its the charm of poetry. At least a part of it.
My initial thought was the righteous standing up to bring peace. It could mean Angels. Or maybe, more enticing, the Anointed 144 thousand who rule with Christ in Heaven. Yeah, I think I like that one better
Kkk never even crossed my mind but now I see where someone might stretch it to conformity. Does that make sense?
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
Thank you, Warrior!
My initial thought was "angels" = white robes.
I also like the thought of "righteous standing up to bring peace."
I am not familiar with the "Anointed 144 thousand who rule with Christ in Heaven." Will have to research that concept.
Thank you for taking the time to explain what you meant, and for being gracious to my query.
diane
Comment from robyn corum
KT,
I liked this piece a lot. It showed your warm and caring side - the side willing to reach out a hand to any stranger in the attempts to become friends. And isn't that what we all want today?
BTW, did you know the picture at the bottom is not showing up?
Thanks!
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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KT,
I liked this piece a lot. It showed your warm and caring side - the side willing to reach out a hand to any stranger in the attempts to become friends. And isn't that what we all want today?
BTW, did you know the picture at the bottom is not showing up?
Thanks!
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Hello robyn!
So pleased you enjoyed.
You are the third person to mention that my photo is not showing up.
I re-read Ralf's poem about Mastery just a few moments ago, and it is presented as if it is in a blind contest and has no rating by it. Perhaps there is a snafu on the site?
Gremlins!
Happy Thanksgiving!
diane
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Wouldn't that be wonderful? I have grave fears it will never happen now. We are a mess, however we can still live the life we were meant to, for a time anyway. One day there will be no freedom in this land. So much has already been taken, with more to come. Sorry to be a downer, but I know the end and so I live with that knowledge and put my faith in God alone. Well done, hope you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Wouldn't that be wonderful? I have grave fears it will never happen now. We are a mess, however we can still live the life we were meant to, for a time anyway. One day there will be no freedom in this land. So much has already been taken, with more to come. Sorry to be a downer, but I know the end and so I live with that knowledge and put my faith in God alone. Well done, hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Hello Roxanna!
So pleased you enjoyed.
Happy Thanksgiving!
diane
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork for
the topic of your sonnet, diane.
-It is well written with effective,
meter, imagery, and rhyme.
-I like how you begin by
wanting to rid us of the
"dark rancor" and "crippling
voice of fear."
-Then you move on, indicating
that you'd like to know how
this all l could be.
-A very good volta that
shows how you are
extending the olive branch
by offering to talk and exchange ideas.
-A very good concluding couplet, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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-Good artwork for
the topic of your sonnet, diane.
-It is well written with effective,
meter, imagery, and rhyme.
-I like how you begin by
wanting to rid us of the
"dark rancor" and "crippling
voice of fear."
-Then you move on, indicating
that you'd like to know how
this all l could be.
-A very good volta that
shows how you are
extending the olive branch
by offering to talk and exchange ideas.
-A very good concluding couplet, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Hello Pam!
So pleased you enjoyed.
Happy Thanksgiving to you and yours!
diane
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You are very welcome, diane, and Happy Thanksgiving to you, too.
Comment from amada
I read with much interest this sonnet for unity, Diana. It feel like a breath of fresh air in the midst of this battleground of politics, covid 19, and hundred lawsuits. Let's rest for a while.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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I read with much interest this sonnet for unity, Diana. It feel like a breath of fresh air in the midst of this battleground of politics, covid 19, and hundred lawsuits. Let's rest for a while.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Hello amada,
I am pleased my words resonated with you.
thank you!
diane
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your sonnet is excellent in every respect--skillfully-written and very descriptive, conveying a message of hope and desire to see healing. The Bible tells us how to accomplish what we truly want to see:
2 Chronicles 7:14 If my people, who are called by my name, will humble themselves and pray and seek my face and turn from their wicked ways, then I will hear from heaven, and I will forgive their sin and will heal their land.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Your sonnet is excellent in every respect--skillfully-written and very descriptive, conveying a message of hope and desire to see healing. The Bible tells us how to accomplish what we truly want to see:
2 Chronicles 7:14 If my people, who are called by my name, will humble themselves and pray and seek my face and turn from their wicked ways, then I will hear from heaven, and I will forgive their sin and will heal their land.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Hello Janice!
So pleased you enjoyed.
Thank you!
diane
