Could This Be
contemplation50 total reviews
Comment from closetpoetjester
What a lovely poem.
This is both melancholy and yet hauntingly enchanting. Time has a funny way of affording us new perspectives on real memories or well imagined fantasies.
Whilst I don't agree the actual memory/dream itself changes, I do concede we sometimes find an alternative more acceptable approach to deal with the emotional abandonment we feel when we miss what we long for.
Close to your best. Well done.
A painter AND a poet. What a catch haha
Just my 2c worth.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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What a lovely poem.
This is both melancholy and yet hauntingly enchanting. Time has a funny way of affording us new perspectives on real memories or well imagined fantasies.
Whilst I don't agree the actual memory/dream itself changes, I do concede we sometimes find an alternative more acceptable approach to deal with the emotional abandonment we feel when we miss what we long for.
Close to your best. Well done.
A painter AND a poet. What a catch haha
Just my 2c worth.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thank you, Hanger. I appreciate it.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello victortouche
I read your poem--- Could This Be
of how your memories change as time goes on after of someone left you in the breeze to make you feel sad and like falling leaves from a tree.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
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Hello victortouche
I read your poem--- Could This Be
of how your memories change as time goes on after of someone left you in the breeze to make you feel sad and like falling leaves from a tree.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from lyenochka
I do agree that memories change over time especially with relationships. Depending on the mood, the same memories can comfort or sadden. But while I thought the poem addressed a person, it ends addressing leaves.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
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I do agree that memories change over time especially with relationships. Depending on the mood, the same memories can comfort or sadden. But while I thought the poem addressed a person, it ends addressing leaves.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is a sweet and poignant poem about a lost love and the memories that surround it, as the narrator never gives up hope that someday, it might return.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
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This is a sweet and poignant poem about a lost love and the memories that surround it, as the narrator never gives up hope that someday, it might return.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
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Thank you, Susan. I do appreciate it.
Comment from sammielwf
Victor,
I loved the line in your authors note:
"The duality of memories"
helped to set the tone of your poem for me.
I think many of us, in our lifetimes have been in the situation you describe. Keeping alive a comforting memory of a person once loved- and now broken up with.
Reminders are all around us of that person- but it does not bring back the relationship or the person.
Good write!
Sammielwf
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
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Victor,
I loved the line in your authors note:
"The duality of memories"
helped to set the tone of your poem for me.
I think many of us, in our lifetimes have been in the situation you describe. Keeping alive a comforting memory of a person once loved- and now broken up with.
Reminders are all around us of that person- but it does not bring back the relationship or the person.
Good write!
Sammielwf
Comment Written 12-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
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I must say I enjoyed your review. Thank you. Doug
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. I like how you structured this poem. It is well written. A very good poetry. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
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I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. I like how you structured this poem. It is well written. A very good poetry. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 12-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Monica Chaddick
Congratulations on your poem being recognized and on being named one of the all time best. Your poem has a nice flow. I felt a sadness coming from it as I read it, but maybe that was just me. This was a very nice piece. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
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Congratulations on your poem being recognized and on being named one of the all time best. Your poem has a nice flow. I felt a sadness coming from it as I read it, but maybe that was just me. This was a very nice piece. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
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Thank you for reading it, Monica.
Comment from Reese Turner
I get the impression that this is one of those poems that needed to be written to help ease some pain. Whatever, I could relate to it as I have written several of those myself over the years. May those old brown leaves be replaced by fresh new green ones sooner rather than later.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
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I get the impression that this is one of those poems that needed to be written to help ease some pain. Whatever, I could relate to it as I have written several of those myself over the years. May those old brown leaves be replaced by fresh new green ones sooner rather than later.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
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Wonderful glass half full attitude.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Doug,
Memories are like that, stirred by a breeze,
they flit and fall, evoke joy and sadness.
Perhaps they are more,
connected somehow, perhaps.
Nice free-falling verse.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
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Hello Doug,
Memories are like that, stirred by a breeze,
they flit and fall, evoke joy and sadness.
Perhaps they are more,
connected somehow, perhaps.
Nice free-falling verse.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 12-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
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Thank you sir Robert.
Comment from ESOSTINE
Waoh! What a beautifully penned piece flowing freely with ease. I really had to read it over again to comprehend the mystery in the dual nature of the poem. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
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Waoh! What a beautifully penned piece flowing freely with ease. I really had to read it over again to comprehend the mystery in the dual nature of the poem. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
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And thanks, for your review.
