What Breaks My Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "I Have Been Down That Road"Poems and stories tellin' it like I see it.
6 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
I'm not sure why this didn't come across my mail. I'm so glad I tapped your name. I was getting impatient. What a jewel this is. I cried each line...so raw, real, and exposed. A healing balm for you and so many these days. Needs a six star crown! Precious and god-inspired!
Superb offering for this contest, dear Faye!
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the contest,
Sally XOs....xo......xo.....
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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I'm not sure why this didn't come across my mail. I'm so glad I tapped your name. I was getting impatient. What a jewel this is. I cried each line...so raw, real, and exposed. A healing balm for you and so many these days. Needs a six star crown! Precious and god-inspired!
Superb offering for this contest, dear Faye!
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the contest,
Sally XOs....xo......xo.....
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Sally, thank you ever so much for the wonderful review and the abundance of stars.
XOs,
Faye
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You are most welcome, and so deserving. Blessings always,
Sal XOs....
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I like the last couple of storylines in each of your verses. To be alone when you feel grief is difficult. To feel a shoulder unload, because someone has been down that same kind of road, is truly a comfort!
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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I like the last couple of storylines in each of your verses. To be alone when you feel grief is difficult. To feel a shoulder unload, because someone has been down that same kind of road, is truly a comfort!
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Again, thank you ever so much for reviewing, as well as the rating and comments.
Comment from judester
Great entry. Knowing that someone has gone through the pain before and survived must help someone grieving. You have spelled suicide wrong. Best of luck in the contest, cheers, j
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Great entry. Knowing that someone has gone through the pain before and survived must help someone grieving. You have spelled suicide wrong. Best of luck in the contest, cheers, j
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Sorry. I appreciate you catchcing my typo. Thanks for the review.
Comment from kmoss
This poem flows very well and is broadcasting a good meaning. It is sweet that after your own struggles, you chose to share your pain in order to place open arms around others that are struggling. (suicide is spelled incorrectly).
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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This poem flows very well and is broadcasting a good meaning. It is sweet that after your own struggles, you chose to share your pain in order to place open arms around others that are struggling. (suicide is spelled incorrectly).
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Yes, thank you. I appreciate the review and you catching my typo.
Comment from LisaMay
The repeated line works very well in your poem to emphasise the connection of a shared experience ("It takes one to know one" sort of thing, from which compassion and empathy can be extended to the grieving one). The poem's meter and rhyming is well handled, and the picture choice and black background make for a dramatic impact. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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The repeated line works very well in your poem to emphasise the connection of a shared experience ("It takes one to know one" sort of thing, from which compassion and empathy can be extended to the grieving one). The poem's meter and rhyming is well handled, and the picture choice and black background make for a dramatic impact. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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I truly appreciate your comments. Thank you ever so much for reviewing.
Comment from RodG
How many of us are lucky enough to know someone who will gladly share our grief? We admire the Speaker's empathy as expressed in the refrain. You might want to rephrase line 2 of stanza 2.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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How many of us are lucky enough to know someone who will gladly share our grief? We admire the Speaker's empathy as expressed in the refrain. You might want to rephrase line 2 of stanza 2.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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Thank you. I will look into your suggestion. I appreciate the comments.
