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people that inform sometimes cops16 total reviews
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Ha, ha, ha your poem is so witty, blue collar white collar, doesn't matter if they all end up whiskey washed:)"And when they fall
As some bootlegs
On bad whisky
It can be risky
For the black sheep
To find a big sleep." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
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Ha, ha, ha your poem is so witty, blue collar white collar, doesn't matter if they all end up whiskey washed:)"And when they fall
As some bootlegs
On bad whisky
It can be risky
For the black sheep
To find a big sleep." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
Comment from Bloomer Burbs
Hi bournmouth (I used to live very near by Bournmouth a few years ago)
I get the gist of your poem but some of the phrasing leaves the reader a little confused. It seems to jump from one thought to another at least for me.
Take care and stay safe, Pete
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Hi bournmouth (I used to live very near by Bournmouth a few years ago)
I get the gist of your poem but some of the phrasing leaves the reader a little confused. It seems to jump from one thought to another at least for me.
Take care and stay safe, Pete
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
Comment from Goodadvicechan
It is interesting to start with colors; the blue and the white. They are two different classes but they can be cooperative and share joy together. They don't have to fight.
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It is interesting to start with colors; the blue and the white. They are two different classes but they can be cooperative and share joy together. They don't have to fight.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
Comment from greyson ernst
its really good i hope you keep writing i still might of joined soon but i still know a thing or two about poems
keep writing stay safe
sincerely Greyson Ernst
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its really good i hope you keep writing i still might of joined soon but i still know a thing or two about poems
keep writing stay safe
sincerely Greyson Ernst
Comment Written 28-Nov-2020
Comment from dmt1967
This is a well written poem although, to my ear, the beat seemed a little off and the rhyming a little false. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Stay safe.
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This is a well written poem although, to my ear, the beat seemed a little off and the rhyming a little false. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Stay safe.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
Comment from Pantygynt
This poem certainly involves rhyme but since it does not follow a set rhyme scheme I do not hold out much hope for its success in the contest. the judges will be looking for a rhyme scheme to be set and followed. Here is the scheme you have set:
aabab
cdcee
ffghg
ijjkk
The sort of pattern they are looking for, based on your first five lines might be:
aabab
ccdcd
eefef
hhihi
That is how they are likely to interpret the instruction. As a free verse with random rhyme there is nothing wrong with your poem but, since it will be ruled as being non-compliant I cannot grade it higher than 'good', which is four stars.
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This poem certainly involves rhyme but since it does not follow a set rhyme scheme I do not hold out much hope for its success in the contest. the judges will be looking for a rhyme scheme to be set and followed. Here is the scheme you have set:
aabab
cdcee
ffghg
ijjkk
The sort of pattern they are looking for, based on your first five lines might be:
aabab
ccdcd
eefef
hhihi
That is how they are likely to interpret the instruction. As a free verse with random rhyme there is nothing wrong with your poem but, since it will be ruled as being non-compliant I cannot grade it higher than 'good', which is four stars.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This poem, sometimes in good rhymes, speaks a tale of cops habit or practice passing or conveying and receiving information indulging own customs with clear distinction between blue and white; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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This poem, sometimes in good rhymes, speaks a tale of cops habit or practice passing or conveying and receiving information indulging own customs with clear distinction between blue and white; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
Comment from Wendy G
Not being from your country, I don't understand all the terminology. Nevertheless I can see that it is well-written, so I hope you do well in the contest.
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Not being from your country, I don't understand all the terminology. Nevertheless I can see that it is well-written, so I hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
Comment from amada
The content of this poem is interesting, but it change subject so fast that I got left behind. Your thoughts are fast, dear writer. I like your lines about the white and blue collar workers the best.
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The content of this poem is interesting, but it change subject so fast that I got left behind. Your thoughts are fast, dear writer. I like your lines about the white and blue collar workers the best.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
wickedly wry--clever wordplay--color of collar!
fix desc.--people that inform [ARE] sometimes cops--but since it won't fit with AS inserted--Sugg: "informants are sometimes cops"
Typo in note: polices s/b police--rework sentence--unclear as is re fates that aren't bright.
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wickedly wry--clever wordplay--color of collar!
fix desc.--people that inform [ARE] sometimes cops--but since it won't fit with AS inserted--Sugg: "informants are sometimes cops"
Typo in note: polices s/b police--rework sentence--unclear as is re fates that aren't bright.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
