Universal Truth
True no matter your age12 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 1-6-1 poem about toys that only bring joy to children either girl or boy and the most of the time adding their own twist of imagination to their play.
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A very well-written 1-6-1 poem about toys that only bring joy to children either girl or boy and the most of the time adding their own twist of imagination to their play.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2020
Comment from jaded831
You captured the essence of a child enjoying his toy. In such limitations you did an excellent job. The picture adds to your poem. Together they make a wonderful presentation. Good luck in the contest.
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You captured the essence of a child enjoying his toy. In such limitations you did an excellent job. The picture adds to your poem. Together they make a wonderful presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2020
Comment from Paul Borders
I was all set to vote for a different entry, then I read yours and changed my mind. I really like the way you chose to word your submission. Hope you win the contest.
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I was all set to vote for a different entry, then I read yours and changed my mind. I really like the way you chose to word your submission. Hope you win the contest.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2020
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
Toys are fun for kids and some adults ;)
Excellent entry for the 1-6-1 poem writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. I like the presentation too. Great imagery. Good luck in the contest.
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Hello, anonymous,
Toys are fun for kids and some adults ;)
Excellent entry for the 1-6-1 poem writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. I like the presentation too. Great imagery. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2020
Comment from Y. M. Roger
And light just radiates through everyone in the house!! ;) A wonderful offering here for this oh-so-limited format contest -- good job! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! :) ;)
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And light just radiates through everyone in the house!! ;) A wonderful offering here for this oh-so-limited format contest -- good job! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! :) ;)
Comment Written 04-Nov-2020
Comment from LisaMay
That is such an engaging photo you have chosen - an ideal accompaniment to your words. You've skillfully adhered to the prompt's syllable count requirements to bring us a comment on simple happiness.
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That is such an engaging photo you have chosen - an ideal accompaniment to your words. You've skillfully adhered to the prompt's syllable count requirements to bring us a comment on simple happiness.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2020
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I like this simple poem that tells a truth in 8 syllables. You did a great job to express the simple joy that could bring to the kids.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
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I like this simple poem that tells a truth in 8 syllables. You did a great job to express the simple joy that could bring to the kids.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2020
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Heads up: All three lines must rhyme--sugg: tweak line two to end in Boy e.g. Brings to each girl and boy--this is a nice bit of whimsy but will be disqualified as is.
I see you fixed it!
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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Heads up: All three lines must rhyme--sugg: tweak line two to end in Boy e.g. Brings to each girl and boy--this is a nice bit of whimsy but will be disqualified as is.
I see you fixed it!
Comment Written 04-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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Thank you. I don't know how I missed that.
Comment from Rosemary wanjiru
A lovely piece, well written. The innocence of it all is beautiful. Great choice of words and the photo is cute. Only two lines rhyme but you nailed the 1-6-1 rule. Good luck
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A lovely piece, well written. The innocence of it all is beautiful. Great choice of words and the photo is cute. Only two lines rhyme but you nailed the 1-6-1 rule. Good luck
Comment Written 03-Nov-2020
Comment from writer_13
Your poem says it all. I loved the picture and the joy that you see in the child's face playing with the toy...and it is true at any age. We all love our toys and like to take a break from work and play.
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Your poem says it all. I loved the picture and the joy that you see in the child's face playing with the toy...and it is true at any age. We all love our toys and like to take a break from work and play.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2020
