Haiku (Hot Nights)
a 5-7-5 poetic form29 total reviews
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good Morning, Melissa!
You have created a lovely haiku! I appreciate the visual imagery of "old rain" juxtaposed with "nature's rhythmic flow." Peaceful continuity...
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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Good Morning, Melissa!
You have created a lovely haiku! I appreciate the visual imagery of "old rain" juxtaposed with "nature's rhythmic flow." Peaceful continuity...
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 31-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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Hello Diane. Thank you for your lovely review. I wondered if it melded into a sensible verse. Hope you are enjoying that extra cold weather up there. Today it truly feels like Autumn in central Virginia. Also, congrats on the Naani win. Yours was great!
Melissa
Comment from poetwatch
Used water's in there/ sprinkle rocks, and cow manure / gives hair extra shine. :) On the spot crazy rhyme. I just woke up ain't had my coffee, Melissa. This is a good offering for the Classic Haiku. Thank you for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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Used water's in there/ sprinkle rocks, and cow manure / gives hair extra shine. :) On the spot crazy rhyme. I just woke up ain't had my coffee, Melissa. This is a good offering for the Classic Haiku. Thank you for sharing. :)
Comment Written 31-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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Crazy man!! Go drink some coffee.. hahaha.. I am on my second cup. :). Thank you for the great review.
Melissa
Comment from Cindy Decker
Melissa,
This is an excellent Haiku.
The "recycling of raindrops" is such a wondrous part of nature. And the sound of rain is very comforting.
Very nice photo and poem,
Cindy
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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Melissa,
This is an excellent Haiku.
The "recycling of raindrops" is such a wondrous part of nature. And the sound of rain is very comforting.
Very nice photo and poem,
Cindy
Comment Written 31-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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Hi Cindy. Thanks so much. I was hoping the word... old.. would remind people of .. as you say, recycling of raindrops.. great phrase there! Much appreciated, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from royowen
I've never heard of a classic haiku contest before, but when one thinks about it, this is a classic haiku, this is a beautifully written and a strikingly good post, well done Melissa, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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I've never heard of a classic haiku contest before, but when one thinks about it, this is a classic haiku, this is a beautifully written and a strikingly good post, well done Melissa, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 31-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much Roy. I hope it meets the criteria of .. classic.. :)
Melissa
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Well done
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
I like how you define "gurgling mountain rivulets" as "Old rain". I especially like the personification of "Old Rain" revisiting over and over again in "nature's rhythmic flow". I can almost hear the gurgling coming off the mountain. A perfect Haiku, and it should be a contender in the contest. Good Luck!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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Hi Melissa,
I like how you define "gurgling mountain rivulets" as "Old rain". I especially like the personification of "Old Rain" revisiting over and over again in "nature's rhythmic flow". I can almost hear the gurgling coming off the mountain. A perfect Haiku, and it should be a contender in the contest. Good Luck!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 31-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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Thank you so very much KB. I thought by using the word.. old.. people would realize it as an unending cycle.
Melissa
Comment from Rosemary wanjiru
Amazing how the words flow and make sense. Simple short and scenic. The photo is beautiful and captivating.bit creates a sense of peace and tranquility. The Wonders of nature
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Amazing how the words flow and make sense. Simple short and scenic. The photo is beautiful and captivating.bit creates a sense of peace and tranquility. The Wonders of nature
Comment Written 31-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much Rosemary.
Melissa
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image, Melissa.
-You have written a good
haiku that meets all of the requirements.
-Good syllable count, along with
effective nature and seasonal imagery.
-I like the description of the rain
and the rivulets.
-A very good satori line, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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-Very nice image, Melissa.
-You have written a good
haiku that meets all of the requirements.
-Good syllable count, along with
effective nature and seasonal imagery.
-I like the description of the rain
and the rivulets.
-A very good satori line, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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Hi Pam... thanks my friend!!
Melissa
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You are very welcome, Melissa.
Comment from Teri7
Melissa, This is a very beautiful and well written haiku you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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Melissa, This is a very beautiful and well written haiku you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
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Comment Written 31-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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Hi Teri. Thank you so much!!
Melissa
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you are so welcome my friend. I love it!
Comment from Sally Law
A beautiful penned and illustrated haiku in the classic form. I love the waterfalls of North Georgia, my native state. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the contest,
Sal XOs.....
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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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A beautiful penned and illustrated haiku in the classic form. I love the waterfalls of North Georgia, my native state. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the contest,
Sal XOs.....
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Comment Written 31-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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Hello Sally. Thank you so very much!!
Melissa
