Bright Lights
We might see better in the dark.40 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
These lines are thought-provoking. "Linguistic" is typically an adjective but it's used as a noun here. I would have expected linguistics or even 'semantics' because I sense that the meaning of light is what is being sought. On one hand, I understand that a sight-impaired person is seeking the meaning of light that is still accessible in some memory of light. On a spiritual level, the poem speaks to me of all people who are spiritually blind and we can still seek out that Light which was very real to us in our earliest years. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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These lines are thought-provoking. "Linguistic" is typically an adjective but it's used as a noun here. I would have expected linguistics or even 'semantics' because I sense that the meaning of light is what is being sought. On one hand, I understand that a sight-impaired person is seeking the meaning of light that is still accessible in some memory of light. On a spiritual level, the poem speaks to me of all people who are spiritually blind and we can still seek out that Light which was very real to us in our earliest years. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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Your comments are womderful, and positive. Thank you for reading my work.
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
Yours is an interesting and well-done poem.
I like the contrast you make between youth and perfect eye sight vs. later years. I'm glad you have equipment that helps you now. Eyesight is quite a loss, no question but kudos that you still write.
I don't know how well you can see the artwork that accompanies your poem...I think it is a good choice. The last two lines of your poem are a good way to describe your eye issue without spelling it out.
Nice job. Blessings to you.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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Yours is an interesting and well-done poem.
I like the contrast you make between youth and perfect eye sight vs. later years. I'm glad you have equipment that helps you now. Eyesight is quite a loss, no question but kudos that you still write.
I don't know how well you can see the artwork that accompanies your poem...I think it is a good choice. The last two lines of your poem are a good way to describe your eye issue without spelling it out.
Nice job. Blessings to you.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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Thank you, Cynthia. Your comments are vry lovely.
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You are very welcome. Best wishes.
Comment from Mastery
Wonderfully inspirational, Nancy. I don't like using so many adverbs, but I cannot see a way around it in this poem. Good job, my friend. I wish you good luck in the contest.. Bob
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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Wonderfully inspirational, Nancy. I don't like using so many adverbs, but I cannot see a way around it in this poem. Good job, my friend. I wish you good luck in the contest.. Bob
Comment Written 29-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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I truly appreciate stopping by and reading this poem.
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:) Bob
Comment from John Carey
I had to read your poem several times to let it soak in. It is wonderful. The first verse in particular stands out, it is true poetry. Your free form poem supports the title and gracefully presents a topic well known to aging humans like myself! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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I had to read your poem several times to let it soak in. It is wonderful. The first verse in particular stands out, it is true poetry. Your free form poem supports the title and gracefully presents a topic well known to aging humans like myself! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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TWow! I feel so special and blessed by your comments. Thank you, John.
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. I like how you wrote this about your faith. Well expressed. Excellent work! I like it. No grammatical errors. Good luck!
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. I like how you wrote this about your faith. Well expressed. Excellent work! I like it. No grammatical errors. Good luck!
Comment Written 29-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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Thank you Raul1 for reading my work and your best wishes.
Comment from equestrik
This is a sad write as you express what used to be beautiful and exciting in your youth but now only lies in memories eyes. I did not understand the faith element.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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This is a sad write as you express what used to be beautiful and exciting in your youth but now only lies in memories eyes. I did not understand the faith element.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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Thank you, equesrik.
Comment from karenina
How fortuitous that I've come to read this today! My husband went in for a routine eye exam and was informed he needed cataract surgery in both eyes... I just finished telling him faith would see us through, and here you are, affirming that very fact!--Karenina
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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How fortuitous that I've come to read this today! My husband went in for a routine eye exam and was informed he needed cataract surgery in both eyes... I just finished telling him faith would see us through, and here you are, affirming that very fact!--Karenina
Comment Written 29-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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I am so happy my poem found you. I remember...faith works in strange ways.
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IT surely does! I've always said it's not "coincidence"...it's GOD! (smile)---Karenina
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image, Amada.
-You wrote a very good poem
showing how you gained your faith.
-The light imagery and theme
is a good choice.
-You also show the attraction
to those bright lights, but
now they have been put behind you.
-A good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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-Very nice image, Amada.
-You wrote a very good poem
showing how you gained your faith.
-The light imagery and theme
is a good choice.
-You also show the attraction
to those bright lights, but
now they have been put behind you.
-A good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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Hi Pam, thank you for your very gracious comments.
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You are very welcome, amada.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Startling imagery--linguistic of wild lights! Sun and glory--vivid phrasing!I read your bio re the loss of vision--I take this verse as your finding inspiration (for writing) within--fresh take on faith! (Did I miss something?)
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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Startling imagery--linguistic of wild lights! Sun and glory--vivid phrasing!I read your bio re the loss of vision--I take this verse as your finding inspiration (for writing) within--fresh take on faith! (Did I miss something?)
Comment Written 29-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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Thank you for your thoughtful review, Elizabeth. No, you didn''t miss anything...
Comment from mermaids
I like the image of seeing the glory of one's early years later on. There is an almost mystical feel and flow to your words. Your lines reflect your theme clearly and I think most of us can relate to your poem.
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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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I like the image of seeing the glory of one's early years later on. There is an almost mystical feel and flow to your words. Your lines reflect your theme clearly and I think most of us can relate to your poem.
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Comment Written 29-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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Thank you for your support to my work,mermaids.
