Another Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Paul's Basic Training"American Isekai
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
Te development of the squad was very interesting. I wasn't certain Paul would prevail. But his endurance certainly is a factor. There are a couple of new characters we are already seeing develop. Well done.
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Te development of the squad was very interesting. I wasn't certain Paul would prevail. But his endurance certainly is a factor. There are a couple of new characters we are already seeing develop. Well done.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2021
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I read this out of order, but I am glad I found it and it puts a few things in the correct order. I hate only being able to review on Saturday after I finish my school work and then on Sunday. It makes it hard to keep up with posts that I really like. Oh well, I retire in June.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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I read this out of order, but I am glad I found it and it puts a few things in the correct order. I hate only being able to review on Saturday after I finish my school work and then on Sunday. It makes it hard to keep up with posts that I really like. Oh well, I retire in June.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much. Retiring in June. Congrats. I look forward to the day when I can say goodbye.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear lancellot, your story I can follow both in action and in dialogue. I can see that with the formation of this new squad Paul will continue to thrive, if for no other reason than he has others to watch his back.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Dear lancellot, your story I can follow both in action and in dialogue. I can see that with the formation of this new squad Paul will continue to thrive, if for no other reason than he has others to watch his back.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Ben B.
As I remember, Paul was a solider in a previous life so that gives him some edge. But it still has been sixteen years since he practiced and even then he didn't use a sword so that didn't give him as much edge as I first expected.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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As I remember, Paul was a solider in a previous life so that gives him some edge. But it still has been sixteen years since he practiced and even then he didn't use a sword so that didn't give him as much edge as I first expected.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Thank you. Nope, Paul is not the best swordsman or even all that good.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
Unfortunately, I have missed the earlier chapters.Nonetheless as I commenced reading I could relate to Paul's thoughts. That's because of the descriptive way you have narrated the story. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Unfortunately, I have missed the earlier chapters.Nonetheless as I commenced reading I could relate to Paul's thoughts. That's because of the descriptive way you have narrated the story. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Ravaged vs ravished--what's with the bruises? I shudder to think. Must have missed the last chapter--didn't catch the up-next I guess. As always, gripping narration.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Ravaged vs ravished--what's with the bruises? I shudder to think. Must have missed the last chapter--didn't catch the up-next I guess. As always, gripping narration.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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It's ravaged because of the condition he left her. I don't like ravished, I think the definition has changed to include rape and force. And that's not what happened. Sometimes there are bruises if the person's skin tone is light enough.
Thank you very much.
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Toss up which scenario is more disturbing--I hope you mean it was consensual and that he didn't mean to hurt her--ravaged generally implies serious damage.
Comment from judiverse
Great description of the training. It seems to primitive, but it must have brought back memories of his former training to Paul. It seems that he's going to be so busy with training he won't have much time for Crista. He and Crista are starting out before they have nothing to call their own. Fenwick recognizes potential in Paul, as he has endurance. Paul also has his thoughts on teaching Crista, who doesn't seem to know much of anything, and providing a home for her. Great work. judi
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Great description of the training. It seems to primitive, but it must have brought back memories of his former training to Paul. It seems that he's going to be so busy with training he won't have much time for Crista. He and Crista are starting out before they have nothing to call their own. Fenwick recognizes potential in Paul, as he has endurance. Paul also has his thoughts on teaching Crista, who doesn't seem to know much of anything, and providing a home for her. Great work. judi
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much. Oh, Crista, knows more than Paul. Her chapters are coming up.
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You're very welcome. I'll be looking forward to what Crista has to say for herself. She seems kind of one-track right now. judi
Comment from Mia Twysted
As I had not read the before chapters I would have thought to be somewhat lost, but I was able to dive right in. I could feel the changes going on in his life and feel for him for the decitions he has to make.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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As I had not read the before chapters I would have thought to be somewhat lost, but I was able to dive right in. I could feel the changes going on in his life and feel for him for the decitions he has to make.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Thank you
Comment from Jay Squires
Now that was an exciting chapter. You haven't been too idle in your hiatus. I like what I'm reading. I'm a little lost about the time travel aspect, but I did miss some earlier chapters.
how bad you are and how drinking I will need to do." [...how MUCH drinking?]
Thank you for entertaining me.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Now that was an exciting chapter. You haven't been too idle in your hiatus. I like what I'm reading. I'm a little lost about the time travel aspect, but I did miss some earlier chapters.
how bad you are and how drinking I will need to do." [...how MUCH drinking?]
Thank you for entertaining me.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much. I wrote this book when I was away, yes.
