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During an eclipse.9 total reviews
Comment from Mia Twysted
"let the waves begin" left me with a powerful feeling. As if, now that the sun has gone down the real in the world is going to show itself and you better be prepared.
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"let the waves begin" left me with a powerful feeling. As if, now that the sun has gone down the real in the world is going to show itself and you better be prepared.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your wonderful review.
Comment from Laurie Holding
I love this one! Especially because you've found such exquisite accompanying art! The only issue I would take with your Haiku would be in regards to the first line ending with "the". I might tweak that to read Moon covers the sun/and darkness blankets the earth./Let the waves begin. But that's just me stretching words. This is just lovely, and I wish you luck in the contest. You have my vote!
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I love this one! Especially because you've found such exquisite accompanying art! The only issue I would take with your Haiku would be in regards to the first line ending with "the". I might tweak that to read Moon covers the sun/and darkness blankets the earth./Let the waves begin. But that's just me stretching words. This is just lovely, and I wish you luck in the contest. You have my vote!
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your great review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku about the changes during a eclipse when the tides of the ocean and atmospheric waves cover the earth in blankets if darkness.
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A very well-written haiku about the changes during a eclipse when the tides of the ocean and atmospheric waves cover the earth in blankets if darkness.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
I had to read your poem a couple of times. Breaking the first thought in the second line through me off. But other than that, you have a good haiku here with a description of the sun, the moon, and how they affect the tides.
Good job and good luck in the contest!
Susan
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I had to read your poem a couple of times. Breaking the first thought in the second line through me off. But other than that, you have a good haiku here with a description of the sun, the moon, and how they affect the tides.
Good job and good luck in the contest!
Susan
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from TommyWrites
This is a great haiku!
You did a very good job painting a picture in my mind. I could see it all so clearly, even without the picture.
Solar eclipse are amazing, marvelous really, which you've done a beautiful job pointing out in your short poem.
I think this will do rather well in the contest!
Best of luck,
TommyWrites~
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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This is a great haiku!
You did a very good job painting a picture in my mind. I could see it all so clearly, even without the picture.
Solar eclipse are amazing, marvelous really, which you've done a beautiful job pointing out in your short poem.
I think this will do rather well in the contest!
Best of luck,
TommyWrites~
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-Good syllable count
and nature imagery.
-You show the effects
of the eclipse very well,
including the resulting waves.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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-Nice image.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-Good syllable count
and nature imagery.
-You show the effects
of the eclipse very well,
including the resulting waves.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your review.
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You are welcome!
Comment from equestrik
This is an incredibly lovely entry for the 'Haiku' contest. That moon is brilliant. Your writing is well matched to the photo. I wish you the best in the contest.
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This is an incredibly lovely entry for the 'Haiku' contest. That moon is brilliant. Your writing is well matched to the photo. I wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review.
Comment from John Carey
Really enjoyed reading your poem, and learned something in the process! The picture is a good fit for the Haiku. Poem imagery is great (darkness blankets the earth). Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Really enjoyed reading your poem, and learned something in the process! The picture is a good fit for the Haiku. Poem imagery is great (darkness blankets the earth). Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your wonderful review.
Comment from roof35
You followed the rules and penned an excellent poem for the contest. Your illustration, of course, pairs perfectly and sets the stage for your words. Your author's notes were helpful. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2020
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You followed the rules and penned an excellent poem for the contest. Your illustration, of course, pairs perfectly and sets the stage for your words. Your author's notes were helpful. Nicely done.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your wonderful review.
