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Homecoming

To her, you are everything (see note)

21 total reviews 
Comment from patcelaw
Exceptional
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This is a poignant haiku for the contest. I wish you the best in the contest and in all you do.
Have a great day.
Patricia

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
    Thank you very much. I appreciate your kind support.
Comment from lyenochka
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Very nice reunion celebration poem. There are many rules to haiku that I learned here - still learning. But I see for this contest, they did not enforce those rules on you. Congratulations on your 2nd place win!!

You've done fabulously for someone who just joined last month. I hardly understood the whole promotion thing in those first few months. You've already won your first Review star and won contests! Welcome and congratulations!!

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
    Thank you for your review.
    You are right: I am fortunate that my poem was honored in the contest. I am also still learning. I didn't know there were so many types of poetry. I was told yesterday in a review that this poem is a senryu and not haiku because haiku is about nature and senryu is about human nature.

    I have noticed there are times rules are relaxed, especially around haikus. The one thing I know to be is strict on syllable count when writing haiku and I twice sent notes to contestants that their count was off by a syllable and should be fixed before the contest starts. But they each said in that particular contest, the syllables did not have to be exact as long as the second line was longer than the first and third. I conclude from this that we need to read each contest's rules carefully.
    I also agree with you how difficult it has been to understand how this site works in terms of promoting one's work and getting readers. I believe they should have an introductory letter explaining everything carefully and clearly. I have quite a bit of free time and send in entries to most contests so I guess my chances of doing well in one were higher than for some and I also feel I'm getting better as I write more. I wish you success in your writing here and everywhere else. I look forward to seeing some of your work.
reply by lyenochka on 29-Oct-2020
    Thank you, Cynthia.
    By the way, if you're interested in all those haiku rules, I suggest reading the notes that Gloria wrote to her haiku here: https://www.fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?id=969391
    She also wrote a tutorial on Fanstory so check out her portfolio. She's #1 poet a couple of years ago and she's still one of my favorites!
    Blessings,
    Helen
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
    Thank you for the tips. Blessings to you and yours.
Comment from equestrik
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Awe! The sweetness of a daddy and his daughter. That is a special bond and you have paid tribute to it well here with a charming photo and a good write.

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
    Thank you so much for reading my work.
Comment from harmony13
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The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line
says it all! Thank you for the author's notes. They were heart felt.
The artwork is perfect and compliments both the theme and words of
this poem.

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
    Thank you very much for your kind review.
Comment from Mia Twysted
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You can feel the heartbreak of the child with the words, "her still-wet cheek." Then the joy as you find out that, "Daddy did come back!" All little kids only wish for this more than anthing.

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Mark D. R.
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My memories of that scratchy beard is with my Grandfather. My Dad was clean-shavened. Regardless, you hit the relationship with our parents to a 't' - great image does accompany your Haiku posting.

IMHO ... italic or script font is unnecessary. In any case, I would increase your font size, which methinks will improve your presentation value to other FS reviewers.

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
    Thank you so much for your review and your sage advice!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written haiku about the child's joy when a father comes back after he was gone for a while. His prickly whiskers is most welcome on her cheek.

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from robyn corum
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Dear Mystery Writer,

(--wink--)

This was precious!! Before I read the post, just the title made my heart get all warm and fuzzy. Haha

There is nothing like a dad in a child*s life - especially a girl!

Nicely composed with a perfect syllable count.

Thanks and good luck!

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
    Thank you very much for reading my work.
Comment from Joanne Gill
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This is precious. I love this and the sentimental meaning behind it. His prickly whiskers roughly kiss her still wet cheek. Daddy did come back! Nicely done. ???lovely photo representation you chose.

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
    Thank you so much for reading my work.
Comment from jaded831
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Your poem touches the heart, and your author's notes adds to the experience. I usually dislike the feel of beards, but when it is a hug and kiss from someone you love, its the best thing in the world. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
    I feel the same way you do about beards :) Thank you for your kind review.