Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "Dream or Ghostly Visit?"Musings of an old man -2020
15 total reviews
Comment from equestrik
This is very interesting writing as far as this format. You wrote a well rhymed poem with a nice rhythm to it.I enjoyed it and even though it got creepy feeling, it did not get gruesome.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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This is very interesting writing as far as this format. You wrote a well rhymed poem with a nice rhythm to it.I enjoyed it and even though it got creepy feeling, it did not get gruesome.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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Thank you, I don't do gruesome...LOL
Comment from jake cosmos aller
always nice to encounter new poetry forms to try found three today that i will experiment with later. Regarding this poem, I like how it builds towards the supernatural ending
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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always nice to encounter new poetry forms to try found three today that i will experiment with later. Regarding this poem, I like how it builds towards the supernatural ending
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Jake, thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my prayer.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written domino rhyme poem about the ghostly presence on the beach that reveals itself on the breeze and the flames of the fire and goosebumps all over your body.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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A very well-written domino rhyme poem about the ghostly presence on the beach that reveals itself on the breeze and the flames of the fire and goosebumps all over your body.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Sandra, thank you take a nice cup on hot chocolate and sit by the fire a remedy for goosebumps. :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It is often our own imagination that scars us more than actual events. It is what we believe to be true, rather than what is actually true, although this is an atmospheric write giving me goose bumps too! Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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It is often our own imagination that scars us more than actual events. It is what we believe to be true, rather than what is actually true, although this is an atmospheric write giving me goose bumps too! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Dolly, thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my domino style poem.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
What a vivid imagination! This piece of writing is so descriptive I could imagine it all as you saw it. It was spooky how the ghostly guest puts goose bumps on your and even my skin.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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What a vivid imagination! This piece of writing is so descriptive I could imagine it all as you saw it. It was spooky how the ghostly guest puts goose bumps on your and even my skin.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Rebecca, thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my domino style poem.
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent domino rhyme poem, where the line 2/3 of the of the Previous stanza become lines 1 and 4 of the next, not quite what rhyming was meant for, but a clever method for change. An excellent post that rings of activity, nicely expressive and smooth, great rhyming as it is, well done good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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This is an excellent domino rhyme poem, where the line 2/3 of the of the Previous stanza become lines 1 and 4 of the next, not quite what rhyming was meant for, but a clever method for change. An excellent post that rings of activity, nicely expressive and smooth, great rhyming as it is, well done good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Roy, thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my domino style poem. It is a far stretch from my free verse, but the challenge was there right in front of me...
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Well done Jim
Comment from lyenochka
You did a great job with this complicated rhyme scheme! And I liked your great descriptions of the feeling of nostalgia mixed with a mystical experience.
Suggestion:
spent by your side feeling full of loves sweet nectar (love's)
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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You did a great job with this complicated rhyme scheme! And I liked your great descriptions of the feeling of nostalgia mixed with a mystical experience.
Suggestion:
spent by your side feeling full of loves sweet nectar (love's)
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Thank you and correction made.
Comment from Sugarray77
Wow, you have done an excellent job in following the Domino form, Jim. I loved your free verse flow (although it was a form). This seems to fit you very well. I also hope your health is ok. We have missed you in class!! Great job on this one.
Melissa
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2020
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Wow, you have done an excellent job in following the Domino form, Jim. I loved your free verse flow (although it was a form). This seems to fit you very well. I also hope your health is ok. We have missed you in class!! Great job on this one.
Melissa
Comment Written 26-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2020
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melissa. Thank you, I have laying low until surgery on The 5th. I have enjoyed the material you three ladies have been submitting. Thanks for this kind review, I think the meter class has helped me a bit.
Comment from BHCameron
Beautiful imagery that makes you feel as though you are there. The descriptives are vivid without feeling forced - a very natural flow that puts you there on the beach by the fire. Thank you for sharing this!
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2020
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Beautiful imagery that makes you feel as though you are there. The descriptives are vivid without feeling forced - a very natural flow that puts you there on the beach by the fire. Thank you for sharing this!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2020
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BH, I a very honored by your comments and six-star review. Thank you.
Comment from roof35
I see the tumbling and this is an excellent post for the writing club challenge. I think you have a typo you might want to fix, "fires glow" should probably be "fire's glow." I enjoyed reading this.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2020
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I see the tumbling and this is an excellent post for the writing club challenge. I think you have a typo you might want to fix, "fires glow" should probably be "fire's glow." I enjoyed reading this.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2020
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Roof, I do thank you very much. I missed that typo.
