I can't see...
A poem.19 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about trusting In God alone to guide us through our lives and protect us from the seen and unseen dangers on our path.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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A very well-written poem about trusting In God alone to guide us through our lives and protect us from the seen and unseen dangers on our path.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thanks Sandra, for these excellent comments and review, blessings Roy
Comment from Alchera
Ten lines that well describe Peter 5: 7 " Cast all your care on Him, He careth for you." Long ago my father and I were save on one frosty morning, on our way to Sydney market. My father had dreamt of his mother's death in Italy and he was not there near her death bed. Before leaving home he told me he didn't feel well about it (and I was only ten years old) but we had to leave for the market. We reached the hill top at Parklea and as we were driving downhill with the heavy load my father notice that the breaks were not working...it had been a miracle that morning trusting in God as we banked against a few very small tress and the engine of the truck stopped. Thank you Roy for such Australian family epiphany and tears now that I am seventy one!
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Ten lines that well describe Peter 5: 7 " Cast all your care on Him, He careth for you." Long ago my father and I were save on one frosty morning, on our way to Sydney market. My father had dreamt of his mother's death in Italy and he was not there near her death bed. Before leaving home he told me he didn't feel well about it (and I was only ten years old) but we had to leave for the market. We reached the hill top at Parklea and as we were driving downhill with the heavy load my father notice that the breaks were not working...it had been a miracle that morning trusting in God as we banked against a few very small tress and the engine of the truck stopped. Thank you Roy for such Australian family epiphany and tears now that I am seventy one!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thanks so much Tony, for these marvellous comments and a super review, blessings Roy
Comment from DeboraDyess
I feel you! Too many people 'follow their hearts'...right off the edge of a cliff. HOpefully, it's not a literal cliff, although I have no doubt that's happened, too.
I never thought I'd read the word 'myopic' in a poem, but you did it justice!
And so we should not trust our sense, and neither trust our hearts,
myopic vision have they both; this world's not set apart.
Such a great line!
I loved it and you used one of y favorite Bible verses! Thank you.
Blessings, Roy
Debs
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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I feel you! Too many people 'follow their hearts'...right off the edge of a cliff. HOpefully, it's not a literal cliff, although I have no doubt that's happened, too.
I never thought I'd read the word 'myopic' in a poem, but you did it justice!
And so we should not trust our sense, and neither trust our hearts,
myopic vision have they both; this world's not set apart.
Such a great line!
I loved it and you used one of y favorite Bible verses! Thank you.
Blessings, Roy
Debs
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thanks so much Deb, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I was horrified to read this and learn that you had been in a car accident. I always imagine the worst in such situations, so pictured you with broken bones, bruises and sprains. I was much reassured to read your notes and discover that there were no serios worries.
Stay Safe (virus AND vehicles)
Katherine
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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I was horrified to read this and learn that you had been in a car accident. I always imagine the worst in such situations, so pictured you with broken bones, bruises and sprains. I was much reassured to read your notes and discover that there were no serios worries.
Stay Safe (virus AND vehicles)
Katherine
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thanks so much Katherine, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from palmart
Great writing! "Faith has eyes" is the base of the poem and I find it as a very creative expression. "My heart do not see well" also brings a nice metaphor that points to a heart with glasses. Some investigations indicates that blind people "feel" colours, like the comparison you taught us. Adding no artwork helps imagination to fly higher!
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Great writing! "Faith has eyes" is the base of the poem and I find it as a very creative expression. "My heart do not see well" also brings a nice metaphor that points to a heart with glasses. Some investigations indicates that blind people "feel" colours, like the comparison you taught us. Adding no artwork helps imagination to fly higher!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thanks so much, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
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You´re very welcome, Gentleman!!
Have a nice time , Roy!!
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Thank you
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You´re welcome!
Comment from Gloria ....
Excellent verse with sound advice, Roy. The accident is exactly the way to describe it. Your rhyme and metre flow with your consistent rhythm making this a most enjoyable read today. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Excellent verse with sound advice, Roy. The accident is exactly the way to describe it. Your rhyme and metre flow with your consistent rhythm making this a most enjoyable read today. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thanks so much, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, I Can't See, speaks volumes about having faith in a God who never changes, so trust is constant. The world allows change that cannot always be trusted.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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This poem, I Can't See, speaks volumes about having faith in a God who never changes, so trust is constant. The world allows change that cannot always be trusted.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thanks so much Bill, for these excellent comments and review, blessings Roy
Comment from Jay Squires
such a well-constructed and wise poem, Roy. I can always count on that from you. With that lovely family you have, why don't you just give up driving? Let them take you where you want to go?
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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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such a well-constructed and wise poem, Roy. I can always count on that from you. With that lovely family you have, why don't you just give up driving? Let them take you where you want to go?
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Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Good idea Jay, thanks for your support and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
(night's on guard s/b nights--assuming you intend plural)
Startling, fresh, powerful--bonus internal rhymes: again/friend--car/hard--cheat/repeat--bend/ahead! Cheers. LIZ
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(night's on guard s/b nights--assuming you intend plural)
Startling, fresh, powerful--bonus internal rhymes: again/friend--car/hard--cheat/repeat--bend/ahead! Cheers. LIZ
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Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thanks so much Liz for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
