The Tethered Eagle
once more may he soar7 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the horror real events where we were locked down for stop the spreading of the virus that was let loose to ruin everything that was still good. The leaders start to blame each other and the people go bankrupt.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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A very well-written poem about the horror real events where we were locked down for stop the spreading of the virus that was let loose to ruin everything that was still good. The leaders start to blame each other and the people go bankrupt.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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thank you Sandra. I appreciate that and also hope you got an occasional smile at parts of it. :)
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Not really sure this meets the requirements of the contest... and it certainly does not appear to be 'a nod to Poe'. That is not to say I agree or disagree with the political statements you've presented... Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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Not really sure this meets the requirements of the contest... and it certainly does not appear to be 'a nod to Poe'. That is not to say I agree or disagree with the political statements you've presented... Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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it's the author's use (loosely, granted) of Poe's "The Raven."
Comment from kmowriter
A timely concept and enjoy the historical context but the rhetoric is rehashed sound bytes. It doesn't sound authentic. A poem in defense of the President would bear more weight if it embodies the idea without the cliches. Unless, of course, you're trying to be educational, in which case it is too biased and a bit dramatic to be didactic. Punctuation was shaky. Enjoyed the self-deprecating humor at the end!
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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A timely concept and enjoy the historical context but the rhetoric is rehashed sound bytes. It doesn't sound authentic. A poem in defense of the President would bear more weight if it embodies the idea without the cliches. Unless, of course, you're trying to be educational, in which case it is too biased and a bit dramatic to be didactic. Punctuation was shaky. Enjoyed the self-deprecating humor at the end!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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I guarantee you these are my thoughts, not rehashed anything, and I've a right to express them. This is my using (granted, loosely) Poe's The Raven to speak to what is an important time, more or less close to his meter. Am not being didactic nor am I teaching anything.
We all have our own opinions. These are mine.
Comment from Jay Squires
It's hard not to judge this on political content, so I'll stick with the mechanics.
You should take more time with editing your work.
it wenty all around the world; [WENTY? Well, I just realized you were making it a comic rhyme with twenty and aplenty. Okay.]
we're in out masks, [Do you mean in "our" masks?]
You've got a great sense of humor ... for a republican. Just kidding.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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It's hard not to judge this on political content, so I'll stick with the mechanics.
You should take more time with editing your work.
it wenty all around the world; [WENTY? Well, I just realized you were making it a comic rhyme with twenty and aplenty. Okay.]
we're in out masks, [Do you mean in "our" masks?]
You've got a great sense of humor ... for a republican. Just kidding.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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sorry I missed the "t". any more editing I need to make?
I appreciate you just kidding compliment.
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Hey, Trump did well in tonight's debate.
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I think he did, too. Do you ever watch OAN?
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a clever write and it hit the spot for me, it is inventive and a lot of fun. I loved the words 'aplenty' and 'wenty', and 'oughta'. The sarcasm and the tongue in cheek humour about the lockdown, I thought this a clever write and very entertaining, it's sure to be a WINNER! love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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This is a clever write and it hit the spot for me, it is inventive and a lot of fun. I loved the words 'aplenty' and 'wenty', and 'oughta'. The sarcasm and the tongue in cheek humour about the lockdown, I thought this a clever write and very entertaining, it's sure to be a WINNER! love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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thanks, Dolly! I appreciate your great review!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I loved your political commentary in your poem. I like how you show the President making the right choices and being attacked as well as sharing your own frustration with the endless concern. Well written and a unique take on the contest prompt.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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I loved your political commentary in your poem. I like how you show the President making the right choices and being attacked as well as sharing your own frustration with the endless concern. Well written and a unique take on the contest prompt.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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thank you very much!
Comment from royowen
Yes, it seems all over the world. There haven't been any locally generated cases of the virus here for awhile now, (only international returning, and they're quarantined anyway) I guess the term is isolate or desolate, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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Yes, it seems all over the world. There haven't been any locally generated cases of the virus here for awhile now, (only international returning, and they're quarantined anyway) I guess the term is isolate or desolate, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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Thank you, Roy! I appreciate it. I expect to get blasted by some.
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Bless you
