small blue ball
a hallowe'en poem4 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet!
I gave you your seventh vote.
Your poem delivered a well felt punch
It 's full of anguish ..
the son 's effort to make his mother know he was close by backfires and only causes the mother to despair even more ..
I felt for the poor mother .. your poem has an emotionally effect on the reader ..well done!
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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Ciao mystery poet!
I gave you your seventh vote.
Your poem delivered a well felt punch
It 's full of anguish ..
the son 's effort to make his mother know he was close by backfires and only causes the mother to despair even more ..
I felt for the poor mother .. your poem has an emotionally effect on the reader ..well done!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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Thanks for the encouraging review tempeste. Have a great weekend, cheers, j
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It?s a shame you missed the podium for one vote ..
Your entry deserved a ribbon
I hope you have a great weekend too
Ciao!
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Thanks for that. Your encouragement is
like a gold medal to me. Cheers, j
Comment from pome lover
wow. that is powerful.
Also different, unexpected, and though really sad, has a tender ending with the little ghost-child trying to comfort his mother.
Good job
Katharine - pomelover
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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wow. that is powerful.
Also different, unexpected, and though really sad, has a tender ending with the little ghost-child trying to comfort his mother.
Good job
Katharine - pomelover
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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Thanks for the encouraging review. It was fun to write, cheers, j
Comment from Huguette M. Forest-Coultry
I have trouble with the last line of the first stanza... the shrub and tub? That leaves me not knowing exactly what was meant by line. Am I to assume th boy drowned?
The photo is great, don't you wish a ball of a train were available in the files for art? Keep on writing, stay well and safe.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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I have trouble with the last line of the first stanza... the shrub and tub? That leaves me not knowing exactly what was meant by line. Am I to assume th boy drowned?
The photo is great, don't you wish a ball of a train were available in the files for art? Keep on writing, stay well and safe.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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Thanks for the great review. I changed that line and I find it much better. Cheers, j
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
This little poem packs quite a wallop.
It is so verrry sad. A parents worst fear.
And those of us who have no kids, like myself, can even feel that pain to some degree. I feel so very sad. So your poem was very well done.
The second part about the ball is heartfilling. It is so comforting to think there may be a place where this little boy has a blue ball and the memory and desire to make his Mom heal.
It is a wonderful piece. Brava!
I would give you six stars if the dropdown rating system let me.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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This little poem packs quite a wallop.
It is so verrry sad. A parents worst fear.
And those of us who have no kids, like myself, can even feel that pain to some degree. I feel so very sad. So your poem was very well done.
The second part about the ball is heartfilling. It is so comforting to think there may be a place where this little boy has a blue ball and the memory and desire to make his Mom heal.
It is a wonderful piece. Brava!
I would give you six stars if the dropdown rating system let me.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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Thanks for the insightful review and phantom star. I don't have kids either and never regretted my choice. Too much love for me to handle.. haha Cheers, j
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I do regret my choice. Though I know I would have been a constant nervous wreck. Blessings.
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Bless, j
