My Musician
The thunder of heartstrings silenced.14 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing a recent poem with us. I enjoyed the romantic artwork and colorful presentation. Your "silent instrument" metaphore is very effective. Well done- Joan
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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Thank you for sharing a recent poem with us. I enjoyed the romantic artwork and colorful presentation. Your "silent instrument" metaphore is very effective. Well done- Joan
Comment Written 18-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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Thanks, Joan. Take care
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Dallas!
Emotive and heartfelt.
Deep sense of sadness and longing.
I love the metaphorical reference of love being the song of life.
One note, if I may:
into the morrows (meaning tomorrow = morrows')
sea of loneliness = beautiful imagery
Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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Hello Dallas!
Emotive and heartfelt.
Deep sense of sadness and longing.
I love the metaphorical reference of love being the song of life.
One note, if I may:
into the morrows (meaning tomorrow = morrows')
sea of loneliness = beautiful imagery
Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 18-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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thanks for the correction
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Hope I helped.
diane
Comment from lancellot
A very interesting and somber tone you set up here. You did well in conveying a sense of loneliness.
notes:
{wondering}
through empty lyrics-
without a melody.
- do mean wondering as in thinking or wandering as walking aimlessly through?
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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A very interesting and somber tone you set up here. You did well in conveying a sense of loneliness.
notes:
{wondering}
through empty lyrics-
without a melody.
- do mean wondering as in thinking or wandering as walking aimlessly through?
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Comment Written 18-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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Thanks for the correction.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, My Musician, creates an allegorical search for a musician to play the lonely and noiseless instrument. Her being made musical by the one who knows her well. Nice.
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This poem, My Musician, creates an allegorical search for a musician to play the lonely and noiseless instrument. Her being made musical by the one who knows her well. Nice.
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Comment Written 18-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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Thanks for reviewing.