Fatherhood
A fictional Account of a hapless father35 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
These kind of people are unhappy with themselves and you should not take what they say personally. Pity is all you can feel as those who can't receive genuine love from a stranger, and they are not worth bothering with. A poignant write and as you say these kids spend a long time in jail, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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These kind of people are unhappy with themselves and you should not take what they say personally. Pity is all you can feel as those who can't receive genuine love from a stranger, and they are not worth bothering with. A poignant write and as you say these kids spend a long time in jail, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thank you Dolly. I appreciate your kind and generous comments. Being a parent was never meant to be easy, and the opportunity to get it wrong is always present. My personal opinion is, if you want to be a good parent, remember what your mom taught you.
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Your Mum sounds like a good woman x x x
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Fatherhood", is an extremely well-written, and deftly descriptive piece. It was a pleasure to both read, and review this talented poet's work. To me, this is a six, but sadly, I've run out of them. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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"Fatherhood", is an extremely well-written, and deftly descriptive piece. It was a pleasure to both read, and review this talented poet's work. To me, this is a six, but sadly, I've run out of them. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Hello Doll. It is always a pleasure. Thank you for your generous comments. I treasure you and your thoughts on my writings.
Hello, my pen-pushing friend.
as always, you're very welcome.
God bless you, take care, and keep safe!
the Duchess
Comment from Jasmine Girl
You are a good poet. The poem has a good rhythm that I assume the Metre is correct. It also rhymes.
What a sad poem. It looks like it is a fictional story.
Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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You are a good poet. The poem has a good rhythm that I assume the Metre is correct. It also rhymes.
What a sad poem. It looks like it is a fictional story.
Well done.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thank you. It is fictional, thank God. However, it is based on observance of some real life tragedies.
Comment from Boogienights
This may be fictional but it has a ring of truthfulness to it. I'm sure that this has happened to someone somewhere. An interesting poem, it kept my attention.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2020
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This may be fictional but it has a ring of truthfulness to it. I'm sure that this has happened to someone somewhere. An interesting poem, it kept my attention.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Mastery
Any father can relate to this poem, Nolan. We certainly hope we won't hav eto deal with such a situation, but many many fathers do, don't they?
I liked this stanza the best, my friend:
"My words fall upon deaf ears
Ignores me, but I know he hears
This boy will come to a bad end
His actions I cannot defend"
How can anyone do that to their bodies to that degree btw? Yikes!
Bless you, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2020
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Any father can relate to this poem, Nolan. We certainly hope we won't hav eto deal with such a situation, but many many fathers do, don't they?
I liked this stanza the best, my friend:
"My words fall upon deaf ears
Ignores me, but I know he hears
This boy will come to a bad end
His actions I cannot defend"
How can anyone do that to their bodies to that degree btw? Yikes!
Bless you, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 16-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2020
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Thank you Bob. I always know that you will give me your honest opinion on what I write. I count on that honesty as a guideline.
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Always, Nolan. :) Bob
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Always, Nolan. :) Bob
Comment from Janice Canerdy
My heart goes out to parents with totally out-of-control kids. Some of them are scornful of all forms of authority; they are threats to society.
Your poem is excellent--reflecting the desperation these parents feel.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2020
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My heart goes out to parents with totally out-of-control kids. Some of them are scornful of all forms of authority; they are threats to society.
Your poem is excellent--reflecting the desperation these parents feel.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2020
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Sadly there are parents who are undergoing this tragic situation everyday.
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Also, there are parents who have set a lousy example, then wonder what in the world went wrong when their kids jump track!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Father Hood
by nomi338
Hello, my friend,
Nice fictional poem about a father and son. Nice presentation. I like the picture. Fatherhood is one word.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2020
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Father Hood
by nomi338
Hello, my friend,
Nice fictional poem about a father and son. Nice presentation. I like the picture. Fatherhood is one word.
Gypsy
Comment Written 16-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2020
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I know. I at first toyed with idea of presenting the father as a hoodlum who was receiving the fruits of not being on the level. I just never made the change.
Comment from oNray
very good nomi338, nice rhyme, rhythm, and so very clear. i actually had one one start off this way. Thank God he changed to the good and is so amassing now.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2020
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very good nomi338, nice rhyme, rhythm, and so very clear. i actually had one one start off this way. Thank God he changed to the good and is so amassing now.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your review comments. Congratulations on the recovery.
Comment from Raul1
I think that this poem is very poetic. I like the strong emotions you have written in it. This is a real poem. Well written. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2020
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I think that this poem is very poetic. I like the strong emotions you have written in it. This is a real poem. Well written. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
S3 / L2 - the comma after ignores me not necessary
S4 / L4 - father hood's should be fatherhood's
Well crafted poem captures the essence of this boy spot on.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2020
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S3 / L2 - the comma after ignores me not necessary
S4 / L4 - father hood's should be fatherhood's
Well crafted poem captures the essence of this boy spot on.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2020
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Thank you.
