Time,Forever Lost
We are wasting our time54 total reviews
Comment from Fonda Little
My favorite part was, "The world's in turmoil, here and there,
while far too many do not care.", because you hit the nail on the head with this part of the poem. No one is perfect but we can try and trying makes all the difference!
The Lord led me to these verses after I read this,
2 Timothy 3:1-5 New International Version (NIV)
3 But mark this: There will be terrible times in the last days. 2 People will be lovers of themselves, lovers of money, boastful, proud, abusive, disobedient to their parents, ungrateful, unholy, 3 without love, unforgiving, slanderous, without self-control, brutal, not lovers of the good, 4 treacherous, rash, conceited, lovers of pleasure rather than lovers of God-- 5 having a form of godliness but denying its power. Have nothing to do with such people.
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My favorite part was, "The world's in turmoil, here and there,
while far too many do not care.", because you hit the nail on the head with this part of the poem. No one is perfect but we can try and trying makes all the difference!
The Lord led me to these verses after I read this,
2 Timothy 3:1-5 New International Version (NIV)
3 But mark this: There will be terrible times in the last days. 2 People will be lovers of themselves, lovers of money, boastful, proud, abusive, disobedient to their parents, ungrateful, unholy, 3 without love, unforgiving, slanderous, without self-control, brutal, not lovers of the good, 4 treacherous, rash, conceited, lovers of pleasure rather than lovers of God-- 5 having a form of godliness but denying its power. Have nothing to do with such people.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2020
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, in addition to the sound message, the rhyming rhythm is flawless and a pleasure to read both silently and aloud - in complete compliance with the prompt. Best wishes in the contest...
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In my opinion, in addition to the sound message, the rhyming rhythm is flawless and a pleasure to read both silently and aloud - in complete compliance with the prompt. Best wishes in the contest...
Comment Written 15-Oct-2020
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Shifting sands that are crushing our footsteps in time. Your poem captures this nostalgia so well. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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Shifting sands that are crushing our footsteps in time. Your poem captures this nostalgia so well. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2020
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Your true words admonish us all. It is way past time to open our eyes, see the mess, and purpose to do something about it. Well written!
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Your true words admonish us all. It is way past time to open our eyes, see the mess, and purpose to do something about it. Well written!
Comment Written 15-Oct-2020
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Your poems always have such an encouraging message and they are a pleasure to read. I don't just read them, I absorb your meaning and tuck it away in my mind so I won't forget your wonderful words. You might say I bookmark them in my mind, to use as you advise.
Ralf
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Your poems always have such an encouraging message and they are a pleasure to read. I don't just read them, I absorb your meaning and tuck it away in my mind so I won't forget your wonderful words. You might say I bookmark them in my mind, to use as you advise.
Ralf
Comment Written 15-Oct-2020
Comment from zanya
Interesting poetic reflections on the not-so- positive state of our world fuelled by our own human selfishness'far too many do not care'-a possible solution emerges towards the end 'We need togetherness again'
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Interesting poetic reflections on the not-so- positive state of our world fuelled by our own human selfishness'far too many do not care'-a possible solution emerges towards the end 'We need togetherness again'
Comment Written 15-Oct-2020
Comment from Gert sherwood
jaybird1
yes, I agree--the people on earth We are wasting our time
jaybird you have brought out the true fact that so many don't care and how we are ourselves are causing the turmoil we are experiencing .
Gert
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jaybird1
yes, I agree--the people on earth We are wasting our time
jaybird you have brought out the true fact that so many don't care and how we are ourselves are causing the turmoil we are experiencing .
Gert
Comment Written 15-Oct-2020
Comment from Mia Twysted
As always you are right. We need to start looking forward and planning on how we are going to do better by the world that has done so much for us.
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As always you are right. We need to start looking forward and planning on how we are going to do better by the world that has done so much for us.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2020
Comment from joycetreasures
Hello Jaybird,
I pray you are doing well. This is a beautiful inspirational poem about the time we have is loss forever. I concur, we are wasting time in pursuit of a better world. I truly believe if we try to be a little more kind, giving and forgiving. Your poems always make me think a little deeper about life. We all can do better to make this world better. Great rhyming within your poem. Thank you. Well done. Happy future writing:-)
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Hello Jaybird,
I pray you are doing well. This is a beautiful inspirational poem about the time we have is loss forever. I concur, we are wasting time in pursuit of a better world. I truly believe if we try to be a little more kind, giving and forgiving. Your poems always make me think a little deeper about life. We all can do better to make this world better. Great rhyming within your poem. Thank you. Well done. Happy future writing:-)
Comment Written 15-Oct-2020
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
Beautifully written poem. Good rhyming scheme. The problems facing us on earth needs our attention for rebirth. We need togetherness again with hope and faith we just might win. It certainly is a different world. I hope and Pray that it gets better . Well done.
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Beautifully written poem. Good rhyming scheme. The problems facing us on earth needs our attention for rebirth. We need togetherness again with hope and faith we just might win. It certainly is a different world. I hope and Pray that it gets better . Well done.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2020
