Time,Forever Lost
We are wasting our time54 total reviews
Comment from RShipp
'If we could halt the moving sun,
stop times progression on it's run;'
(What a great opening two lines.)
'We can't buy back, at any cost,
the precious time that we have lost.'
(Oh, so true.)
'We need togetherness again.' YES!
Enjoyed!
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'If we could halt the moving sun,
stop times progression on it's run;'
(What a great opening two lines.)
'We can't buy back, at any cost,
the precious time that we have lost.'
(Oh, so true.)
'We need togetherness again.' YES!
Enjoyed!
Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
Comment from Jasmine Girl
Yes. As we are getting older, we wish time would stand still so we will be here longer. I think as long as you are writing poetry, you are doing fine.
I like the optimistic ending.
Well done.
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Yes. As we are getting older, we wish time would stand still so we will be here longer. I think as long as you are writing poetry, you are doing fine.
I like the optimistic ending.
Well done.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Time, Forever Lost', is an extremely well-written, and deftly descriptive piece. It was a privilege, to both read, and review, this talented poet's work. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately, I've run out of them. I look forward to seeing your next post.
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"Time, Forever Lost', is an extremely well-written, and deftly descriptive piece. It was a privilege, to both read, and review, this talented poet's work. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately, I've run out of them. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2020
Comment from djsaxon
Great write. Strong ABAB throughout and a terrific thrust and flow. You set up the premise, remind us of where we are going wrong, and offer a resolution. Cheers - DJ
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Great write. Strong ABAB throughout and a terrific thrust and flow. You set up the premise, remind us of where we are going wrong, and offer a resolution. Cheers - DJ
Comment Written 16-Oct-2020
Comment from Boogienights
This is wonderful, your poem rhymes beautifully. A terrific message too, how we should use our time to try and make things better in this world. Thanks for sharing and Good luck in the contest.
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This is wonderful, your poem rhymes beautifully. A terrific message too, how we should use our time to try and make things better in this world. Thanks for sharing and Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2020
Comment from Eternal Muse
This is a great rhyming poem looking back at the time sent and wishing we could turn back the clock. And praying for togetherness, faith and love that can help overcome the difficult times we live in.
We need togetherness again.
With hope and faith we might just win.
We can't defy life's shifting sands,
winning this war is in our hands.
Good luck in the contest.
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This is a great rhyming poem looking back at the time sent and wishing we could turn back the clock. And praying for togetherness, faith and love that can help overcome the difficult times we live in.
We need togetherness again.
With hope and faith we might just win.
We can't defy life's shifting sands,
winning this war is in our hands.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2020
Comment from karenina
I always love your poems. I wonder if you were always this wise? Did perspective become clearer with age? Is there hope for me yet? I so agree with all you've said in verse and rhyme. The time is now. None of us are promised tomorrow... Karenina
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I always love your poems. I wonder if you were always this wise? Did perspective become clearer with age? Is there hope for me yet? I so agree with all you've said in verse and rhyme. The time is now. None of us are promised tomorrow... Karenina
Comment Written 16-Oct-2020
Comment from Gypsymooncat
So very true my friend. It is in our hands to fix the mess and win this fight.
As you always do, you've turned out a poem that's perfect in its rhyme and rhythm, while it delivers a message that hopefully will be heeded by all who read it. United we stand! Good luck in the contest xoxoxoxo
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So very true my friend. It is in our hands to fix the mess and win this fight.
As you always do, you've turned out a poem that's perfect in its rhyme and rhythm, while it delivers a message that hopefully will be heeded by all who read it. United we stand! Good luck in the contest xoxoxoxo
Comment Written 16-Oct-2020
Comment from royowen
I think if mankind had any chance to redeem itself, I think that time has long past. It's not a matter of "if" anymore, it's a matter of "when" referring to self destruction. A beautifully written a wise post in that immaculate rhyme and rhythm, well done, blessings Roy
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I think if mankind had any chance to redeem itself, I think that time has long past. It's not a matter of "if" anymore, it's a matter of "when" referring to self destruction. A beautifully written a wise post in that immaculate rhyme and rhythm, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Oct-2020
Comment from Ulla
Hi Jay, I couldn't agree more with your message within this wonderfully written poem. We certainly can't restore lost times and lost battles, but we could all make an effort for a more peaceful future. Too many don't seem to care, though. A tragic fact. All best. Ulla:)))
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Hi Jay, I couldn't agree more with your message within this wonderfully written poem. We certainly can't restore lost times and lost battles, but we could all make an effort for a more peaceful future. Too many don't seem to care, though. A tragic fact. All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 16-Oct-2020
