She Shades Her Eyes
True romance is in the eye of the beholder.6 total reviews
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
Really well-done poem.It seems so full of life, of heart, but with a mature understanding of the highs and lows of romance.
I thought the images were nice. I found myself quite drawn-in.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Really well-done poem.It seems so full of life, of heart, but with a mature understanding of the highs and lows of romance.
I thought the images were nice. I found myself quite drawn-in.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Thank you Cynthia for your excellent review and rating. It was the contrast of light and shadow in the image that inspired me. I'm glad you enjoyed it and I appreciate your comments.
Comment from writer_13
I liked your poem. It flowed well and the words fit the picture very nicely. I like the way the last line captures her expression in the picture as she realizes...this is what romance is!
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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I liked your poem. It flowed well and the words fit the picture very nicely. I like the way the last line captures her expression in the picture as she realizes...this is what romance is!
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Thanks so much for your excellent review and rating. I appreciate comments and encouraging words.
Comment from nor84
I wanted to give you a heads up. The contest announcement says to Write 6 line poem a poem that somehow incorporates the artwork to the left. This poem has more than six lines. You probably have time to fix it. Good luck.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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I wanted to give you a heads up. The contest announcement says to Write 6 line poem a poem that somehow incorporates the artwork to the left. This poem has more than six lines. You probably have time to fix it. Good luck.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thanks, just managed to squeeze it in.
Comment from LisaMay
I think you have captured the pleasure and the pain and the accompanying wariness of "too much joy; too much pain, too much life might hurt" really well. (Is it intentional that the last 2 words are in a smaller size?... it doesn't look right.)
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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I think you have captured the pleasure and the pain and the accompanying wariness of "too much joy; too much pain, too much life might hurt" really well. (Is it intentional that the last 2 words are in a smaller size?... it doesn't look right.)
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Thank you LisaMay for your excellent review and rating, and also for the heads up on the unintentional change in font. It has been corrected, thank you very much. I greatly appreciate your comments.
Comment from Carmen Ducharme
Nicely written poem I enjoyed it very much one never knows what true love is if we have to ask the question is this romance / love I hope you find it if have not experienced God Bless
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Nicely written poem I enjoyed it very much one never knows what true love is if we have to ask the question is this romance / love I hope you find it if have not experienced God Bless
Comment Written 13-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Thank you Carmen for your excellent rating and review. This poem is written strictly with the assigned image for the contest in mind. I saw the contrast between the sunlight above and the shadows beneath, that and the contrast between her bright teeth and dark shades, this lent itself to the subject of romance and the contrast of how different people view it as well.
Comment from Fonda Little
My favorite part was, "But it's in the shadows where true danger lies
beyond her bright, white pickets
cunningly it hides
like a snake in the shade of the tall grass.", because of your use of simile and imagery!
The Lord led me to this verse after I read this,
James 1:17
New International Version
17 Every good and perfect gift is from above, coming down from the Father of the heavenly lights, who does not change like shifting shadows.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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My favorite part was, "But it's in the shadows where true danger lies
beyond her bright, white pickets
cunningly it hides
like a snake in the shade of the tall grass.", because of your use of simile and imagery!
The Lord led me to this verse after I read this,
James 1:17
New International Version
17 Every good and perfect gift is from above, coming down from the Father of the heavenly lights, who does not change like shifting shadows.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Thank you Fonda for your excellent review and rating. This poem is written strictly with the assigned image for the contest in mind. I saw the contrast between the sunlight above and the shadows beneath, that and the contrast between her bright, white teeth and her dark shades, and I thought this lent itself to the subject of romance and the contrast of how different people view it as well. Thanks for your scripture verse reference. I usually don't right on the subject of romance but was preparing a Bible study on marriage and just happened to be reading Song of Solomon when I wrote this, thus the subject of romance.
