Savannah Love
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Comment from abbasjoy
I'm not one for writings about war, but I really like this introductory chapter, which as you stated will be a pre-cursor to the real story. The detail is good giving a true picture of what happens in war, with the men having to walk long distances in shoes that barely stay on their feet. Their clothes are ragged and they are past hungry. The details make the story come alive.
What makes it even more human is the letter Bradley writes to his pregnant wife. Who know whether he will even get home, never mind see his baby. Then there is his wife who will be having their child without her husband being there for moral support.
Great beginning and I am looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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I'm not one for writings about war, but I really like this introductory chapter, which as you stated will be a pre-cursor to the real story. The detail is good giving a true picture of what happens in war, with the men having to walk long distances in shoes that barely stay on their feet. Their clothes are ragged and they are past hungry. The details make the story come alive.
What makes it even more human is the letter Bradley writes to his pregnant wife. Who know whether he will even get home, never mind see his baby. Then there is his wife who will be having their child without her husband being there for moral support.
Great beginning and I am looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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My next post has to do with the next part of the Civil War, then I will get into the story and leave the war. Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Barbara,
I enjoyed this very much. I am a history manic. The Rebs mad coffee from chicory and roasted grain.
I didn't feel much Southern twang in the dialog, a few slight regionalisms spiced heere and there might make it sound a bit more authentic. Just a suggestion.
I think I'm going to enjoy this one--Ted
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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Dear Barbara,
I enjoyed this very much. I am a history manic. The Rebs mad coffee from chicory and roasted grain.
I didn't feel much Southern twang in the dialog, a few slight regionalisms spiced heere and there might make it sound a bit more authentic. Just a suggestion.
I think I'm going to enjoy this one--Ted
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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I am torn with the dialect. The books on writing I have state you should only use it sparingly. I am trying that. We'll see. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're right, people can use it to an over wrought level, especial when writing Southerners or African-Americans. But small tastes make someone come from and be of a place and time.
Good luck:)
Comment from Stalking Wolf
Looks like a good start to a story to me. Action, drama, good back ground detail, on who I assume will be major characters in story. Feels realistic. Enjoyed, look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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Looks like a good start to a story to me. Action, drama, good back ground detail, on who I assume will be major characters in story. Feels realistic. Enjoyed, look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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My actual novel is set in the 21st century, but we need this part, expecially for those who know nothing about the Civil War. I didn't want to do a lot of flashbacks. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, you did a great job writing this first chapter that tells the history of the battles that took place in the civil war. i enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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this is very well written, barbara, you did a great job writing this first chapter that tells the history of the battles that took place in the civil war. i enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. Please remember this story isn't about the civil war.
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i know, it's probably about the ancestors of the hero and heroine.
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Close.
Comment from purrfect tale
Sounds like this will be another interesting story. You already have me wondering what the main plot will be: reconstruction, a ghost story, at this point it could be anything and that fact makes it capture my imagination.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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Sounds like this will be another interesting story. You already have me wondering what the main plot will be: reconstruction, a ghost story, at this point it could be anything and that fact makes it capture my imagination.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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I am stretching myself. We'll see if I can pull it out. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
The agricultural South was ill-prepared to do battle with the Industrious North. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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The agricultural South was ill-prepared to do battle with the Industrious North. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from MizKat
Barbara - I can tell that this is going to be a very interesting book. You are such a great writer, I've never seen any mistakes in what you've written. Kat
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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Barbara - I can tell that this is going to be a very interesting book. You are such a great writer, I've never seen any mistakes in what you've written. Kat
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
Interesting start to your story, and a good sketching of the background, now I shall look forward to the next installment.
One correction I suggest -
ammunition. Let kill some blue bellies." - add apostrophe 's' - ammunition. Let's kill some blue bellies."
Patrick
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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Hi Barbara,
Interesting start to your story, and a good sketching of the background, now I shall look forward to the next installment.
One correction I suggest -
ammunition. Let kill some blue bellies." - add apostrophe 's' - ammunition. Let's kill some blue bellies."
Patrick
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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Thank you for your eagle eye. I will make the change. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
I love your historical background in this. You captured the flavor of the time with the dialogue and the letter written by Bradley. The remarks comment on how difficult the soldiers had it, without adequate food and clothing to keep them in good form. It is touching to think of these young men going off to war with the family they've left behind, in this case a pregnant wife. This makes an interesting start, and I'll be reading to see how things develop! judi
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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I love your historical background in this. You captured the flavor of the time with the dialogue and the letter written by Bradley. The remarks comment on how difficult the soldiers had it, without adequate food and clothing to keep them in good form. It is touching to think of these young men going off to war with the family they've left behind, in this case a pregnant wife. This makes an interesting start, and I'll be reading to see how things develop! judi
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome. It'll be interesting to see how these events will influence generations yet to come. judi
Comment from Shirley McLain
I enjoyed reading this first chapter very much. I love reading about the Cival War. I'm looking forward to the next one. Great job.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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I enjoyed reading this first chapter very much. I love reading about the Cival War. I'm looking forward to the next one. Great job.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
