You Never Know
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6146 total reviews
Comment from Nosha17
I guess, the message for us all is that life is full of surprises and hazards along the way, but if we are positive and have faith, things will turn out just fine. Lovely lines of rhyming verse to convey your sincere message. That wee boy will jump out of a cracker and surprise you one day. I am talking about an English Christmas cracker which you pull and there is a surprise inside! Enjoyable read. Faye
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I guess, the message for us all is that life is full of surprises and hazards along the way, but if we are positive and have faith, things will turn out just fine. Lovely lines of rhyming verse to convey your sincere message. That wee boy will jump out of a cracker and surprise you one day. I am talking about an English Christmas cracker which you pull and there is a surprise inside! Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Faye, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) I used to buy my kids the English crackers each Christmas at an international store :-) Brooke
Comment from robina1978
A lovely picture as is the one on your profile page. Basically you are saying we don't know many things in this poem with rhyme and meter.
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A lovely picture as is the one on your profile page. Basically you are saying we don't know many things in this poem with rhyme and meter.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
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Ine, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Adri7enne
Nice to think that happiness might pop up anywhere. I guess that's what having an optimistic viewpoint is all about. Sawyer's so cute, easily amused by the shopping bag. Well done, Brooke.
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Nice to think that happiness might pop up anywhere. I guess that's what having an optimistic viewpoint is all about. Sawyer's so cute, easily amused by the shopping bag. Well done, Brooke.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Adrienne :-) Brooke
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Brooke,
Thought provoking nice piece of poetry beautifully depicting its theme!
Wording is simple as well as impressive.
Smooth flow with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
These lines are particularly noteworthy:
"You never know when fireflies
might spark in dead of night --
when every star has dimmed and died,
but then there comes new light."
Excellent!
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Hello Brooke,
Thought provoking nice piece of poetry beautifully depicting its theme!
Wording is simple as well as impressive.
Smooth flow with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
These lines are particularly noteworthy:
"You never know when fireflies
might spark in dead of night --
when every star has dimmed and died,
but then there comes new light."
Excellent!
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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RP, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from MisinformedPoet
I love the form of this poem, with the 'you'll never know' negative line, ending each stanza with a positive 'but then there'.
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I love the form of this poem, with the 'you'll never know' negative line, ending each stanza with a positive 'but then there'.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Misinformed Poet, thank you for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
No we don't, and that's a certainty. Most normally we don't like surprises, but the way you put it makes me want one. I've experienced good luck with all three events, but am somewhat leery about closing my eyes. Excellent ballad form and alternate line rhyming. Kenny
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No we don't, and that's a certainty. Most normally we don't like surprises, but the way you put it makes me want one. I've experienced good luck with all three events, but am somewhat leery about closing my eyes. Excellent ballad form and alternate line rhyming. Kenny
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
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Kenny, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from rama devi
True--you never know!~~
Uplifting and well penned with fluid flow, flawless meter, good rhyming and great imagery to convey the theme. Sounds like a song lyric with the bouncy beat. Nice presentation. Superb phonetics with all those S sounds in the last stanza, especially.
Good alliteration of D here:
might spark in dead of night --
when every star has dimmed and died,
Nice poem.
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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True--you never know!~~
Uplifting and well penned with fluid flow, flawless meter, good rhyming and great imagery to convey the theme. Sounds like a song lyric with the bouncy beat. Nice presentation. Superb phonetics with all those S sounds in the last stanza, especially.
Good alliteration of D here:
might spark in dead of night --
when every star has dimmed and died,
Nice poem.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
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Thank you, rama devi :-) I appreciate your thoughtful observations. Brooke
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Comment from Gargantuan2
Surprises are nice sometimes, hopefully most of them. This one looks like it was a playful stunt. That must be a pretty big shopping bag.. hehe.
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Surprises are nice sometimes, hopefully most of them. This one looks like it was a playful stunt. That must be a pretty big shopping bag.. hehe.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
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Gargantuan, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from ArtGal
Brooke, just happened to stop by and so glad I did. This is another that I like so very much. We never really know when something happens and surprises us with happiness. May we hang on and take a chance, because we'll never know if we don't. BTW, love the pic of Sawyer in the shopping bag, and I bet he had fun. . .Sharon
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Brooke, just happened to stop by and so glad I did. This is another that I like so very much. We never really know when something happens and surprises us with happiness. May we hang on and take a chance, because we'll never know if we don't. BTW, love the pic of Sawyer in the shopping bag, and I bet he had fun. . .Sharon
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Sharon, for the visit and the review :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. And I'll stop by when I can.
Comment from CHIGYSISKI
I LIKE THIS POEM AND I LIKE THIS CHILD-SAWYER I BELIEVE.HE IS SO CUTE,HE COULD DO VERY WELL AS A CHILD MODEL. I LIKE YOUR POEMS- THIS ONE TOO! BECAUSE THEY GIVE HOPE IN HOPELESS SITUATIONS THAT PREVAIL AROUND THE WORLD TODAY.I DON'T KNOW ABOUT OTHER PEOPLE,BUT I DO NEED RAYS OF LIGHT IN LIFE'S ENDLESS TUNNELS.SOMETIMES WE JUST SEEM TO GET OUT OF ONE BAD EVENT ONLY TO WALK STRAIGHT INTO ANOTHER GLOBAL CRISIS. THANKS!!
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I LIKE THIS POEM AND I LIKE THIS CHILD-SAWYER I BELIEVE.HE IS SO CUTE,HE COULD DO VERY WELL AS A CHILD MODEL. I LIKE YOUR POEMS- THIS ONE TOO! BECAUSE THEY GIVE HOPE IN HOPELESS SITUATIONS THAT PREVAIL AROUND THE WORLD TODAY.I DON'T KNOW ABOUT OTHER PEOPLE,BUT I DO NEED RAYS OF LIGHT IN LIFE'S ENDLESS TUNNELS.SOMETIMES WE JUST SEEM TO GET OUT OF ONE BAD EVENT ONLY TO WALK STRAIGHT INTO ANOTHER GLOBAL CRISIS. THANKS!!
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Chigysiski, for your gracious comments and generous sixth star :-) Brooke
